SPLASH:
Spider-Man fighting the Halloween Gang...We're on the street of NYC where portions of the Bugle sign crashed at end of last ish.

In the BG are MJ and Aunt Anna.

SFX: THWIP! THWIP!
(clearly, Spidey's using his webbing – and his good ol' web shooters, as established last ish)

3 Insets at bottom of page:
Inset 1:
SHOT of a partially dug grave

Inset 2:
Shot of a shovel digging further into the grave

Inset 3:
Shot of fully dug grave, someone jumping into it...we can only discern that it's a small, brunette man, perhaps holding a stick or something. His back is to us, and he's in motion (jumping in).

Page Two:
1: Same shot of the grave

2: Same shot, only an axe has been swung up.

3. The axe has been swung down.

SFX: SCHUKK!

4-7.
Axe going up and down in these panels...with the "SCHUKK!" repeating every time the axe is down.

8.
Inside the grave, we see our old friend Ernest T. Wretched, smiling gravely. (sorry)

9. Over the shoulder of Wretched, we see he's looking into the now-opened casket of Harry Osborn.  The corpse looks just hours old.

SFX WRETCHED: HEH-HEH...HEEHEEHEE!

Page Three:

CAPTION: Persistence can grind an iron beam down into a needle.

1. Spider-Man's tackled from behind by Blue.  

SPIDER-MAN (thought): Okay. Getting nowhere fast.  Too many people...

2. As Spidey webs him and kicks Treat, Harvest slices at Spidey.

SFX: THWIP!

SPIDER-MAN: AWWFGHH!

3. Although Spidey's grabbed hold of Harvest's scythe, we see his leg's got a big gash in it.  Treat approaches fast, a fist pulled back ready for a punch...

SPIDER-MAN (TO TREAT): If you're going for the 1 Ugly Prize -- you win, pussycat!

4. Treat gets close to Spider-Man and has swung, but Spidey's caught his fist here.

SPIDER-MAN (THOUGHT): Did I just call him "pussycat"?

5. Close on Spidey's gloved hand around Treat's fist...we can see discoloring around the glove.

6. Shreds of the glove are flittering to the ground – the fabric is "dying" before our eyes. Spidey's eyes wide here.

SPIDER-MAN (O.S.?): What the-- ?!

7. Spidey's flipped and landed on Treat's back as the others close in again. Spidey's still holding the scythe.

Page Four:
1. Spider-man's looking at his hand. The glove has a hole in it the shape of Treat's fist, and his skin is raw – several layers of skin have been eaten away.  We can see the web shooter on his hand too. It's damaged and discolored (rusty?).

SPIDER-MAN: Okay...several expletives occur to me just now.

2-4.
In quick succession, Spider-Man flips off of Treat and ducks further attacks.

SPIDER-MAN: I Just got those web shooters back!...

SPIDER-MAN: ...and you gotta go and ruin 'em?!

5. Trick flies at Spidey on his glider...

SPIDER-MAN (THOUGHT): Great.  This one's back on his—

6. Blue gets Spidey in a full nelson as Trick comes in fast.

SPIDER-MAN: *SIGH!*...Still haven't had time to recover fully from that experiment by the crazy doctor dude...

Page Five:
1. Trick flies on, leaving some kind of black sack over Spidey's head.

2. Spidey flips Blue over his head.

3. Spidey spins around, pulling off the sack, finding himself face-to-face with Eve.

SPIDER-MAN: Uh-oh.

4. He webs up her face-mask.

SFX: THWIP!

5. Close on Spidey.
SPIDER-MAN (THOUGHT): Woh.  Suddenly dizzy...wh—the black sack!  Did something to my equilib—

Page Six:
1. Eve has swung her mask, using both her hands, across Spidey's face.

2. Spider-Man's down.

O.S.: SPIDER-MAN!!

SPIDER-MAN (THOUGHT): M...J?...I...Can't...can't...

3. Blackness.

4. Blackness opening up...

5. Blackness still opening up...

SFX: KSSH!  KSSH!  FKK-OOOM!!  FKK-OOOM!  

6. Blackness opening up in the shape of Spidey's eyes.  We can see, in squiggles and/or blurriness, the city coming into view.  Some kind of battle going on around Spider-Man.

Page Seven:
1. ½ or ⅓ Page: Over-lay of Spider-Man's eyes, open as they normally are on his mask.  Behind them (as in, In Front of Spider-Man) is the big, scary, grinning face of...

TERROR GOBLIN*: 'Bout time you woke up, Pete.  we gotta talk!

CAPTION (somewhere below TG's word balloon):

When all is over and you march for home 

The spoils of war are easily disposed of 

Standards, weapons of combat, helmets, drums...

The spoils of love present a different case.

                                         - paraphrased from Robert Graves' "Spoils"

*Intro'd last ish!

2. Shot of Goblin yelling at Spider-Man.

Goblin's glider circles around them.

TERROR GOBLIN: Stand up, Spider-Man!  

3. Long shot of the street:

Police on one end, in riot gear, guns aimed;  S.H.I.E.L.D. floating above.  Behind Spider-Man, the crowd is being held hostage, the Halloween Gang standing guard (or perhaps being a little more threatening to some of those in the crowd – you know, Harvest has his scythe at the neck of two, Blue holds two or three up against a wall, etc.).

MJ and Anna are not seen.

SPIDER-MAN: W—What do you want? What's happened here?

Page Eight:
1.
TERROR GOBLIN: It's a stand-off I'm afraid.  Their tear gas and their guns have only put the crowd at risk.

2.
SPIDER-MAN: Wh-- Who are you?!

2.
TERROR GOBLIN: Oh, Pete.  Come on, surely you recognize my voice.

SPIDER-MAN: No, ..I...  No!  H-- ...Harry?

TERROR GOBLIN: Good ol' Pete.  

3. Spider-Man's collapsed.

TERROR GOBLIN: Oh, don't fall apart on me now, Peter Parker!

