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Yoda's House of Pancakes ™

James Howell


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Sexe : Male
Statut : Marié(e)
Age : 30
Zodiaque: Cancer

Ville : CINCINNATI
Région : Ohio
Pays: US
Date d’inscription :: 27/04/2006

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vendredi, janvier 18, 2008 

They charge. Lightsabers clash, illuminating the darkness with bright yellow flashes. Palpatine is the aggressor. He pushes Plagueis down the hallway. After an intense first round of fighting, the two engage in a saber lock and spin, placing twenty feet of air in between them. Palpatine uses this break to make a quick flick of the wrist.

127. CLOSE ON LIGHTING PANEL

A button turns from red to green, and the lights come back on.

128. REGULAR ANGLES

Plagueis attacks, and attacks hard. He forces Palpatine down the hall again. In a swift move, Plagueis forces his opponent's lightsaber down, and Force-pushes him. Palpatine goes airborne, sailing through an open door that leads into the dining area.

128. DINING AREA

Palpatine crashes on top of a table, splitting it and falling onto the floor. His lightsaber flies out of his hand and rolls against the wall.. Plagueis enters. Palpatine fire lightning, which Plagueis easily blocks with his sword.

Plagueis

I never fall for the same trick twice.

Palpatine

Then I'll try something new!

Palpatine launches a chair. It hits Plagueis in the face. He stumbles against the wall and drops his lightsaber. Palpatine charges him. He punches him in the face. Plagueis answers with a kick to the stomach. They grab each other by the shoulders and stake turns slamming the other against various portions of the wall. Palpatine throws his Master down and runs for his saber. Before he can reach it, Plagueis trips him. Palpatine falls, and reaches for his saber with the Force. Plagueis uses the Force too, to send the saber flying to the other side of the room. They jump up simultaneously, each reaching out for their swords. They grab them, ignite, and attack the other synchronously. Palpatine pushes his mentor through a second door that leads to The Bridge.

129. INT. DOCKING BAY

Palpatine's shuttle enters the docking bay, and lands.

130. INT. BRIDGE

The battle continues. Palpatine and Plagueis go at each other with the professionalism of trained fighters but the ruthlessness of power-hungry Sith. They take cheap shots at one another, and take care to make sure their blades cut up everything in the room. Palpatine pushes Plagueis, sending him sprawling backward over a chair. The Sith holocron flies out of Plagueis's tunic, and is crushed under the weight of his body. No one notices. Plagueis rises quickly, but does not attack. He raises his left hand, staring directly into Palpatine's eyes. Palpatine's head explodes with pain. He falls to his knees, his hands gripping his temples, his face lowered.

Plagueis

Did you really believe you could overthrow me and take my place as the Master? I am Darth Plagueis, the Wise. How will history remember you? Sidious the Lover? You are pathetic. I could never love you. No one could.

Plagueis's words have a deep impact on Palpatine. His resolve is renewed. He suddenly breaks the brain squeeze, and as Plagueis sword falls toward him, he greets it with his own.

131. CLOSE ON PALPATINE

He raises his face. His eyes have transformed into the red and yellow hues of the Sith.

132. REGULAR ANGLES

Plagueis is stunned. Palpatine charges, and attacks him with a speed and ferocity never seen before. The sabers slice through low hanging wires overhead. The lights go out, and the sparking wires create a strobe effect. Plagueis cannot compete with Sidious's speed and skill, and his apprentice's blade severs his right arm. His lightsaber flies into Palpatine's free hand. Palpatine kicks him, and Plagueis skids backwards and falls down.

133. ANGLE ON PALPATINE, AS SEEN FROM PLAGUEIS'S EYES

Palpatine moves toward him. When the sparks fade and darkness falls, Palpatine takes on the appearance of an old man, wrinkled and scarred. Another spark is generated, filling the room with light, and Palpatine looks normal. Plagueis realizes that he has seen the future. Palpatine will win, and become the Master.

134. REGULAR ANGLES

Palpatine places his boot against Plagueis's throat.

Palpatine

I am going to make this as painful as possible.

