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Wednesday, August 19, 2009 

Category: Friends
We've just returned from a family excursion, and I promised the writer of the poem below that I would share this story with my online friends, so here goes ...

"Why are you crying?" wondered my 17-year-old. The van door opened, but not without a protesting croak.

"I was thinking about writing," was the short answer. She wasn't looking for a long answer. She shook her head over me in bewilderment and pronounced, "Take off your shoes and come down to the beach, the sand is awesome!"

I slipped off my rickety sandals and moved toward the sound of the waves, letting the wind whip my sandy hair into an approximation of dreadlocks. The cool water licked at my toes. I shivered. For a few minutes, I crouched in the sand, listening to the soothing wash of the tide, but the chilly air began to accentuate an ache that began somewhere behind my eyes and was pulsing down my jawline. Lack of sleep, and the pressure of being the driver, were taking their toll on my body. I headed back to the van to take an ibuprofen.

The sand clung to my feet, begging me to notice its incongruous warmth. The sun had had a chance to heat it just before the fog rolled in. I wished that I could somehow find a kindred spirit who would understand my frustration at not being able to write a poem.

Between me and my destination, a white-haired, bearded man sat cross-legged on a wool blanket. I glanced at his shoes--the quality of his leather boots reassured me somehow of his intentions. He pulled a paperback out of a backpack and I think my lips must have curled in answer to his attempt at a smile.

He showed me the book he was reading, and then asked unexpectedly, "Would you like to hear me read a poem?"

Oh, yes, I found myself saying -- I was just having a conversation with the Universe about wanting to hear a poem.

He pulled out a small, college-lined notebook and cleared his throat:

"Summer Twilight," he read. "I wrote this one last night."

"The horizon's afire by a summer sun beyond its set,
and winds aloft shoulder sounds of a passing day.
Pipers wrestle tidbits left from a comber's crest,
while the shore prepares for twilight in its ever-changing way.

"Waves thunder upon the sand,
then recede with a sigh.
Beach verandas glow by candlelight
with wine and brie;
and pinpoints of crystal ignite
the Universe 'n sky,
solar embers remain, highlighting
the ebb of the Sea.

"Celestial lights embrace
the final descending rays.
Summer twilight is on the
midnight azure plane;
and as a compass moon ascends,
ending another summer day,
I, desperately longing for You,
hear the ocean whisper your name."

He read without much expression, letting the words work for him, but he noticed how the ending struck me. I stood quietly for a moment, then asked, "This must have been written about someone in particular ..."

"Yes," he admitted, "It is about my wife. I lost her two years ago. She died of lymphoma."

"I'm so sorry," was all that I could muster.

"It's the fortieth anniversary of Woodstock, and we were there together." He smiled, eyes moistened. "I had to write something."

"Do you know, I'm 39," I said, "So all of that happened just before I was born, I wonder sometimes what it all meant to my parents. I remember the music." I didn't tell him that I've never had a one-on-one conversation with my father.

He stared at me and declared, "I'm going to dedicate this poem to you."

He scribbled under the poem: "May these words bring you a smile. Great meeting you. Your friend, Eric A."

"But--" I protested, "Do you have another copy of the poem?"

"I remember it," he reassured me. He tore two pages out of the notebook and handed them to me.

"Can I share this with my friends who write poems?" I asked.

"Of course," He nodded. The skin around his eyes had begun to redden.

Just then, one of my daughters run up behind me and tapped me on the shoulder. "Let's go, Mom!"

"I don't know what to say," my words and tone were stumbling all over the place. "Thank you very much."

"Have. A great life," said Eric with some emphasis. We found ourselves shaking hands. I told him that I wished him many blessings.

When I reached the van, I slid the poem safely into a folder.

"Mom, are you up to your poem stuff again?" asked one of the children.

"Yes," I admitted, and reached for the ibuprofen, but after my meeting with Eric I hardly needed it. I thanked the Universe for giving me the gift of that conversation, and turned the key in the ignition, trying to ignore the mass of matted hair and the pale face in the mirror.




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GreenTea with Brownrice

 
Thank you... i loved reading this... i thought i was there for a time... then i realized i was in my office chair.
Thank you
~Clint

 
Posted by GreenTea with Brownrice on Wednesday, August 19, 2009 - 6:23 PM
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flame in the snow

 
glad!

 
Posted by flame in the snow on Wednesday, August 19, 2009 - 9:52 PM
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ZETE PURONGGE * .......

 



Magical encounter......   a real Destiny thing!