S.H.I.E.L.D. HELICARRIER (ELECTRIC):  YOU HAVE ONE MINUTE TO COMPLY WITH PREVIOUSLY STATED ORDERS.  WE DO NOT BARGAIN WITH TERRORISTS!

4.
Spidey on ground, groggy.

SPIDER-MAN: Wh--  what's going on?!

TERROR GOBLIN: Well, it seems my timing was pretty bad, Pete.  See, I'd like to destroy the city's crimeworld, take it over, kill you, and also get Liz and little Harry to come with me.  But nothing's ever as easy as it seems.  

TERROR GOBLIN: And who knew S.H.I.E.L.D.'s HQ was hovering just downtown? Guess I need to work on my recon.

5.

SPIDER-MAN: Wh-- H--  I-- HOLY !%$! !@%, Harry!  What are you doing?  How are you here?  I-- I don't understand this!

6. Spidey looking over the held-hostage crowd.

SPIDER-MAN:  MJ was here...with Anna.  Where is she?!  Where are they?

7. Spidey' grabbed Goblin by the shirt, holding him up.

SPIDER-MAN: WHERE ARE THEY, HARRY?!

8. Close on Terror Goblin.

TERROR GOBLIN (small): Dead.

PAGE TWENTY-NINE:
Panel 1:
We're looking at a monitor of a DNA strand – let's make it similar to the one seen in the films if possible.

CAPTION: ESU SCIENCE LAB 3, UPTOWN...

Panel 2 (combine this panel w/above if nec.):
We've pulled out a little – revealing a keyboard, with Spidey typing on it (ungloved, but the costume begins mid-forearm, which is visible).  Same DNA strand is on the monitor, but we can see a slight change from the previous panel...A red circle in the upper corner with some sort of dot encircling it is also now visible. In the center of the circle is: DIAG.

Panel 3:
Angle on Peter, unmasked, but still in costume...he's cradling a phone; it's connected to a base which is on a nearby wall.

PETER 1: IT'S THE THIRD DIAGNOSTIC CHECK. I'M NEARLY CERTAIN THERE'S NO ERROR --

PETER 2: -- MY DNA'S BEING ALTERED WITH EVERY PASSING SECOND!

PETER 3: I'VE DONE ENOUGH BLOOD TESTING ON MYSELF TO KNOW WHAT I'M SEEING, MJ, AND IT LOOKS LIKE I REALLY AM...

Panel 4:
Larger panel.  A classic half Peter/half Spider-Man face shot....

PETER 4: ...I'M LOSING MY POWERS!

Panel 5:
He's putting his gloves, back, having shut down the computer....

PETER 5: ...THE ONLY POSITIVE OUTCOME IS THAT JUST MAYBE THE LAW WILL BE LENIENT AT MY TRIAL* -- THE FACT I'M NO LONGER SPIDER-MAN COULD HELP.

PETER 6: YEAH. WISHFUL THINKING. WHAT?...NO...NO...I HAVEN'T SEEN THE— 'SUPERVILLAINS'? GREAT.   

CAPTION AT BOTTOM: * Peter made a few stupid mistakes when trying to save his Aunt several issues back.

Panel 6:
Back in full costume:
PETER 7:  LISTEN, HON, I'M HEADING BACK DOWNTOWN – SEE YOU THERE?

PETER 8: GOOD...GIVE ANNA A KISS FOR ME. AND BE CAREFUL.

PAGE THIRTY:
Panel 1-2:
Small panels, horizontal along top of page...

1: Spidey is leaping out of the building...

PETER 1: OKAY, PARKER...THINK....MAYBE IT'S TEMPORARY. YOU INTERRUPTED THE process...THE ONE THAT DROVE RHINO MAD, MADE GARGAN MORE VENOM AND LESS SCORPION...BUT BOTH REMAINED STRONG—

2: On an empty street, Spidey's lifted a grating out of the sidewalk.

PETER 2: --THEY WERE JUST LESS...ANIMAL. THAT'S IT!  IT WAS SAPPING THE SPIDER IN ME!

PETER 3: I DON'T KNOW IF I SHOULD BE ELATED -- OR WORRIED.   

Panel 3:
Long vertical panel down full side of page...Spidey falling, having jumped down (the grating back in place)...

PETER 4: NOW I GOTTA FIND OUT WHO THAT WAS THE THUNDERBOLTS HANDED ME OFF TO--

Panel 4:
Large Panel:
Rest of page – Spider-Man's landed atop a downtown 2 or 3 train....which speeds along the underground track...

PETER 5: AND MEET MJ BACK AT THE BUGLE AND HOPE THAT...

PAGE  THIRTY-ONE:
Panel 1:
J.J.J. is on his cell phone, cradling it on his shoulder uncomfortably:

PETER CAPTION: ...JOLLY JONAH'S IN A BETTER MOOD THAN USUAL.  

J.J.J.: ARE YOU !%@!$@ KIDDING ME, MARLA? NOT ONLY IS A GIGANTIC NEWS STORY BREAKING OUT ALL OVER THIS CITY...

Panel 2:
We see now that J.J.'s in an empty, old store room.  Some dilapidated desks and metal shelving  are in a corner.  J.J.'s got a hammer in hand; it seems he's just put a curtain up over grime-covered window.  

A cot w/some pillows is also nearby if you can fit it.

J.J.J. 2: BUT THOSE KIDS NEED A PLACE TO STAY, DANG IT!...I AM NOT YELLING!...I'LL BE HOME...SOON!  

Panel 3:
JJ's wiped his fingers along the glass of a window he's looking out of – we see the streaks through the grime...

J.J.J. 3: YES. I'M SORRY. NO.  NO, PLEASE DON'T BE ANGRY, MARLA, I THINK I'VE...

Panel 4:
JJ's noticed something out the window, he's squinting through the grimy pane...

J.J.J. 4: ...MADE enough...

Panel 5:
JJ's eyes are wide now...

J.J.J. 5 (small): ...ENEMIES.

J.J.J. 6: MARLA. I HAVE TO GO!