Plagueis raises his remaining limb and Force-pushes Palpatine. Palpatine skids across the floor and crashes into a wall. Plagueis rises, takes one last look at his apprentice, and runs.

135. DOCKING BAY

Plagueis enters the docking bay, and without hesitation, climbs onto Palpatine's shuttle. Palpatine arrives in time to see the shuttle rise up and take off into outer space.

136. PALPATINE'S SHUTTLE- COCKPIT

Plagueis sits in the driver's seat, handling the controls with his remaining limb. The ship blasts into hyperspace. He punches more buttons.

Navicomputer

(V.O.)

Auto pilot has been engaged.

Plagueis leans back into the chair, exhausted. He reaches into his pocket for the holocron, doesn't feel it, and frantically searches his body.

Plagueis

Nooooooooo!!!!

137. NEUTRALIZER- BRIDGE

CLOSE ON small pile of debris that was once Darth Trepid's holocron. A pair of boots enter the frame, followed shortly by a hand that scoops up the pieces.

138. REGULAR ANGLES

Palpatine gazes at the crumbs, crumbles them in his fist, and angrily throws them across the room. He then walks to the view screen, and stares into the vastness of space.

139. PALPATINE'S SHUTTLE- BEDROOM

Plagueis lays down on the bed, and closes his eyes. His drifts off to sleep. He is awakened when a lightsaber ignites from under the bed and juts up through his chest. He screams and gurgles.

140. PLAGUEIS'S POINT OF VIEW

His head turns. Slowly, a little boy, ten years old or so, emerges from under the bed and stares him in the eye.

141. REGULAR ANGLES

Plagueis stumbles out of bed, pushing the boy out of his way. He stumbles across the room and exits the room.

142. PALPATINE'S SHUTTLE-COCKPIT-CONTINUOUS

Plagueis half walks/half crawls through the cockpit. He climbs to his knees and looks out into space, just like his pupil is doing at the very moment. Maul follows behind, standing silent, keeping guard.

Palpatine

(V.O.)

This is my apprentice, whom I have been secretly training for many years now. It will be he and I, not you, that will oversee the Sith's rise to revenge.

Plagueis

You have done well…Master…Sidious.

Plagueis dies. Maul bends over him, checking for a pulse. There is none.

Palpatine

(V.O.)

Apprentice?

Maul

Yes, Master?

Palpatine

You have served me well. Return to me and receive your reward.

143. EXT. NEUTRALIZER

Palpatine's shuttle enters the larger ship.

144. INT. NEUTRALIZER-BRIDGE

Maul enters, and kneels before Palpatine.

Palpatine

You have proven yourself a worthy student. Now is the time for you to take your place at my side. Henceforth, you shall be known as… Darth Maul.

Maul

Thank you Master.

Palpatine holds up a tattoo gun.

Palpatine

Now, for your reward- the first of your Sith tattoos.

Maul smiles in anticipation.

145. EXT. CORUSCANT- JEDI TEMPLE

To establish.

146. JEDI TEMPLE- HALLWAY

Mace Windu and Yoda walk down the hallway, talking.

Mace

The final report from Toggin indicates Marzan Antilles, Warren Antonis, Ronan Sneed, and Virzi Takassa were all killed by the rioters. Portions of remains were found at the Sneed mansion, but they were too consumed by flames to provide forensic details.

Yoda

Killed by untrained civilians, four Jedi are. Most unusual, this is. Most suspicious, this is.

Mace

You suspect foul play?

Yoda

What to suspect, I know not. Many evil deeds of late, there have been. Bodies found at Pylar, lightsaber wounds those have. Know this, I do. Growing stronger, the dark side of the Force, is.

147. INT. NEUTRALIZER- BRIDGE

Palpatine stands alone, face concealed with a hood, talking with a holographic image of Nute Gunray of the Trade Federation.

Nute

The Senate has given us our trade franchise. Soon, we will be very powerful.

Palpatine

Very good, Viceroy. You may begin building your army.

Nute

Thank you, Lord Sidious.

The hologram fades. Darth Maul steps out of the shadows. His face has been redecorated with some of the black Sith tattoos that he will later be famous for.

