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City: greater manchester
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Country: UK
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Thursday, March 12, 2009 

Current mood:  blank
Category: Writing and Poetry
these poems are a compilation of thoughts and feelings on specific subjects that we have all either experienced personally or through the lives of others. i hope you enjoy them, comments are most welcome.
 
 

Alzheimer’s


 


 

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It’s all the things you know

that you don’t know your know anymore,

forever forgotten moments

lost in the mind.

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Knowledge has abandoned you,

intricacies of life’s events

gone AWOL,

leaving you in limbo.

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They’re on the end of your tongue

but still you can’t express them,

never recalling times past,

images trapped within the cobwebs of your mind.

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You feel disheartened,

struggling to recollect yesterday,

periods of blankness

overcast the soul.

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I can see you struggling,

trying to kick start your brain,

battling the illness,

fighting with your memory.

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Anorexia

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At 13 the problems began,

caught by the bug

of habitual starvation.

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What started as an ideal,

now was an addiction,

a state of mind hard to break

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She was dying to be thin

And willing to do anything

To get what she wanted.

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Whether through society,

environment or mental anguish,

no one truly knows.

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But she was just short of 6 foot,

just over 4 stone

and now only 15.

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She’d achieved her goal,

but the mirror continued to lie to her

and she believed in its reflexion.

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She’s now lies in a hospital bed,

suffering immensely

and needing to be fed by force.

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Even so the condition has gone too far,

no longer is she dying to be thin,

she’s just dying.

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She is so light there’s was no imprint

in the bed or the pillow,

not a crease in the sheet.

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The only mark that will be left

Is in her friends and families lives,

who have watched her fade to nothing.


 
Voices

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Those real but unreal voices that haunt us,

they tap into our skulls

sending us mixed messages,

trying to destroy our souls.

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When we look in the mirror

they tell us,

you’re too fat,

you’re too thin.

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We place faith in friends

Who have earnt our trust,

Sharing with them our darkest secrets,

Then they begin to question our judgment.

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On the multiple choice exam

we know the answers c,

but they tell us otherwise,

leading us to doubt.

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Our partners say they love us,

but they won’t let us believe them,

destroying all our hope,

belittling all we are and have.

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We know we shouldn’t pay attention

and we don’t really want to,

but they’re always there,

taunting us to listen.

Helên
Helên Poet

 
I always like the way you put yourself in someone else's shoes when you write; there's a lot of self obsessed navel gazing poetry on the internet but I always find it interesting to ponder what's going on in someone, or something else's head.

 
Posted by Helên on Thursday, March 12, 2009 - 12:06 PM
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Colin Cross

 
hi Chris


enjoyed reading these.honest,straightforward and emotional.hope you enjoy reading mine.



cheers Colin
 
Posted by Colin Cross on Thursday, March 12, 2009 - 12:11 PM
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Hosea
Errol King

 
very keen observations
 
Posted by Hosea on Thursday, March 12, 2009 - 4:01 PM
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Dominic

 
hiya man



well done on taking on, as helen says, some topics different to those a lot of poets take on, they are more outward looking which is good to see.




i would suggest maybe you try a few different styles of writing - i would take a look at some other poets you like who use a wide range of writing styles and see if any inspire you to try writing in different ways- for example classic styles like sonnets or villanelles, good song lyrics, free verse with maybe more comedic or metaphoric language- or maybe some tighter rhyme structures like beat poets use. i think it would be really good for you to try creating something in a style outside the ones you have got comfortable with using.




hope that helps man



d
 
Posted by Dominic on Saturday, March 14, 2009 - 3:20 PM
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Poetica

 
hi Chris





Great to see you taking on the tough subjects head on.






It would be interesting to see you revisit each of these subjects and view the subject from a different perspective. These are all bleak renditions of difficult states.
Other perspectives you could try:





humour


hope


acceptance/familiarity


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See you soon





Peter
 
Posted by Poetica on Wednesday, March 18, 2009 - 9:14 PM
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