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March 5, 2007 - Monday 

Category: Writing and Poetry

A closet full of clothes…
            A year or two…
A high-heeled shoe array…

All still there
as she'd never
be goodwilled or pawned away

A hair-filled brush
on the sink
with hairs
            that aren't mine

A diamond ring
on my necklace…
                      A tear run down my spine

A three year old
that's old enough
to remember what made her shine

With tequila'd breath,
I'd kiss her
But on the good nights,
with breath as wine

A small head
on my shoulder…
                  and another tear run down my spine

Every night I'd hold her
and every day from time to time

Letters
you intended…
                     The ones you'd never send

I trace over your handwriting
               every now and then

A hole
in my heart
                and a soul that's wearing thin-
both beaten and weary

A time that never mends…

A space
in my bed…
as empty as the pain

My tears this time…
            but down a picture frame

The hope
that we'll never
be fated to forget

Home videos
remind us
as we constantly rewind

Some clothes in the closet
                     I haven't moved them yet

A man,
his daughter,
and the tear upon his spine…

These are just the things that you left behind.

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McCracken

 
high-heeled shoes...they'd better be hers.
 
Posted by McCracken on March 5, 2007 - Monday - 9:51 AM
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K

 
Just beautiful. And so elegantly done. Thank you.
 
Posted by K on March 5, 2007 - Monday - 9:51 AM
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blahhh

 

"A space
in my bed…
as empty as the pain...."

GREAT POEM!!!! 5 KODOS

 


 
Posted by blahhh on March 5, 2007 - Monday - 9:58 AM
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chad schneider.gusto.

 

it would be hard to get comments from guys like joe and still feel like sharingover myspace
it felt like it strayed in the middle
but in a very natural way

i liked it
definately creates emotion
good stuff


 
Posted by chad schneider.gusto. on March 5, 2007 - Monday - 10:08 AM
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Jon Sanders

 
Joe's a great guy. I know he meant no harm.... Heckling among friends is one of my most favorite past-times....
 
Posted by Jon Sanders on March 5, 2007 - Monday - 10:17 AM
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Anza

 

"Letters
you intended…
                     The ones you'd never send"

that one hit home. It's beautifully delivered thanks for the bulletin announcement, it breaks a typical day.


 
Posted by Anza on March 5, 2007 - Monday - 10:09 AM
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Loree Harrell Writes And Paints

 
Gorgeous, wistful, sad piece.  Thank you.
 
Posted by Loree Harrell Writes And Paints on March 5, 2007 - Monday - 10:14 AM
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Kevin

 
"Home videos
remind us
as we constantly rewind"


Great line from a great poem! You've got talent! Keep it up man!

 
Posted by Kevin on March 5, 2007 - Monday - 10:15 AM
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Post-Modern China Doll

 
Great poem! Baffled by the last stanza, did she leave you a daughter?
 
Posted by Post-Modern China Doll on March 5, 2007 - Monday - 10:27 AM
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Jon Sanders

 

A man,
his daughter,
and the tear upon his spine…

that's looking at the situation from the outside (self-reflection).... the daughter is his and the mother is gone.


 
Posted by Jon Sanders on March 5, 2007 - Monday - 10:32 AM
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Phyllis
Phyllis Bright

 

Emotion well penned dear poet!


 
Posted by Phyllis on March 5, 2007 - Monday - 11:03 AM
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sabrina {always loosing the greatest people i meet
Sabrina Madden

 

this is a really good poem, i love poetry i live for it an dur poems are very well written... but so far this one stood out to me somewhat the most... a job well done... a poem well written!!!

<<<3

bri

 


 
Posted by sabrina {always loosing the greatest people i meet on March 5, 2007 - Monday - 11:12 AM
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Sister Sophie

 

This was beautifully written. Moving and expressive. Just elegantly perfect.