PAGE THIRTY-TWO:
Panel 1:
Large panel:
Harvest, on his "glider," has crashed through the window, swinging his scythe!

JJ's run for cover...

Panel 2:
Harvest crashes out another window on the adjacent wall!

J.J.J. 1: WHAT THE--?!

Panel 3:
Spidey's leapt through the first window.

SPIDER-MAN: WELL, HIYA, J.J.!  HOW'S THINGS?

J.J.J.: COULD BE BETTER -- GO GET THEM!

SPIDER-MAN: I DON'T EVEN KNOW WHO 'THEM' ARE!  I WAS JUMPED COMING OUT OF THE—

Panel 4:
Close on Spidey, spider-sense ringing!

Spider-man 2: --WHOOPS!  HOLD THAT THOUGHT!

Panel 5:
Blue Eclipse has jumped through one of the windows—

Panel 6:
Spidey's ducked under him, fallen either onto his back or backwards onto his hands....

PAGE THIRTY-THREE:
Panel 1:
Spidey's used his feet to toss Blue out the other window – let's get part of the DAILY BUGLE sign – the one with the big red letters sitting on the outside of the building -- in this shot of Blue falling out the window...

Panel 2:
Back inside: Spidey's turned to JJ...

SPIDER-MAN 1: FRIENDS OF YOURS, JONAH?

J.J.J. 1: THESE THINGS HAVE BEEN TEARING UP THE CITY ALL NIGHT!  WHERE THE HECK HAVE YOU BEEN?!  LAST WE HEARD, THE THUNDERBOLTS HANDED YOU OVER TO SOME SCIENTIFIC RESEARCH FACILITY, PROMISED TO STRIP YOU OF YOUR—

Panel 3:  

SPIDER-MAN: POWERS...yeah. THANKS FOR THE UPDATE.

J.J.J. 2: WAIT. YOU HAVE NO SUPER SPIDER POWERS OR WHATEVER YOU CALL 'EM?

Panel 4:
SPIDER-MAN: WHEN HAVE YOU EVER HEARD ME USE THE PHRASE 'SUPER SPIDER POWERS'? AND, NO, I'VE GOT 'EM, BUT THEY MAY BE DETERIORATING. BUT MY STRENGTH, AGILITY, AND MY SPIDER-SENSE—

Panel 5:
Trick, sans glider, has tackled Spider-Man.

SPIDER-MAN: --IS APPARENTLY...A BIT...WONKY!

Panel 6:
Hallow's Eve diving at Jonah... Spider-Man grappling with Trick...

PAGE THIRTY-FOUR:
First several panels:
Spider-Man and Trick trading blows.

Hallow's Eve has pinned JJ against a wall somewhere in the milieu...

SFX (around Trick): HEH-HA! HEH HA-HAHA HEH HA-HAHAHAHA!

SPIDER-MAN: SO, WHAT'RE YOU, THE BEIGE GOBLIN?

SPIDER-MAN 2: J.J., ANY IDEA WHAT THEY WANT?

Next Panel:
SPIDER-MAN 3: J.J.?

Next Panel:
Eve is right up in J.J.'s face.

Next Panel:
Close on J.J.'s wide, bloodshot eyes...a tear coming from an eye.

Final Panel:
J.J.'s doubled-over, crying...Spidey in BG or foreground.

J.J.J. (small): HALLOWEEN GANG?  NO...

J.J.J. 2: NO!! I'M SORRY, JOHN, FOR EVERYTHING THAT'S HAPPENED!  NOOO!

SPIDER-MAN 4: OK...THAT'S SO NOT GOOD.

PAGE THIRTY-FIVE:
Spidey's got a hold of Trick....

Eve jumps at Spidey...

Harvest and Treat come in on Gliders...

Spidey's tossed Eve into Blue who's re-entered.

Spidey's surrounded...

SPIDER-MAN: SO. YOU GUYS IN TOWN TO CATCH A BROADWAY SHOW? MAYBE DO the CIRCLE LINE THING?   

Trick's tossed a pumpkin at Spidey – Spidey jumps to the ceiling.

SPIDER-MAN (thought) 2: PUMPKIN BOMB!  SO They are related to the GREEN Goblin!

The "Pumpkin Bomb" has opened...

PUMPKIN BOMB (electric): SPIDER-MAN...IF YOU'RE HEARING THIS, THEN MY FRIENDS HAVE FOUND YOU. FORMAL INTRODUCTIONS WILL COME LATER...FOR NOW, KNOW THAT THIS IS JUST THE BEGINNING...

PUMPKIN BOMB (electric) 2: ...BUT FOR YOU— IT'S SIMPLY THE END!

PAGE THIRTY-SIX:
Panel 1:
Close on Spidey...

SPIDER-MAN (thought): I KNEW IT – THAT'S THE GOBLIN'S VOICE.  AND UNLESS SOMEONE'S IMPERSONATING HIM...NORMAN OSBORN'S BACK IN RARE FORM!...

Panel 2:
Close on Spidey...

SPIDER-MAN 2 (thought) 2: AND IF I KNOW THE GREEN GOBLIN...

Panels 3-5:
Quick succession: Spidey's scooped-up the open Pumpkin Device, bounced off of one of the Halloween Gang and tossed the Pumpkin Device out the window...

Panel 6:
The device explodes.

Panel 7:
Spidey outside – taunting the Halloween gang.

SPIDER-MAN 3: OKAY, KIDS! YOU'VE DELIVERED THE MESSAGE...SHAME YOU WON'T BE ABLE TO REPORT BACK TO GOBBY – 'CAUSE I'M GONNA WIPE THE STREET WITH YOU MUGS!  

SPIDER-MAN 4: CATCH ME IF YOU CAN!

PAGE THIRTY-SIX:  [NOTE TO ME: um...do I have TWO page 36s? uh-oh!]
Spider-Man battles the Halloween Gang!...with no webbing, he's doing this while either sticking to The Daily Bugle building or jumping onto the individual gliders of The Gang...

SPIDER-MAN (thought): WHAT ARE THESE GUYS MADE OF – EACH ONE'S STRONGER THAN THE NEXT!