Palpatine

All is going as foreseen. We will have war. The galaxy will be torn apart, and we will rebuild it in our image. Nothing can stop us now.

148. EXT. NAR SHADDAA- SLAVE VILLAGE- DUSK

The slave village is a scene of hopelessness and despair. The streets bustle with humans and aliens who have lost everything. A man with no legs sits on the corner, almost but not quite dead. Another man gets beaten in the middle of the street. The passersby walk on, oblivious. Just another day on Nar Shaddaa.

Through the crowd emerges Shmi Skywalker. The days of being a senator's daughter are far behind her. Her clothes are raggedy and torn. Her face has taken on a more rugged look, and she appears forlorn and weary. The life of a slave hits you hard, and fast. She carries a basketful of clothes.

She pauses a moment to watch the setting sun. She sets down the basket, and as the camera pans down her body it reveals a large pregnant belly.

149. SHOT OF SETTING SUN

It sets low upon the city. The sky is a vibrant mixture of blue, pink, and purple.

150. MEDIUM SHOT OF SHMI

Her hand touches her belly, and she gently caresses her growing child. For a moment, she thinks that everything will be alright.

151. WIDE ANGLE

Shmi stands in the center of the frame, her back to the camera. In the background, to the right, the sun over Nar Shaddaa slips slowly behind the city skyline.

IRIS OUT TO BLACK

END CREDITS

DJ Maul aka Deej

 
OK all caught up finally! sorry for the delays there.

Im gonna dwell on this story some more before I make any long winded style comments LOL but I will say that for the most part it was very well done.

Im glad in a way it was fast paced and rather short but in another way Im sad its ended already.
 
Publié par DJ Maul aka Deej le vendredi, janvier 18, 2008 - 9:45
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Yoda's House of Pancakes ™
James Howell

 
Short??? LOL! If you take into account that one page equals roughly one minute of screen time, if this were made into a movie it would be almost three hours long LOL

I can't wait to hear your critique. I know you'll be honest with me.
 
Publié par Yoda's House of Pancakes ™ le samedi, janvier 19, 2008 - 2:54
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Elunella of the Silver Rose
Audra Weiker

 
Nicely done. Have to echo Deej, though (sorry Deej!) and say that I'm sorry it ended already. Oh, well. All good stories have to end sometime. You came up with a good one. Will we be seeing more from you in the future??? I hope so!!!!
 
Publié par Elunella of the Silver Rose le samedi, janvier 19, 2008 - 12:46
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Yoda's House of Pancakes ™
James Howell

 
Will we be seeing more from you in the future???
Yeah, you haven't seen the last of me yet, though this is probably the only Star Wars fanfic I'll ever write. I'm currently working on a short story, a western (sorta) titled "The Black Rose". When I'm finished I'll send you guys a copy to evaluate.
 
Publié par Yoda's House of Pancakes ™ le samedi, janvier 19, 2008 - 2:57
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Pug

 
Bravo!!!!! That was AWESOME!! Very clever how Anakin came to be conceived... and Shmi's real identity... cool stuff my friend! I thought you did a very nice job on Plagueis as well... he reminded me a bit of a vampire...

Sorry it took me so long to finish this one up... but I enjoyed every second of it! :D
 
Publié par Pug le vendredi, janvier 25, 2008 - 1:40
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Scott
Scott Salyers

 
WOW!!My friend you done a very good job!!I just happened on this tonight by clicking on your blog about the cadavers and found STAR WARS STUFF LOL!!I read it completely thru and loved it!!I think Im going to go read some of the STAR WARS books I have that I havent read yet LOL!!Which is a lot!!!There is soooooooooo much I get into that I dont have time to read but your Story about STAR WARS has me pumped!!Good job buddy and what Star Wars book should I read ??
 
Publié par Scott le mercredi, février 20, 2008 - 7:20
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James Howell

 
You should probably start with "Shadows of the Empire". It chronicles the events between "The Empire Strikes Back" and "Return of the Jedi", and is a really good read.
 
Publié par Yoda's House of Pancakes ™ le mercredi, février 20, 2008 - 7:32
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