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September 27, 2006 - Wednesday 

Category: Writing and Poetry

An Image of a Shattering Clock

What's hopeless is a lie
when what the heart defies
is everything along the way
What's hopeless is a lie
when you try to stay alive
when all you want to do is die away
There are fingers scraping glass
somewhere down the hall
We're just the hands on the clock on the wall

What love has done to me and you
What it drives some men to do
What love is done
when impossible
is just a thing to love you through?
The glass is slowly breaking
and the clock's about to fall
We're just the hands on the clock on the wall

And all along my hand
is the blood I've bled for you,
as you'll never understand
what I've put me through
And while pounding on the glass,
all I'm trying to do
is stop the clock from ticking
me away from you
But my heart has stopped its beating
somewhere down the hall
We're just the hands on the clock on the wall

What it is that drives me
to keep doing what I do-
It isn't me at all
to keep on leaving you
I wish time would stop
or quickly bring me back to you,
but such is time to never fly
when you want it to
I once held your hand
but now I hold you not at all
We're just the hands on the clock on the wall

Tormented chimes an engine grind
as the minute hand rewinds
Hours are ours as there are things
you can never leave behind
Time is time but never mind
with your hand now holding mine
Sometimes my hands weren't long enough
but I loved you all the time
But now we're together
as the broken clock now starts to fall
We're just the hands on the clock on the wall

For Bronwyn




The two hands only align 24 times in a day






Other Bronwyn Poems:

Those Asylum Doors

All I Need is a Little Light

Perhaps Never Apart

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~*Emma*~*Live *Love *Write
Emma Southee

 

"We're just the hands on the clock on the wall"

I think that line, even on its own is a perfect example of life.   THe whole piece was well written, I applaud you! 

"Time is time but never mind
with your hand now holding mine"

Was really sweet, and really nice to read.   Emma S.


 
Posted by ~*Emma*~*Live *Love *Write on September 27, 2006 - Wednesday - 5:33 AM
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Shai
Avi Cado

 

beautiful. that would make an awesome song, too.


 
Posted by Shai on September 27, 2006 - Wednesday - 5:46 AM
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OPALESCENCE for CHD Awareness
Opal Henson

 
A truly sentimental piece! Love the imagry it presents. And, yes, my favorite part is also the hands on the clock part! I can closely identify with that feeling.
 
Posted by OPALESCENCE for CHD Awareness on September 27, 2006 - Wednesday - 5:52 AM
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McCracken

 
awesome
 
Posted by McCracken on September 27, 2006 - Wednesday - 7:19 AM
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lesley

 

reminds me o around midnight.....its a quarter to three and theres noone in the world but my baby and me...jazzy piece Jon


 
Posted by lesley on September 27, 2006 - Wednesday - 8:50 AM
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Even a broken clock is right twice a day

excellent read, once again your imagary works so well


 
Posted by on September 27, 2006 - Wednesday - 9:00 AM
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[[GABOLOSO]]

 
This poem is so sad, but yet so wonderful. Believe me, I know exactly how you feel. It makes me cry when I read it... It's unbelievable. 
 
Posted by [[GABOLOSO]] on September 27, 2006 - Wednesday - 9:39 AM
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Very nice write... great expression.
 
Posted by on September 27, 2006 - Wednesday - 2:18 PM
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Judi
judi fountas

 
Beautifully written.  You really get to the heart of life/love. 
 
Posted by Judi on September 27, 2006 - Wednesday - 2:19 PM
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SUMMER LOVES!!

 
good blog
 
Posted by SUMMER LOVES!! on September 27, 2006 - Wednesday - 2:55 PM
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endywood
Natalie L. Hogan

 
 "we're just the hands" love it
 
Posted by endywood on September 27, 2006 - Wednesday - 4:19 PM
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Toni

 

"And all along my hand
is the blood I've bled for you,
as you'll never understand
what I've put me through
And while pounding on the glass,
all I'm trying to do
is stop the clock from ticking
me away from you"

I really like the visuals in this.  I can feel the isolation and the pain here.


 
Posted by Toni on September 27, 2006 - Wednesday - 4:24 PM
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Romano
Nick Romano

 
no matter which one of your personalities is writing, the fact is you're a hell of a talent
 
Posted by Romano on September 27, 2006 - Wednesday - 5:07 PM
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Pelle

 
Excellent piece. Some great rhyming, and just spot on as a whole.
 
Posted by Pelle on September 27, 2006 - Wednesday - 5:31 PM
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Manager for Pedro Santana

 
This is great... beautful imagery..
 
Posted by Manager for Pedro Santana on September 27, 2006 - Wednesday - 6:23 PM
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Justin Robert Harnish

 
Very interesting.  I feel what your talking about and can't help thinking that I have been there before :)
 
Posted by Justin Robert Harnish on September 27, 2006 - Wednesday - 9:01 PM
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~Vannah Darr~
Syvannah Tewes

 

"Sometimes my hands weren't long enough
but I loved you all the time"

What a bitterly sweet sad piece, jon.  I loved it...even as, at the same time, I shied away from the ugly truths it made me face.


 
Posted by ~Vannah Darr~ on September 27, 2006 - Wednesday - 10:46 PM
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Jim
Jim Flowers

 
Great poem.  I really like the flow.
 
Posted by Jim on September 28, 2006 - Thursday - 1:56 AM
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Yeah...wow.
Sorry I'm not sure what else to say.

This is amazing, really really good Jon.