Nicely written....Kia Ora
 
Posted by ZETE PURONGGE * ....... on Wednesday, August 19, 2009 - 6:23 PM
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flame in the snow

 
thank you dear Poet

 
Posted by flame in the snow on Wednesday, August 19, 2009 - 9:52 PM
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Finding ♫ΜeĻaήiέ♫
Melanie Turner

 
Ah, dangit, you made me cry. Love you. Me

 
Posted by Finding ♫ΜeĻaήiέ♫ on Wednesday, August 19, 2009 - 6:40 PM
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flame in the snow

 
(hugs) thank you

 
Posted by flame in the snow on Wednesday, August 19, 2009 - 9:52 PM
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⊗wing⊗
Lady Wing

 
i am at loss.weeping..but for good...loving you, and all, the universe- time takes what time will have. and in my heart, i know i have you, and all you have come to know...i love you, i thank you.

God bless you and all that you come to.

i'm 40!  1969 july, and i've never had a good talk w/ my mum or dad.

woodstock rules.

and so do you!
and i am a hippie girl due to catholic school and the love of God.

u love you jillian


xoxox
peacelove,
wing/lena♥

 
Posted by ⊗wing⊗ on Wednesday, August 19, 2009 - 6:42 PM
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flame in the snow

 
I haven't a clue
but I love you!

xo

 
Posted by flame in the snow on Wednesday, August 19, 2009 - 9:52 PM
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Kate Wolstencroft-Ryan
Kate Wolstencroft-Ryan

 
not a coincidence he was there for you - and you for him

 
Posted by Kate Wolstencroft-Ryan on Wednesday, August 19, 2009 - 7:53 PM
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flame in the snow

 
I think there was some synchronicity. Thank you for reading. xo

 
Posted by flame in the snow on Wednesday, August 19, 2009 - 9:53 PM
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Terry

 
This was lovley... heartfelt, honest... the prose was great.. and  there was such magic between what you did not tell him and what he gave you... and my heart went out to you and to him.. true magic...
 I saw it all....
 great write J!!!!!!!
 love T

 
Posted by Terry on Wednesday, August 19, 2009 - 8:32 PM
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flame in the snow

 
You are a dear! thanks for reading, blessings to you this week ...

 
Posted by flame in the snow on Wednesday, August 19, 2009 - 9:53 PM
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Through The Fog [AITC]

 
This was very moving... 

 
Posted by Through The Fog [AITC] on Wednesday, August 19, 2009 - 10:14 PM
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flame in the snow

 
thank you

 
Posted by flame in the snow on Thursday, August 20, 2009 - 2:51 AM
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No-mad Living

 
Isn't the Universe so wonderful about giving us what we want and need? Sounds like it was an answer to both of your prayers.
 
Posted by No-mad Living on Thursday, August 20, 2009 - 12:18 AM
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flame in the snow

 
Yes, thanks.

 
Posted by flame in the snow on Thursday, August 20, 2009 - 2:51 AM
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hans kreher
Hans Kreher

 
Some recollections creatively adopt a mystic quality. Good read.

 
Posted by hans kreher on Thursday, August 20, 2009 - 1:11 AM
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flame in the snow

 
Thank you.

 
Posted by flame in the snow on Thursday, August 20, 2009 - 2:51 AM
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John Eagle

 
Incredible story...truly is. Enjoyed every word of it. I have read some of your poetry and I think it is clever and delightful. I just think you need to sit down and write. Forget about it being good, bad, average...just write. When you are finished, then decide how good it is. You might give it an edit even, improve it. You have the knack...just do it!
 
Posted by John Eagle on Thursday, August 20, 2009 - 1:21 AM
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flame in the snow

 
Excellent advice, John ... I am soo much enjoying what you post, to me it is like smoked salmon jerky, the kind that the Native women (and some of my friends nowadays) hung on alder or willow branches and smoked outdoors in strips -- chewy and ultimately satisfying.

 
Posted by flame in the snow on Thursday, August 20, 2009 - 2:53 AM
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Elaine
Elaine Randall English

 
Seems like just yesterday that the Woodstock nation arose....now my Jesus shoes have lost their souls and my strawberry fields turned brown....however, Rise up new generation....go down to such beaches and find such elders and hear what they might give you freely.  Lovely day that.
 
Posted by Elaine on Thursday, August 20, 2009 - 9:56 AM
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flame in the snow

 
We do need to find such elders ... thanks Elaine!

 
Posted by flame in the snow on Friday, August 21, 2009 - 5:58 PM
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Teda
Teda Lash

 
This is one of the things that I find so awesome about the universe: every time we really need something unexpected, it appears.

 
Posted by Teda on Thursday, August 20, 2009 - 12:27 PM
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flame in the snow

 
So true ... like your blogs!

 
Posted by flame in the snow on Friday, August 21, 2009 - 7:39 PM
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John
John Hauge

 

wonderful.  your work is one of life's little pleasures.  thanks, jill.




 
Posted by John on Thursday, August 20, 2009 - 12:38 PM
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flame in the snow

 
Always grateful to see you, John.

