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Gender: Female
Status: In a Relationship
Age: 19
Sign: Aries

City: SAVAGE
State: Minnesota
Country: US
Signup Date: 5/18/2005

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Monday, July 24, 2006 

Current mood:  creative
Category: Writing and Poetry

yes i wrote this, don't ask me what it's about. i really don't know yet, i just started writing and this is the product.

 

Fatal Desire

Moving her hand over his skin,

Loving him seems just like a sin.

Feeling his heat, radiating like fire,

Dangerous, passionate, fatal desire.

 

Fingers running through her hair,

Lips caressing skin so fair.

Heartbeats quickening with every breath,

Feeling as though shes cheating death.

 

Within his embrace a mystery lies,

Cruel intentions behind his eyes.

Hands moving up from waist to wrists,

Holding her down, tightening his fists.

 

Struggling she screams, a high-pitched note,

All of a sudden he grabs her throat.

Losing her breath, shes surrounded by pyre,

A pile of ashes left from fatal desire.

Flash Affield
Nathan Affield

 
Be careful with rhyming, it can be a cop out.
you passion & desire will never truly sprout.
For rhyming, it seems has the unruly trait,
of tangling up sentances; and sounding fake.

all and all, it was a well done poem.
a bit cliche, but what isn't these days?

 
Posted by Flash Affield on Tuesday, April 03, 2007 - 3:45 AM
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Chad

 
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Posted by Chad on Thursday, May 24, 2007 - 12:52 PM
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