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Amanda Joy


Last Updated: 11/17/2009

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Status: Single
City: Fremantle
Country: AU

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Tuesday, September 08, 2009 

Category: Writing and Poetry


Once you give something
wings you have to treat it differently
because the bones are hollow-
just the heat coming off your neck up close
might cause an updraft that could send it higher
than the sound of our breathing, past
the fist-shaped clouds and their drizzle
past the pelicans and stars

There was an address written on her palm
that’s been smeared by yours
She can’t remember giving you the keys
You can’t remember locking up the house

Every other word here is the possessive you both lack
each day is its’ consequence

You’re driving through the night with her head
on your thigh
her white hand on your knee
into the pink morning where the world is all
keys and keyholes
where there’s roadhouse coffee and a quiet
place near a dry creek bed to do things
with mouths other than speaking

Billions of eyes have slept through this
With no sleep to wake from
yours can’t see past it
It’s been days since she’s taken the steering wheel
She says movement is her only peace
opening the window

You draw a concentric circle around her
to see what gathers outside
Sweep up your tracks behind you
keep them in the glove box with the maps

At the appearance of heat puddles
ahead in the middle of the road
you sing her bridges of outlined plans
knowing she is calmed
by the weight of your intention

You use fuzzy words
because the clear ones are all being used
back at the supermarket and the primary school
and you know her ears are tired of them

Over and over you look at each other
hardly recognising yourselves in this heat
You stop the car, lean over to kiss her in the centre
of her chest, she untangles her sunburnt legs
from the dashboard and smiles a distance
you can’t turn back from

A billion birds perched in the clouds look down
and are blinded by the glare from the windscreen




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US~Dominvs Caelvm~AF
Brenton Hawkins

 
Brilliantly conceptualized and executed. 

in a word, lovely.

Truly a remarkable work.

well done.

~Brent~

 
Posted by US~Dominvs Caelvm~AF on Tuesday, September 08, 2009 - 06:54 AM
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Amanda
Amanda Joy

 
Cheers Brent.. way too generous.. but thanks you anywhoos..

A.Joy

 
Posted by Amanda on Tuesday, September 08, 2009 - 09:32 AM
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(Will)-o'-the-Wisp

 
Woohoo! Stunning!

 
Posted by (Will)-o'-the-Wisp on Tuesday, September 08, 2009 - 09:00 AM
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Amanda
Amanda Joy

 
very succinct today Will ;)

 
Posted by Amanda on Tuesday, September 08, 2009 - 09:31 AM
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(Will)-o'-the-Wisp

 
She misses the 'mula-mula' days when 'her heart still beats like small pink feet on red earth.'
But she's inside a car on a red hot day down a country road,
can't get out, just gives her thoughts wings...

There, that's more than succinct :)

You'd be surprised what 'cabin fever'
is like in my place :(

 
Posted by (Will)-o'-the-Wisp on Tuesday, September 08, 2009 - 11:13 PM
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arrowseye (æ)

 
a considered characteristic and utterly brilliant poem ms. amanda joy. my mind spun with the way you pivoted this line..

the fist-shaped clouds and their drizzle
past the pelicans and stars

and the whole knowing journey of this innocent amazement...and so very now...and here...and you write like tomorrow wants us to be. ae.


 
Posted by arrowseye (æ) on Tuesday, September 08, 2009 - 09:19 AM
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Amanda
Amanda Joy

 
Thanks AE! I think the cabin fever is slowly easing its grip on me after having spent winter in town.. still bloody cold though.. my imagination is heading for warmer climes to wait for me :)

A.Joy
x

 
Posted by Amanda on Tuesday, September 08, 2009 - 09:31 AM
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Si
Si Philbrook

 
WOW! Now this is what myspace has been missing. Stunning poem, really.

Many more please. (see I've said nice things and not even taken the mick, that is how good this is)

Si
 
Posted by Si on Tuesday, September 08, 2009 - 10:35 AM
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Amanda
Amanda Joy

 
Ha! and how bad do I feel! I was just over your way being really rude! :)

 
Posted by Amanda on Tuesday, September 08, 2009 - 10:41 AM
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Si
Si Philbrook

 
I think you need to practice your "rude"! hahahahaha

It is so good to see you back here.

Si
 
Posted by Si on Tuesday, September 08, 2009 - 10:49 AM
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Amanda
Amanda Joy

 
I've been practising my rude in the mirror for weeks Si!
Maybe typing it requires a little sharpening..

It's good to be back too :)

 
Posted by Amanda on Tuesday, September 08, 2009 - 11:24 AM
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Peter
Peter Doyle

 
Stunning. Absolutely. : )
 
Posted by Peter on Tuesday, September 08, 2009 - 10:50 AM
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Amanda
Amanda Joy

 
Thanks Peter!
That must be a sunRISE given which side of this island you're on..

 
Posted by Amanda on Tuesday, September 08, 2009 - 11:25 AM
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Peter
Peter Doyle

 
Sunset actually, from Kho Chang in Thailand. : )
 
Posted by Peter on Wednesday, September 09, 2009 - 10:31 AM
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Amanda
Amanda Joy

 
oooh! noyce!  :)

 
Posted by Amanda on Thursday, September 10, 2009 - 10:40 AM
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Michael (隠者)

 
Beautiful.

 
Posted by Michael (隠者) on Tuesday, September 08, 2009 - 11:14 AM
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Amanda
Amanda Joy

 
x

 
Posted by Amanda on Tuesday, September 08, 2009 - 11:25 AM
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GreenTea with Brownrice
Clint Rhubart

 
"she untangles her sunburnt legs
from the dashboard and smiles a distance
you can’t turn back from
"

Loving every word of this Amanda... although that smile really touched me.