Love your writing style.
And I love that line as well (We're just the hands on the clock on the wall)


 
Posted by on September 28, 2006 - Thursday - 2:10 AM
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Life is Poetry

 
awesome piece!
 
Posted by Life is Poetry on September 28, 2006 - Thursday - 2:19 AM
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incognito!!!!
Teresa McKee

 

Perfecto!!! Great job, great metaphor, great subject, great rythm, great rhyme!

Well worth my two measly Kudos!

 

Teresa


 
Posted by incognito!!!! on September 28, 2006 - Thursday - 3:36 AM
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push past pathways, submerged, thru sensitive eyes

 
woah. damn. that was. amazing. I might have to have that one framed...foreal.
 
Posted by push past pathways, submerged, thru sensitive eyes on September 28, 2006 - Thursday - 5:07 AM
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*Crystal*

 

This is now a favorite.


 
Posted by *Crystal* on September 28, 2006 - Thursday - 5:25 AM
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flame in the snow

 
This is an amazingly frustrating poem.
 
Posted by flame in the snow on September 28, 2006 - Thursday - 7:29 AM
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¤'¯'°§ÚÑñ¥°'¯'¤

 

sad

to the point of depression, i think

i love the flow

~great write


 
Posted by ¤'¯'°§ÚÑñ¥°'¯'¤ on September 28, 2006 - Thursday - 7:44 AM
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Benjamin
Benjamin Ashley

 

The image at the bottom is cool.

Life has a natural rhythm that you have no choice but to submit to. It will take you away from friends that, with hope, you will meet again. Twenty-four times a day is more than enough if it's love and understanding.

Thank you.


 
Posted by Benjamin on September 29, 2006 - Friday - 4:18 PM
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♥kira

 

wow... u never fail to amaze me...

got a 'newish' poem up, check it out would ya?


 
Posted by ♥kira on September 30, 2006 - Saturday - 5:53 PM
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"what it is that drives me" , I'm always trying to figure that out.

You,ve once again pulled deep feeling to the top, a wonderful write, thank you for the inspiration!


 
Posted by on October 7, 2006 - Saturday - 5:32 AM
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-Twink-

 

Beautiful ....

thanks for sharing your talent with us all...


 
Posted by -Twink- on November 10, 2006 - Friday - 2:01 AM
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As I read the first stanza I really got into such a rhythm that I felt like it could be some rap song. It just felt right. Your poetry is very good. I like how you repeat certain parts. Awesome!

♥The Kelsey!


 
Posted by on January 14, 2007 - Sunday - 11:03 PM
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LadySunf10wer~Mad Peg

 

An Image of a Shattering Clock

this is very interesting way  to explain relationship that is falling apart.


 
Posted by LadySunf10wer~Mad Peg on March 28, 2007 - Wednesday - 2:24 PM
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Peggy Anne PixieKiss

 
yes, a favorite of mine as well. Stunning word play!
 
Posted by Peggy Anne PixieKiss on August 27, 2007 - Monday - 3:07 AM
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Hurricane Butthole
stephen pellerito

 
freakin amazing
definitly my favorite
 
Posted by Hurricane Butthole on December 15, 2007 - Saturday - 6:07 AM
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Glen Yumang Manese™
Glen Yumang Manese

 
Jon - well scripted lines... A somber feel to the words and the undying verse to actions of the pen to the meaning of love to another and that time is a value... but also a virtue in the end...


Glen Yumang Manese
 
Posted by Glen Yumang Manese™ on December 15, 2007 - Saturday - 6:08 AM
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Ms. Nicky
Ms. Nicky

 
I agree with you on 32 and it is just a beautiful piece....
 
Posted by Ms. Nicky on December 15, 2007 - Saturday - 6:47 AM
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navajoconstitution.com
navajo constitution

 
two rather trite subjects ennui and time. i don't think its called love when pain is the resolution. its moments like this that makes one wish there was a negative kudo button.
 
Posted by navajoconstitution.com on December 15, 2007 - Saturday - 7:22 AM
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lana
Lana Deym campbell

 
So romantic, Jon...and beautiful! Love the wordplay and the deeper meanings to be mined! An excellent write!
 
Posted by lana on December 15, 2007 - Saturday - 7:52 AM
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Sanguine the Penguin ^^.
Sang Kim

 
Very nice poem, my favorite part was
"And while pounding on the glass,
all I'm trying to do
is stop the clock from ticking
me away from you"
I can see why this is your favorite XD, so beautiful and relates to many. I like the end phrase of each stanza as well ^^, and hopefully when the clock broke the hands found each other in the end =D. Much deserved kudos to you *two thumbs up*.
 
Posted by Sanguine the Penguin ^^. on December 16, 2007 - Sunday - 4:27 AM
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Maria Housden
Maria Housden

 
i can imagine this as a song. ♥
 
Posted by Maria Housden on December 16, 2007 - Sunday - 1:12 PM
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goodbye

 
amazing write!
 
Posted by goodbye on December 17, 2007 - Monday - 1:43 AM
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Kittie~loves~Grogan

 
This has to be one of the best poems I have ever read.

ever.

thank you for posting this.
 
Posted by Kittie~loves~Grogan on July 27, 2008 - Sunday - 3:04 AM
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JMariah

 
You maintained the image of time so well all throughout this well-developed poem.
I enjoyed it immensely!
 
Posted by JMariah on February 17, 2009 - Tuesday - 12:06 AM
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