SPIDER-MAN (thought) 2: WHAT I NEED IS MY WEBBING...AND WHILE MY STRENGTH EBBS AND FLOWS...IT LOOKS LIKE THOSE ARE GONE—

SPIDER-MAN (thought) 3: --FOREVER!

He's able to keep them at bay—until...

Treat grabs  him from behind!  Gets him in a bear hug!

PAGE THIRTY-SEVEN:
Panel 1:
They're in mid-air.  Spider-Man being squeezed tight; his costume shredding where Treat has him. Harvest is approaching with his scythe...

SPIDER-MAN (thought): GREAT. SPIDER-SENSE IS STILL ON THE FRITZ!

SFX (from O.P.): CLANG!  CLANG!!

Panel 2:
Harvest has the point of his scythe right at Spidey's neck...Hallow's Eve approaches....

SPIDER-MAN 2: YOU FUN FELLAS DON'T SEEM TO CHAT MUCH – MAYBE WE CAN JUST GO BOWLING?

SFX (from O.P.): CLANG!  CLANG!!!

Panel 3:
Angle on Spidey's reflective lenses – Hallow's Eve visible in them.

SFX (from O.P.): CLANG!!!

Panel 4:
Spidey freaking-out.

SPIDER-MAN 3: The Halloween Gang!  What're you—what... NOOOOO!!

SFX (from O.P.):  CLANG!!!!

Panel 5:
Spider-Man is still trying to get a hold of himself...

J.J.J. (OP): SPIDER-MAN!  Parker! Snap the !%! Out of it!

SFX (from O.P.): CLANG!!!!

PAGE THIRTY-EIGHT:
Inset/Panel 1-2:
J.J. is swinging the hammer at some kind of metal attachment, knocking the crap out of it...

SFX: CLANGT!!!

SFX: CLANGT!!!

Inset Panel 3:
J.J.J. (sfx): Ti-i-i-i-i-i-mber-r-r-r!

SFX: CREE-RRRRNNNG

Splash Panel 4:
The "L" and the "E" from the word "BUGLE" are falling onto The Halloween Gang—Spidey's diving out of the way, toward the Bugle building...

A crowd below is being held back by police.

PAGE THIRTY-EIGHT:  [NOTE TO ME: and TWO 38s? AAGHH! Note to reader: This means some cuttin' an' fixin' will be happening on this post. ]
Panel 1:
J.J. looking down off the ledge at the good work he's done...

J.J.J.: 'BUGLE PUBLISHER SAVES SPIDER-MAN'...NOT BAD...

Panel 2:
Spidey's crawled up, joining him...

SPIDER-MAN: I WAS JUST ABOUT TO MAKE MY...

Panel 3:
Spidey slips!
SPIDER-MAN 2: ...MOO-O-V-WHOH!

Panel 4:
J.J.'s grabbed Peter's wrist.

Panel 5:
Pulls him up. Spidey's looking down over his shoulder...

SPIDER-MAN 3: GREAT, NOW I'M SLIPPING OFF WALLS!
.. -->[if !supportLineBreakNewLine]-->
.. -->[endif]-->J.J.J. 2: 'BUGLE PUBLISHER SAVES SPIDER-MAN – TWICE!' HMPH. THAT HALLOW'S EVE. SHE LOOKED INTO YOUR EYES TOO, PETER. I—I KNOW EVERYTHING ABOUT THEM.  AND SHE SAW MY – OUR – DEEPEST FEARS.

SPIDER-MAN 4: NO, IT CAN'T BE...

Panel 6:
J.J.J. 3: PLEASE, PARKER, DON'T BE SO PROUD, IT-- 

SPIDER-MAN 5: NO, JONAH....NOT THAT...

Panel 7:
Horizontal panel across page:
The Halloween Gang is pulling itself out of the wreckage!!

SPIDER-MAN 6 (O.P.): ...That!

PAGE THIRTY-NINE:
Panel 1:
Spider-Man about to leap off...

SPIDER-MAN 1: GOTTA GO, J.J.

J.J.J. 1: PARKER, THEY'RE TOO--

Panel 2:
He's jumped.

J.J.J.:  --WELL TRY TO GET A FEW PUNCHES IN THIS TIME, WOULDJA!?

Panel 3:
Horizontal panel across page.  Long shot of J.J. on the ledge.

WE SEE that the Bugle's sign now reads: THE DAILY BUG

J.J.J. (small): GET 'EM, SPIDEY!

Panel 4:
Spidey's bounding from building to building to reach the street...

Panel 5:
On the street, amongst the mess, the police, and the crowd (behind wooden police barriers), we see The Halloween Gang is not in great shape: the crash has town off limbs and/or severely dislocated their limbs...one or two of them might even have pieces of street or metal piercing straight through their body or head.

SPIDER-MAN 2: WELL NOW, THIS IS JUST DISGUSTING! YOU GUYS...AREN'T GUYS AT ALL!...YOU'RE SOME KIND OF...CREATURES! 

VOICE (O.P.): TIGER!...

SPIDER-MAN (thought) 3: MJ?

PAGE FORTY:
Panel 1:
Spidey's spun, and a Tiger's jumped at him!

Lady: A TIGER!!

SPIDER-MAN: NOT...EXACTLY...WHAT I WAS...HOPING FOR!

Panel 2:
Spidey's quickly gotten the upper-hand...

SPIDER-MAN 2: HM. YOU'RE PRETTY SMALL FOR A--

M.J. (O.P.): TIGER!

Panel 3:
ANGLE ON MJ, Aunt Anna nearby in BG.  MJ's tossed Spider-Man something metallic but indiscernible in this shot...

M.J.: THOUGHT YOU COULD USE A LITTLE SOMETHING, LOVE O' MY LIFE!

Panel 4:
Spidey's leapt towards the objects, avoiding a swing by the Tiger's paw and a swing by the scythe of Harvest. (I really like that Harvest guy!)