~Clint
 
Posted by GreenTea with Brownrice on Tuesday, September 08, 2009 - 11:53 AM
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Amanda
Amanda Joy

 
I'm glad that smile touched you Clint :)

 
Posted by Amanda on Tuesday, September 08, 2009 - 11:54 AM
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Sigerson
D Sigerson

 
Reminds me of a recent relationship, her increasing need for fuzzy words, but she kept drifting farther and farther away.
 
Posted by Sigerson on Tuesday, September 08, 2009 - 12:09 PM
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Amanda
Amanda Joy

 
.. and then a good updraft.. and then...

 
Posted by Amanda on Tuesday, September 08, 2009 - 12:23 PM
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sean reddan

 
Do you like the word "exceptional"? - well this is!!

 
Posted by sean reddan on Tuesday, September 08, 2009 - 01:07 PM
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Amanda
Amanda Joy

 
:)

 
Posted by Amanda on Thursday, September 10, 2009 - 10:40 AM
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Ava

 
love this, it's wonderful..
 
Posted by Ava on Tuesday, September 08, 2009 - 04:06 PM
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Amanda
Amanda Joy

 
Thanks Ava!
Always good to see you in here :)

 
Posted by Amanda on Thursday, September 10, 2009 - 10:40 AM
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Barbara
Barbara Kausteklis

 
I love this!

 
Posted by Barbara on Tuesday, September 08, 2009 - 05:22 PM
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Amanda
Amanda Joy

 
Thanks so much Barbara!

 
Posted by Amanda on Thursday, September 10, 2009 - 10:41 AM
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Second Sight
Vai King

 
"smiles a distance
you can’t turn back from"

Now that is truly far...........
ss


 
Posted by Second Sight on Tuesday, September 08, 2009 - 05:27 PM
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Amanda
Amanda Joy

 
by any gauge I would say so yes ;)

 
Posted by Amanda on Thursday, September 10, 2009 - 10:41 AM
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John(Coyote)
John castellenas

 
A amazing poem. Such strength in your words.
                        Coyote
 
Posted by John(Coyote) on Tuesday, September 08, 2009 - 08:05 PM
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Amanda
Amanda Joy

 
Thanks John

 
Posted by Amanda on Thursday, September 10, 2009 - 10:42 AM
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Larry Kuechlin
Larry Kuechlin

 
Absolutely beautiful, Amanda.  I have missed your work so very much.

Lx
 
Posted by Larry Kuechlin on Tuesday, September 08, 2009 - 08:26 PM
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Amanda
Amanda Joy

 
Thanks Mr Floozy!

:)

x

 
Posted by Amanda on Thursday, September 10, 2009 - 10:43 AM
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Takako
Takako Itoh

 
great as always...
 
Posted by Takako on Wednesday, September 09, 2009 - 05:18 AM
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Amanda
Amanda Joy

 
Thank you gentle poet-wonder you



 
Posted by Amanda on Thursday, September 10, 2009 - 10:43 AM
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Melody
Melody Lemond

 
anything ratified by birds' perception works wonders - as does this.  Yip.  :)
 
Posted by Melody on Wednesday, September 09, 2009 - 06:33 AM
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Amanda
Amanda Joy

 
Bird ratification works for me that's fer sure.. hey you!



 
Posted by Amanda on Thursday, September 10, 2009 - 10:44 AM
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April
April Michelle Bratten

 
I'm quite jealous of the vividness you seem to easily bring to words.  This was a lovely little poetic tale...I wouldn't change a single word of it. 

 
Posted by April on Wednesday, September 09, 2009 - 03:03 PM
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Amanda
Amanda Joy

 
You should see me after a few beers ;)

Thanks April!


 
Posted by Amanda on Thursday, September 10, 2009 - 10:45 AM
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Chuck's Poetic Existence
Chuck Steffen

 
this is great poetry, Amanda, glad to see you posting here once again

 
Posted by Chuck's Poetic Existence on Wednesday, September 09, 2009 - 05:49 PM
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Amanda
Amanda Joy

 
Thanks Chuck! really great to see you too!

 
Posted by Amanda on Thursday, September 10, 2009 - 10:46 AM
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Seb

 
Every now and then I give up on the purpose of poetry in this forum and then something like this comes along... and faith reawakens.

"You stop the car, lean over to kiss her in the centre
of her chest, she untangles her sunburnt legs
from the dashboard and smiles a distance
you can’t turn back from"

I swear, if I had written something like that i would have had to get up and walk around the room to to work off my excitement at it.

 
Posted by Seb on Wednesday, September 09, 2009 - 10:21 PM
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Amanda
Amanda Joy

 
Careful Pusska.. you'll end up with butter on your paws!

 
Posted by Amanda on Thursday, September 10, 2009 - 10:47 AM
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Miss Jane

 
I heartily concur.  

 
Posted by Miss Jane on Thursday, September 10, 2009 - 02:35 AM
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Amanda
Amanda Joy

 
xxxxxxxxxooxxo

 
Posted by Amanda on Thursday, September 10, 2009 - 10:47 AM
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John Eagle

 
Every word a treasure, here....
 
Posted by John Eagle on Friday, September 11, 2009 - 04:20 AM
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Mike
Mike Kowalski

 
an emotional portrait of colorfully dizzying beaty.  Absolutely superb Amanda!!!
 
Posted by Mike on Monday, September 14, 2009 - 05:04 AM
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