Love

Sophie


 
Posted by Sister Sophie on March 5, 2007 - Monday - 11:18 AM
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Mind Over Matter

 
great poem!!! I love the flow of it
 
Posted by Mind Over Matter on March 5, 2007 - Monday - 11:40 AM
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Ian

 

A beautiful poem that brings out the main theme so subtly yet leaves a stark impression on readers. It starts off simple but later dives deeper and deeper into the subject of forgotten stuff that were left behind. A true jem.

xXx


 
Posted by Ian on March 5, 2007 - Monday - 12:01 PM
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Stefanie

 

You reached into the soul of man who's lived this scenario... Not sure if it's personal or just written....... Either way, amazing right......... Something I'm sure alot of people can relate to....... When you don't want to lose the memories of someone you've lost.

 

 


 
Posted by Stefanie on March 5, 2007 - Monday - 12:09 PM
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Apocalypse
Varusha Ramdath

 
the beauty in your words shine through like stars when there is no moon in sight.



 
Posted by Apocalypse on March 5, 2007 - Monday - 12:25 PM
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Keith

 
simply and beatifully done
 
Posted by Keith on March 5, 2007 - Monday - 12:42 PM
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Tracy
Tracy Brown

 

Miss another...I understand fully...a mate gone...from our lives...although they are gone...we still can see them...feel them...and miss them fully...  Thank you for your beautiful words.


 
Posted by Tracy on March 5, 2007 - Monday - 1:30 PM
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Butterfly

 
LOL dang it jon, I swear you love to invoke emotions from me. I love this peice. The energy that flows when it is read.... Wow! With your permission I would love to post this one on my site too..... 
 
Posted by Butterfly on March 5, 2007 - Monday - 1:43 PM
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O_o Zombies!!!

 
What can I say that hasn't already been said?  A strong piece that hits it's mark perfectly. 
 
Posted by O_o Zombies!!! on March 5, 2007 - Monday - 1:47 PM
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Lauren♥
Lauren Magnus

 
Absolutely beautiful. Very deep and written so perfectly. You have a beautiful mind that I am in awe of. Thank you for sharing.
 
Posted by Lauren♥ on March 5, 2007 - Monday - 2:12 PM
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poetess-Rosie

 

un chant mélancolique comme l'amour,

un enfant à aimer pour la vie....le meilleur des souvenirs

vivants....

rosie


 
Posted by poetess-Rosie on March 5, 2007 - Monday - 2:21 PM
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Pelle

 
Yes.
 
Posted by Pelle on March 5, 2007 - Monday - 2:23 PM
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*~Mary Beth~*

 

A man,
his daughter,
and the tear upon his spine…

These are just the things that you left behind

VERY powerful words...................Loved it.

 


 
Posted by *~Mary Beth~* on March 5, 2007 - Monday - 2:58 PM
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JoeyPwnsJoo

 
Somewhere in between great and amazing. Good times!
 
Posted by JoeyPwnsJoo on March 5, 2007 - Monday - 3:04 PM
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Lee Çrosbie-Wells

 
"I trace over your handwriting every now and then" ...That's lovely.
 
Posted by Lee Çrosbie-Wells on March 5, 2007 - Monday - 3:05 PM
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Ewe Joi

 
Luvs it
 
Posted by Ewe Joi on March 5, 2007 - Monday - 3:05 PM
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Paul Good
Paul Good

 

Dude, that was amazing....

 

I like how it wasn't just full of catchy one liners, the whole poem was good and not because it was catchy...

 


 
Posted by Paul Good on March 5, 2007 - Monday - 3:07 PM
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Last in priorities
Superwoman Lady K

 

absolutely beautiful.... i feel very inspired. You are full of emotion and it is amazing. Keep letting those words flow, you will get very far with it.

God Bless

Love Much

Lady K


 
Posted by Last in priorities on March 5, 2007 - Monday - 3:39 PM
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Miss Cain

 

This was a really moving write.

Thankyou.