Panel 5:
Medium-close on Spidey, one hand grasping his opposite wrist...(ARTIST: do we get a peek at what she's tossed to him? [see next page])

SPIDER-MAN 3: ALL RIGHT, EVERYBODY— AS AUNT PETUNIA'S NEPHEW LIKES TO SAY...

PAGE FORTY-ONE:
SPLASH PAGE:
SPIDER-MAN: IT'S CLOBBERIN' TIIIIME!!

Shot of Spider-Man in mid-air, sleeves rolled up: his old WEB SHOOTERS very visible and webbing up the Tiger and Harvest – let's have Blue Eclipse wrapped-up as well.  One of Spidey's feet kicking Trick back toward the reader?  Treat and Hallow's Eve coming from other directions at Spider-Man!

PAGE FORTY-TWO:
Panel 1:
J.J.'s making his way though the newsroom...Robbie's nearby...

ROBBIE 1: FROM BAD TO WORSE, JONAH...

J.J.J. 1: WHAT NOW?

Panel 2:
ANGLE ON: Robbie, turning up the volume on a nearby TV where we see Norman Osborn. The BG behind Norman should be what we saw in Harry Osborn's big, dark room earlier – in other words, this is the shape-shifter as Norman. And should thus be dressed as he was earlier.

Oh, and Norman is not of a calm demeanor as he's been seen lately...this Norman that we're seeing is in the middle of an angry, loud, rant....

ROBBIE 1: PLAYING IT OVER AND OVER...S.H.I.E.L.D.'S HAD NO RESPONSE SO FAR...HE'S LOST IT, J.J.

J.J.J. 2: OSBORN.

OSBORN/SHAPE-SHIFTER (electric, from TV): ...S.H.I.E.L.D. HAS PROVEN THEMSELVES UNABLE AND UNWORTHY TO THE TASK! 

Panel 3:
OSBORN/SHAPE-SHIFTER (electric, from TV) 2: SPIDER-MAN ESCAPED THE GRASP OF MY SCIENTIFIC RESEARCH GROUP AND THAT OF THE THUNDERBOLTS...HE IS THE BIN LADEN OF NEW YORK.  AND I AM THE IRON FIST OF THE WEST, SURROUNDING HIM FAST!

OSBORN/SHAPE-SHIFTER (electric, from TV) 3: MY MERCENARIES ARE OUT THERE RIGHT NOW, ATTEMPTING TO APPREHEND HIM! THE SPIDER MUST DIE!  BUT WE MUST ALL JOIN IN THE FIGHT...

J.J.J. 3: MY GOD, ROBBIE...HE IS TRULY  A LUNATIC.

Panel 4:
OSBORN/SHAPE-SHIFTER (electric, from TV) 4: FIGHT OR FRIGHT I ALWAYS SAY!!  WHILE S.H.I.E.L.D. LAY DORMANT, I BUILT GGI INDUSTRIES UP SECRETLY WITH MY MANY PARTNERS DOING MY BIDDING. THE PAPER TRAIL EXISTS -- I CRIED FOR ATTENTION – 'SOMEONE COME FOR ME, SOMEONE NOTICE ME!'  FOR WHAT ELSE COULD GGI STAND FOR?

Panel 5:
OSBORN/SHAPE-SHIFTER (electric, from TV) 5: PREPARE NEW YORK – PREPARE WORLD -- THE GREEN GOBLIN IS COMING!! AND I MAKE THIS PROMISE TO MY OLD FRIENDS, TO SPIDER-MAN, AND TO ALL WHO WATCH THESE WORDS COME FROM MY GRINNING MAW.

OSBORN/SHAPE-SHIFTER (electric, from TV) 6: MY REIGN WILL BE PAINFUL...BUT IT WILL BE FRUITFUL!

Panel 6:
The TV's been shut off.

J.J.J. 4: FORGET LOOSE SCREWS, THE WHOLE CONTRAPTION'S BUSTED IN THIS GUY'S HEAD.

ROBBIE 2: THIS RANT LASTS FOR THREE MINUTES... HE'S APPARENTLY HOLED UP IN THUNDERBOLTS MOUNTAIN NOW...BUT HE'S CLAIMED RESPONSIBILITY FOR ALL THE DESTRUCTION OF THE LAST 48 HOURS -- AND THESE TERRORISTS, WHOEVER THEY ARE.

J.J.J. 5: THE HALLOWEEN GANG...

Panel 7:
Make this panel very soap opera-y, John Romita style.  Robbie in BG, J.J.J. extreme close in foreground and shadowy...

ROBBIE 3: HOW DO YOU—

J.J.J. 6: I'M NOT TALKING ABOUT IT. JUST TRUST ME. THAT'S WHO THEY ARE...IT'S A BUGLE EXCLUSIVE.  AND...THEY'RE THE UNDEAD.

PAGE FORTY-THREE:
Six-panel layout – Spidey on the left, Harry Osborn on the right-side panels...

Panel 1:
The Tiger has turned into an orangey snake...the webbing slipping off of it...

Spider-Man is giving Blue a wallop...

SPIDER-MAN (thought): MY PUNCHES BARELY GET A REACTION FROM THESE THINGS!

SPIDER-MAN (thought) 2: AND THIS SHAPE-SHIFTING ANIMAL IS JUST BIZARRE!  RHINO'S DE-RHINO'D, VENOM'S LOST HIS STING...AND THIS THING COMES OUT OF NOWHERE!

Panel 2:
Harry talking to his Lawyer (shape-shifter) and to the PR Guy outside the damaged GGI building.  There's some kind of panel on the wall nearby...

HARRY 1: ...YOU BOTH WILL DISAPPEAR UNTIL NEEDED AGAIN.  YOUR PROMISED REWARDS AWAIT YOU...

PR GUY: THEY NEVER...FOUND HER, SIR.

HARRY 2: IT'S...IT'S FINE. IT JUST MEANS SHE'S LEFT THE CITY.  SO HARD TO KEEP TRACK OF EVERYONE...

Panel 3:
Spidey's webbing the snake (which sounds like it should be a euphemism for something – but it's not!)...and swinging at Trick!