 
Posted by flame in the snow on Friday, August 21, 2009 - 5:57 PM
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Jupiterschild

 
very touching!
 
Posted by Jupiterschild on Thursday, August 20, 2009 - 12:47 PM
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flame in the snow

 
thanks

 
Posted by flame in the snow on Friday, August 21, 2009 - 5:57 PM
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Oma **PenStrokes** (NavWriter)
Jane Penland Hoover

 
nothing ever more amazing than life and going on - the wash of tide touching and moving out again - I sit here with my face squenching, a tear leaking out and I'm not sure why.
 
Posted by Oma **PenStrokes** (NavWriter) on Thursday, August 20, 2009 - 2:50 PM
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flame in the snow

 
Bless you, dear and thanks!

 
Posted by flame in the snow on Friday, August 21, 2009 - 5:57 PM
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Gil Underhill Esq.
Christopher Lapinel

 
Yes! Things do work like that... I was going to say sometimes, but really things work like that all the time, just too busy to notice sometimes...

Beautifully told. I felt it all.

 
Posted by Gil Underhill Esq. on Thursday, August 20, 2009 - 8:08 PM
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flame in the snow

 
Thanks for reading.

 
Posted by flame in the snow on Friday, August 21, 2009 - 5:57 PM
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sylvia abducted
yolanda mora

 
oh i love it!!!! moon-mom.
and love you a lot!
thank you for this!
yolanda

p.s.. ibuprofen. lol. i know that
 
Posted by sylvia abducted on Friday, August 21, 2009 - 7:20 AM
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flame in the snow

 
thank you dear ... I saw your message after I woke up this morning, sorry my internet browser was open but I was sleeping ... xo

 
Posted by flame in the snow on Friday, August 21, 2009 - 5:56 PM
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Suria Kassimi

 
magic

 
Posted by Suria Kassimi on Friday, August 21, 2009 - 9:40 AM
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flame in the snow

 
thank you for reading

 
Posted by flame in the snow on Friday, August 21, 2009 - 5:56 PM
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Eusthacia

 
your words feed my soul

 
Posted by Eusthacia on Friday, August 21, 2009 - 12:38 PM
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flame in the snow

 
It is mutual!

 
Posted by flame in the snow on Friday, August 21, 2009 - 5:56 PM
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Malcolm [aka Hirsute Antiquity / aka Sinna Luvva]
Malcolm Evison

 
wonderful encounter - great post!
 
Posted by Malcolm [aka Hirsute Antiquity / aka Sinna Luvva] on Saturday, August 22, 2009 - 11:54 AM
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Mary Ann Blinkhorn

 
I enjoyed reading.  :-)
 
Posted by Mary Ann Blinkhorn on Saturday, August 22, 2009 - 4:20 PM
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Sigerson
D Sigerson

 
loved this story
 
Posted by Sigerson on Sunday, August 23, 2009 - 2:28 AM
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Sasa "The Knitting Poet"

 
You met a Hippie indeed.

 
Posted by Sasa "The Knitting Poet" on Sunday, August 23, 2009 - 3:41 AM
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carol-oregonwriter
carol voccia

 
this rocked my world today...thank you for sharing!
 
Posted by carol-oregonwriter on Sunday, August 23, 2009 - 6:31 AM
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Trixy
Lop-sided Human

 
This maid me cry, still.  Being at risk for lymphoma myself has nothing to even do with the tears, it is just how you put it, and this, these incidents, are what make us whom we are, well spoken Lady.
 
Posted by Trixy on Monday, August 24, 2009 - 5:32 PM
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rusky
Russell Ayres

 
I wish I could have been there to meet Eric, If you ever see him again tell him I love him,
r.
 
Posted by rusky on Wednesday, August 26, 2009 - 2:31 AM
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flame in the snow

 
thank you ... I hope he somehow senses your love on some channel ... xo
 
Posted by flame in the snow on Wednesday, August 26, 2009 - 3:35 AM
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Susan Morganlafey Bosler
Susan Bosler

 
You have out done yourself.  I love this write.  Jillian, you are so very "in-touch" and talented!!! 

Hugs, Susan xo

 
Posted by Susan Morganlafey Bosler on Thursday, August 27, 2009 - 5:51 PM
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Shawnse

 
and the universe came through for you!  this is touching, made me cry.

 
Posted by Shawnse on Sunday, August 30, 2009 - 11:37 PM
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~Pamela~

 
Jill that is wonderful!  I really enjoyed reading this.

 
Posted by ~Pamela~ on Thursday, September 03, 2009 - 5:53 AM
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flame in the snow

 
thanks for reading ... xo

 
Posted by flame in the snow on Thursday, September 03, 2009 - 3:53 PM
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