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Ron Bass


Last Updated: 12/23/2009

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Gender: Male
Status: Single
Age: 17
Sign: Aries

City: EASTSIDE 96744
State: Hawaii
Country: US
Signup Date: 9/26/2006

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July 9, 2009 - Thursday 

Current mood:  optimistic
Category: Life

Wait and see………..

All these niggaz talking shit tryin to front like their big

Seems like everyone in the school wants to hate on this kid.

All types of bitches have jealousy in their voice.

But it helps knowing that when Im leaving their girls moist.

And that's majority reason why I hate most faggots.

I've been taking all of it, when they hated my dada shoes and Jordan jackets.

Fat ass kids tryin to get a rise out of me thinking they call shots.

Well all see when I snap, and u all get popped.

I'm learning that highschool is full of little treacherous bitches.

In a world of mistakes, government faults and glitches.

Everyone likes to joke but that's not why I'm here.

Ima spit transparent and let's make sure that Im clear.

If you don't like me oh well learn to speak and behave.

Dealing with racist jokes, they calling me slave.

But apparently they don't know that blacks were the originals made.

Day to day fucks but I try to be humble.

But sumtime I wonder how they'd act when they see what my fist do.

I learned to control my internal rages, plus too fast it seems time ages.

Their fool's whos minds are empty & spacious.

So now ima slow the flow and simply turn the pages.

*iiM REAllY G0iNG t0 MiSS Y00h!

 
YOU KNOW THA LINE WHERE IT SAYS
"Ima spit transparent and let's make sure that Im clear."
II THINK IT KIND FAWKS UWP THE FLOW A LITTLE...... ONLY CAUSE IT DOESNT FLOW THE PROGRESSION AND THA SYLLABLE RHYTHM.
I THINK YOU SHOULD TRY DOING IT WITH
" IMA SPIT TRANSPARENT AND MAKE SURE THAT IM CLEAR"

AND WHERE IT SAYS
"But sumtime I wonder how they'd act when they see what my fist do."
I THINK IT SHOULD BE SOMETHING LIKE UHM............
"BUT I WONDER WHAT THEY'D SAY WHEN MY FISTS TURNS EM TO RUBBLE"
IT RYHMES AND IT FITS IN BETTER WITH THA PROGRESSION

SORRY I DONT MEAN TO DIS YOUR WORK OR ANYTHING KAUSE LORD KNOWS ITS TIGHT.
BUHT I JUST THOUGHT YOU MIGHT LIKE SOME CONSTRUCTIVE CRITISISM.
SORRY IF IT OFFENDS YOU.
ITS JUST SUGGESTIONS.  :)

 
Posted by *iiM REAllY G0iNG t0 MiSS Y00h! on July 10, 2009 - Friday - 10:58 AM
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*iiM REAllY G0iNG t0 MiSS Y00h!

 
DOES WHAT I SAID MAKE SENSE TO YOU ABOUT THA RAP??
 
Posted by *iiM REAllY G0iNG t0 MiSS Y00h! on July 10, 2009 - Friday - 12:09 PM
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