Mad Love

xoxoxoxoxox


 
Posted by Miss Cain on March 5, 2007 - Monday - 4:10 PM
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Rhymesoulnice

 
beautiful poem
 
Posted by Rhymesoulnice on March 5, 2007 - Monday - 4:29 PM
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Brandy Wine

 

The feeling of sadness overwhelmed me as I read this piece. You have an amazing talent. I enjoy reading words from the heart. Much Love Brandy 


 
Posted by Brandy Wine on March 5, 2007 - Monday - 4:36 PM
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chad

 
damn...amazing.

 
Posted by chad on March 5, 2007 - Monday - 4:40 PM
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Just amazing what one glance into the closet can do to our thoughts and emotions!

This was a marvelous, heartfelt, moving write!

Not enough kudos allowed here!


 
Posted by on March 5, 2007 - Monday - 4:44 PM
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¤ Starrshine ¤

 
Beautifuly done... As always... ;-)
 
Posted by ¤ Starrshine ¤ on March 5, 2007 - Monday - 4:50 PM
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♥ANGEL♥

 
I am a little late on this comment, but wow! As a female my point of veiw is a little different, but still hits close to home. Very moveing piece. I loved it!!!
 
Posted by ♥ANGEL♥ on March 5, 2007 - Monday - 4:52 PM
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Clint

 
i really like the structure!
 
Posted by Clint on March 5, 2007 - Monday - 4:55 PM
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My Chemical Romance

 
Kudos. I loved it...YOU definitely have talent!!!
 
Posted by My Chemical Romance on March 5, 2007 - Monday - 5:01 PM
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Mia
Cynthia Jennings

 

that was amazing.

peace.


 
Posted by Mia on March 5, 2007 - Monday - 5:14 PM
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Meri
Meriele Mebaraki

 
Hi Jon!

What a beautiful (albeit sad) poem!
I like the way you write your poems, their structure, and the expressions that you use on them. Your poems are perfect.
Keep on writing, boy, 'cause you're really talented!
Kisses!

 
Posted by Meri on March 5, 2007 - Monday - 6:34 PM
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Kerry

 
beautifully written...well done!
 
Posted by Kerry on March 5, 2007 - Monday - 7:15 PM
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ANNA TWISTED

 

Beautiful!

Although, I recommend he

bag up the past and move on!

With a little girl's hand tucked in his,

head held high

least he always live in rewind. 

 


 
Posted by ANNA TWISTED on March 5, 2007 - Monday - 7:36 PM
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Mike; The Lone Maverick
Mike Schonewolf

 
This poem laments itself all the way to an anthology...Great work, loved the lamentation.
 
Posted by Mike; The Lone Maverick on March 5, 2007 - Monday - 8:43 PM
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Cookie

 
You are quite wise and worldly for your age.  The things you imagine and put into words sometimes just blows my mind.
 
Posted by Cookie on March 5, 2007 - Monday - 8:53 PM
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Lisalouis xMauhx

 
..>..>

Beautiful piece of writing- not unlike my own.

Good format, clear perception bound together with Pain, Tears and love......♥

 

Lisa-Jane  ♥ Angel ♥


 
Posted by Lisalouis xMauhx on March 5, 2007 - Monday - 9:03 PM
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Ramona

 
Once again, you have written a beautiful poem. Thank you, Ramona :))
 
Posted by Ramona on March 5, 2007 - Monday - 10:27 PM
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JAMDE JAM

 
I forgot to comment here also..I love the poem!!
 
Posted by JAMDE JAM on March 5, 2007 - Monday - 11:22 PM
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Mrs. Matthew Koval
Brianne Koval

 

Wait. I felt the onslaught of tears.

Wait...

Wait...

No. It was just indigestion, you sappy lout.

A wonderful poem as usual, written in the greatest of fashions.

<333


 
Posted by Mrs. Matthew Koval on March 6, 2007 - Tuesday - 12:31 AM
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Professor Wildflower
Professor Wildflower

 
"I trace over your handwriting every now and then"  Grief so telling ....really enjoyed this.
 
Posted by Professor Wildflower on March 6, 2007 - Tuesday - 12:36 AM
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