SPIDER-MAN (thought) 3: I'M NOT SURE HOW MUCH LONGER I CAN HOLD THEM OFF...I'M STARTING TO FEEL WEAK AGAIN...AND MY SPIDER SENSE HASN'T GONE OFF THIS WHOLE TIME...

Panel 4:
The PR Guy is taking off.  Shape-shifter is changing....

HARRY 2: DON'T FORGET A THING THAT HAS HAPPENED HERE, BEAST!  YOUR... 'PEOPLE' LEFT YOU FOR DEAD...I BROUGHT YOU BACK. GO...JOIN THEM.  BUT REMEMBER YOUR DEBT!

SHAPE-SHIFTER: INDEED I WILL, OSBORN....BUT I AM NO BEAST, I AM MERELY WHAT HE MADE ME TO BE.

Panel 5:
Harvest is seen, his hands holding his scythe...but both hands and scythe have been webbed to his head – his eyes are also covered with webbing.  Spidey is swinging from the staff of the scythe, kicking Trick into Treat, both have tumbled over the orange snake. (Whew!)

SPIDER-MAN (thought) 4: ONLY GOOD THING IS THAT THE VILLAIN BEHIND THIS MAY NOT HAVE SHOWN HIMSELF YET...BUT AT LEAST HE CAN'T HAVE MUCH ELSE UP HIS SLEEVE!

Panel 6:
The Shape Shifter has changed into a Skrull (for those not in the know: in the Marvel Universe, Skrulls are an alien race who can shape-shift and are currently trying to take over the Earth!)...

SHAPE-SHIFTER 2: ...YOU, HOWEVER, ARE SOMETHING...TERRIBLE AND UNGODLY!

Harry, is facing the audience here – the panel on the wall behind him is opening...

HARRY 3: HEHEH...YES...YES, I JUST MIGHT BE!  AND I THINK IT'S TIME FOR ME TO BRING MY HORROR UPON THE MASSES...OH, YES...HEEHEE...IT IS TIME FOR THE RISE OF...

Page forty-four:
SPlash:
Harry, fully transformed here – he is a grotesque monster...his white eyes are framed by black bursts of pain, his forehead is pocked and decayed, his mouth is formed into a horrible scream....

ARTIST: Has he torn off his suit to reveal a costume? If so: it'd be a mangle of torn clothes, armor, and chain mail... He has a hood that lay upon his chest (that is, NOT behind his head as hoods normally do)...we're seeing his face, he has no mask!

And that face is most definitely of the Marvel GOBLIN variety!

He has jumped atop a Goblin Glider – this one has a flat round base with swept-back wings, serrated edges on the front.  It's come out of the panel from the wall – and the building it came out of is now in flames...

HARRY (SFX): ...THE TERROR GOBLIN!

SFX: WAHH HA HA HA HA HA AHHH-HA HA HA HAAA!!

NEXT:
HARRY OSBORN LIVES! The TERROR GOBLIN Causes Mayhem! And, Speaking Of 'May,' How Is She Doing These Days?  And Where's Flash?  Who's Genus?  And Can Spidey Defeat The Goblin's Halloween Gang?

FIND OUT NEXT ISSUE, EVERYBODY!!

WELCOME, READERS!

Feel free to skip my welcome note and go RIGHT TO THE SCRIPT: scroll to the BOLD LINES...

KEITH'S SOAPBOX (borrowed from Stan):
If you've been checking out my bountiful blog of Spidey stories, then you've no doubt noticed one thing: there's sure been a heck of a lot of chit-chat in these stories o' mine.

Yes, dear dreary-eyed readers, 'tis true. Your ol' pal Keith "Big K" Planit is busy cleaning up a mess bigger than Avengers Mansion during Avengers Disassembled.

See, Marvel's editorial team decided that there's no drama in marriage (apparently none of those big goofs have ever been married...or been with a woman), so they dissolved Peter Parker's marriage to MJ. They did this with a magical creature named Mephisto – the big jerk.

Anyhoozit, that story was certainly a sad one, not just because MJ and Peter were rendered single, but because Peter Parker did the one thing Peter Parker has NEVER done: acted un-heroically. For gosh sakes, a superhero made a deal with a devil!

Eek! So, I've been writing these terribly tense tales of Spider-Man, continuing from the point that SPIDER-MAN COULD HAVE SAVED THE DAY, SAVED AUNT MAY, AND SAVED HIS MARRIAGE TO SEXY MJ! (Hey, I made all of that rhyme just in the nick of time!)

But, gosh, there're a lot of plot-threads that I wanted to undangle, so that we could move on. These plots can be listed here as follows, on the following list!...
1. Spidey dealing with Aunt May (conveniently out of the way for a little while -- and, yes, still fighting for her life!)
2. Spidey confronting newspaper publisher J. Jonah Jameson about the revelation that he is Daily Bugle photographer Peter Parker under the mask (a confrontation every Spidey fan has been waiting 40+ years for!)
3. He is a wanted criminal by Tony Stark, a.k.a. Iron Man. And while that can't get resolved just yet, I thought the temporary daddy figure, Tony, and his "son" should come to some sort of terms.

This is my third Spidey comics script I'm posting, and it's the last time you're gonna see two characters from the Marvel Universe standing around chit-chatting.

After this, it's action, intrigue, and supervillain battles like only the Mighty Marvel could give you – well, except they're not. I AM!

And, by the way, I post here my VERY FIRST DRAFTS. Then I go back and make changes right on the blog. You know, I fiddle with dialogue, futz with panel descriptions, or finagle the plot-lines. I'll find spelling errors and typos and fix 'em as I re-read...And you get to see it change...as long as you check back!

Also, just like in the actual comics, I'm hoping for feedback! So please gimme some! Otherwise I'll assume I'm prefect in aboslutely ervey way!

KEITH!

