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Gender: Male
Status: Married
Age: 16
Sign: Capricorn

City: Iron River
State: Michigan
Country: US
Signup Date: 3/11/2007

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Friday, May 23, 2008 

Category: Writing and Poetry

Revenge

My watchful eye has seen right through,

You've lied to me, and that much is true,

I hoped and prayed you'd be there for me,

And now when you see me, your first instinct is to flee,

You talk of me when I'm not around,

But what you don't know is I've got the rebound,

Do you think this is a one-sided game?

Your blasphemous words don't put me to shame,

And yes, I know seeking revenge is wrong,

But you'll feel my wrath before too long,

Those hurtful things you've said to me,

Have been building inside, they're ready to break free,

But now I wait 'till the time is right,

You should be locked in your room full of fright,

And when this glorious moment has come,

You'll be praying for death, but you beat the war drum,

That was only my battle cry,

I'm still in this game, so you'll have to comply,

Yeah, sure, I'll play by your rule,

But I'm warning you, in the end, you'll be the fool,

Haven't you been told not to start something you can't finish?

You've bitten off more than you can chew, and my hate for you has not begun to diminish,

I catch you by surprise with me first attack,

The venom seeps in; it's like a stab in the back,

With absorbing all this, to your knees do you fall,

But I am before you, still standing tall,

My next swift move is a foot to your face,

Witnesses think I have put you in your place,

As the blood drips from your chin,

You look to me and see my grin,

That is defiantly a sign to you

That my hate inside has broken through,

And all this pain I've caused you,

Has left me only with blood on my shoe,

Now, your respect for me has come to pass,

And for my final trick, I grab a shard of glass,

I look over to see you motionless, sitting in your place,

In one quick bound, I jump to you, and carve my name onto your face,

Covered in blood you look up to see the setting sun,

Touch your hand to your face, and feel my reminder of what you have done,

Now you wake in the morning and look in the mirror, deniably gazing at my work of art,

Which is my lovely reminder to you, I'll gladly finish what you decide to start.

Kieraaah!
Kiera Schiavo

 
OH MY FUCKING GOD!
I LOVE THIS SO MUCH ITS UNREAL!

omg omg omg omg omg omg! like seriously, i couldnt even put how much i like this into words.. real words at least.


you are amazing.

i just want to give you a hug, or a pat on the back.. SOMETHING!

i cannot get over that.

wow.


send this to something, get it published. dooooo ittt.

 
Posted by Kieraaah! on Friday, May 23, 2008 - 2:21 AM
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HAY ! ツ

 
thatt's good :]
Haileyy
 
Posted by HAY ! ツ on Friday, May 23, 2008 - 8:07 PM
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Miss 3 u g g i e

 
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Okay doke.... Here is my input.


There is clearly a point you want to get across&& you put it very nicely into words. However, you need some structure.
Get some breaks in, create some stanzas! Comas can only do so much, try semicolons!

You are a very good writer! The hardest part is always getting it written down.
You did it well =]
 
Posted by Miss 3 u g g i e on Saturday, May 24, 2008 - 4:09 AM
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~Niki~
Niki Schiavo

 
Very cool..good job! You should get it published;=]
 
Posted by ~Niki~ on Saturday, May 24, 2008 - 10:48 PM
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-Caylaa;
Cayla Henning

 
omg Riley!
this is amazing.. you are a great writer! =]
 
Posted by -Caylaa; on Tuesday, August 19, 2008 - 1:58 AM
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ღJøvialistic♫유ღ웃♫Janeℓℓeღ
Janelle Grengs

 
OH MY FUCKING GOD!
This is amazing! I hope you know you are quite the writer.

Wow. Can't stop thinking about it.
=]
I love it.

 
Posted by ღJøvialistic♫유ღ웃♫Janeℓℓeღ on Friday, October 17, 2008 - 11:32 AM
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ღJøvialistic♫유ღ웃♫Janeℓℓeღ
Janelle Grengs

 
OH MY FUCK! This is freakin' amazing! =D
Wow.


That was really exciting. Especially 'cause it came from you...wow. =D amazinggg.
<3
 
Posted by ღJøvialistic♫유ღ웃♫Janeℓℓeღ on Tuesday, October 28, 2008 - 1:58 AM
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kαy,mαriee!

 
that's very true(:

and ahmazing!

good job riley!



you have a gift!

haha.



 
Posted by kαy,mαriee! on Sunday, April 05, 2009 - 10:39 PM
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