AMAZING SPIDER-MAN 547
*Note to readers: for some reason the MySpace blog tends to randomly delete words or sentences...so if something looks amiss, it probably is. Please let me know.
PAGE ONE:

Nine to Twelve Panels...
Spider-Man crawling along something we can't quite discern...he's shooting his webs onto whatever he's crawling around on, creating some sort of shape with those webs of his. And, again, we cannot discern what the shape is.

We can tell that he's outside...and we can tell that whatever he's crawling along is large, made of metal and glass (or probably some unbreakable glass-like substance, but that's neither here nor there). Perhaps it's a building...

In one or two of these panels, about center of page, we should see him swing from one indiscernible object to the other...then continue his work...

What he's webbing will be revealed later...

PAGE TWO AND THREE:
DOUBLE-PAGE SPLASH w/insets.

DOUBLE-PAGE Panel :
Spidey making his way through the oncoming horde of S.H.I.E.L.D. agents! Again, Spidey sense is STILL tingling BIG-TIME!

Inset 1:
Spider-Man's landing atop the S.H.I.E.L.D. Helicarrier. Large Spider-Sense WAVES are shooting around his head.

Inset 2:
Close on Spidey.

SPIDER-MAN 1: OKAY, SERIOUSLY, SOMEONE HERE IS GIVING ME AND MY SPIDER-SENSE A SPLITTING HEADACHE, SO EITHER CHANGE THE STATION OR GET ME A BOTTLE OF EXTRA-STRENGTH EXCEDRIN – PRONTO!

Inset 3:
S.H.I.E.L.D. agents on deck taking notice:

RANDOM AGENT 1: ENEMY ON BASE!!

RANDOM AGENT 2: READY ARMS!

TITLE & CREDITS:
Writer: Keith Planit
Artist:
Letters:
DEDICATED TO: Stan Lee, Steve Ditko, John Romita Sr., Mickey Demeo, Todd DeZago, Alex Saviuk, Erik Larsen, and Bob McLeod

TITLE:
SPIDER-MAN vs. S.H.I.EL.D.
or
"HOW I LEARNED TO STOP WORRYING AND LOVE OL' SHELLHEAD"

PAGE THREE
Panel 1
He's made his way off the main deck...trying to work his way toward the location of the thing hitting his spider-sense.
SPIDER-MAN 1: WHY WOULD SOMEONE IN S.H.I.E.L.D. PURPOSEFULLY MAKE MY SPIDER-SEN--

SPIDER-MAN 2: OF COURSE! TONY STARK...HE GOT MY MESSAGE!
(maybe the panel for the above line is a flashback of last issue, Tony analyzing the wall/discovering the msg.)


PAGE FOUR
On this page Spider-Man begins to get overwhelmed by S.H.I.E.L.D...
Several panels, split-up as needed.

SPIDER-MAN: CAN'T HURT THEM, BUT...THERE'S JUST...TOO MANY...GOTTA GET ABOVE TH--

Another battalion – just a small one -- of S.H.I.E.L.D. guys bursts through some double-doors...there's smoke at the floor as they enter.

SPIDER-MAN 2: UH-OH!

SPIDER-MAN 3: WELP, NO MATTER WHAT THEY THROW AT ME, I GOTTA GET THROUGH AND STOP WHAT EVER IT IS THAT'S GOT MY HEAD RINGING LIKE A FOUR-ALARM FIRE!


PAGE FIVE
Several panels, split-up as needed.

As the new soldiers join the fray; the smoke rises, and these shield agents turn on the others...

SPIDER-MAN: WHA-- HEY!!

SPIDER-MAN (THOUGHT): STRA-A-ANGE!


PAGE SIX
Several panels, split-up as needed.
Spider-Man escapes; looks back and we see the others are actually The New Avengers in S.H.I.E.L.D. outfits (Should there be a see-through overlay on the New Avengers' faces? The overlay being the generic S.H.I.E.L.D. faces they're "wearing" thanks to Dr. Strange's magic.).

Doc Strange looks to Spidey with a sly smirk.


PAGE SEVEN
Several panels, split-up as needed.
The New Avengers fight the S.H.I.E.L.D. agents, being careful not to actually harm them but distracting them enough to let Spidey get where he wants to go.

By the end of the page...
LUKE CAGE: RETREAT!


PAGE EIGHT
SPLASH

Still nighttime -- The Avengers are jumping off the front of the helicarrier; where we now see what Spidey was webbing earlier: on the giant front windows of the helicarrier he webbed the shape of his eyes...essentially making the helicarrier itself into a gigantic Spidey signal!

IRON FIST: NEXT TIME HE NEEDS HELP, MAYBE HE SHOULD BE A LITTLE MORE SUBTLE.

RONIN/CLINT BARTON: I'M JUST SURPRISED THE OTHER AVENGERS DIDN'T SHOW!

DR. STRANGE: PERHAPS THEY MERELY ARRIVED UPON THE WRONG FLYING MACHINE, BELIEVING IT TO BE THE HELICARRIER.

WOLVERINE: THAT'D BE A DARN SHAME. HEH.


PAGE NINE
Panel 1:
Large panel: Mighty Avengers are on the (note spelling) Michelinie Tires blimp (it's night still btw)...literally on the top of it.

ARES: THIS MAY HAVE BEEN A RUSE!

JANET/THE WASP: YA THINK!

ARES (THOUGHT): HER DEFIANCE WARMS MY NETHER REGIONS.

MS. MARVEL: I AM SO TIRED OF DR. STRANGE AND HIS TRICKS.
MS. MARVEL (THOUGHT): I AM SO $@!K% TIRED OF $C!$% DR. STRANGE AND HIS %F!@$% TRICKS.

Rest of page:
Spidey on the helicarrier; creeping through the halls, sneaking around, avoiding cameras and sensors and the like.

His spider-sense still reacting wildly.

SPIDER-MAN: IF I DON'T STOP THIS SOON, MY HEAD'S GONNA EXPLODE.

SPIDER-MAN 2: AND THAT WOULD BE AN AWFUL MESS FOR THE S.H.I.E.L.D. JANITOR.


PAGE TEN
More of Spidey sneaking around -- several panels.

SPIDER-MAN (THOUGHT): ALL RIGHT, TONY, I GET IT -- I HAD YOUR NUMBER...

SPIDER-MAN 2 (THOUGHT): ...NOW YOU'VE GOT MINE!
SPIDER-MAN 3 (THOUGHT): THE ONLY TWO THINGS I HAVE TO WONDER ABOUT NOW ARE...

SPIDER-MAN 4 (THOUGHT): ONE, WILL HE HONOR MY REQUEST AND MEET ME AS A FRIEND... AND TWO --

SPIDER-MAN 5 (THOUGHT): -- WILL I BE MEETING WITH TONY, OR WILL I BE SEEING...


PAGE ELEVEN
3/4-PAGE SPLASH

Angle on Iron Man holding the doohickie making Spidey's Spider-sense go wild.

SPIDER-MAN (SFX): IRON MAN!

Panel 2:

Close on IM clicking something off the electronic device.

IRON MAN: I WON'T BE NEEDING THIS ANY LONGER.

Panel 3:
Angle of Spidey -- the spider-sense waves fading away.

SPIDER-MAN: THANKS.

SPIDER-MAN 2: THAT SUIT DISPENSE ASPIRIN?


PAGE TWELVE

Panel 1:
Tony's got his hand out; two aspirin in his palm.

SPIDER-MAN: WHAT ABOUT A SODA TO WASH IT DOWN?

Panel 2:
Spidey's downing the aspirin...but without quite removing his mask...

IRON MAN: MAYBE IN THE NEXT MODEL, PETE.

Panel 3:
Iron Man's moved over to some equipment. We also see he's near a desk, on which there should be stacks of papers and a folder we'll get to later...Pete's making a grimace, still swallowing the aspirin.

IRON MAN 2 : YOU AND YOUR FRIENDS CAUSED QUITE A-- *SIGH*

Panel 4:
Iron Man's tossed Pete a soda from a mini-fridge.

IRON MAN 3: S.H.I.E.L.D. agents. Stand down. Enemy has been...overpowered.

FROM A WALL SPEAKER (ELECTRIC): S.H.I.E.L.D. agents. Stand down. Enemy has been...overpowered.

Panel 5:
Spidey's downing the soda.

SPIDER-MAN 2: YEAH, SORRY ABOUT THE, UM, FRIENDS. BUT, YOU KNOW, WE UNDERGROUND CRIMINAL-TYPES STICK TOGETHER.

Panel 6:
IRON MAN 4: I THOUGHT YOU WANTED TO HAVE A SERIOUS TALK, PETER.

IRON MAN 5: I DIDN'T LET YOU GET IN HERE TO SIT BACK AND HAVE A COLA.

SPIDER-MAN 3: CUTE, TONY. "LET ME GET IN HERE." I KNOW BETTER...BUT I ALSO KNOW HOW YOU'VE ALWAYS GOTTA SPIN THINGS YOUR WAY.

SPIDER-MAN 4: AND I GET IT TONY, I DO...


PAGE THIRTEEN
Peter's removed his mask completely now...

*ARTIST NOTE: lay out panels as you see fit.

SPIDER-MAN: THERE IS A SERIOUS REASON I'M HERE.

SPIDER-MAN 2: I'VE BEEN DOING A LOT OF THINKING WHILE TRYING TO PUT MY LIFE BACK TOGETHER. I'M TRYING TO FIND...A BALANCE.

SPIDER-MAN 3: I'M NOT JUST HERE TO TELL YOU THAT, WELL, IF YOU WANT ME, YOU'LL HAVE TO CATCH ME FIRST. AND, BECAUSE OF THE RESPECT I ONCE HAD FOR YOU, I WANTED TO DO THAT FACE TO FACE...

SPIDER-MAN 4: ...MATTER OF FACT, I SACRIFICED RESPECT FOR SOMEONE WHO EARNED IT TO PUT YOU IN A POSITION OF IMPORTANCE IN MY LIFE...WHERE YOU SHOULD NEVER HAVE BEEN.*

CAPTION (BOTTOM OF PAGE): *SEE MY LAST ISSUE, PETE'S CONFRONTATION WITH OL' JJJ!

IRON MAN: I'M SORRY, PETER, I'M NOT A PSYCHIATRIST. WHATEVER ISSUE YOU'RE TRYING TO WORK OUT – IT DOESN'T SEEM LIKE I'M THE ONE YOU SHOULD BE TALKING TO...

IRON MAN 2: ...BECAUSE, AT THIS POINT, I'M ABOUT TWO SECONDS FROM SUBDUING YOU AND CALLING FOR BACK-UP!

SPIDER-MAN 5: THEN LET ME GET TO THE OTHER REASON I CAME HERE. THAT BALANCE I MENTIONED. IT'S ABOUT GROWING UP AND, YOU KNOW, I THINK I NEED TO DO THAT.


PAGE FOURTEEN

SPIDER-MAN 1: WITH AUNT MAY AS SICK AS--

IRON MAN 1: HAS THE...CHECK HELPED?

SPIDER-MAN 2: YEAH...AND I'LL NEVER BE ABLE TO THANK YOU ENOUGH.

spider-man 3: BUT IT'S MORE THAN MAY...MJ'S MY WIFE, IN NEED OF SOME SERIOUS MORAL SUPPORT – I ALMOST GAVE UP EVERYTHING THANKS TO MEPHISTO...

IRON MAN 2: MEPHISTO?...

SPIDER-MAN 4: YEAH. AND, BECAUSE OF HIM, NOT ONLY HAVE I REALIZED I NEED TO GROW UP, I HAVE TO.  HE-- HE SHOWED MJ AND ME...

SPIDER-MAN 5: WELL, LET'S JUST SAY NOW I'M LOOKING OVER BOTH OUR SHOULDERS. AND I NEED TO BE THERE FOR HER. POSSIBLY MORE THAN I EVER HAVE BEEN.

SPIDER-MAN 6: SO HERE'S THE MILLION-DOLLAR QUESTION, MR. PLAYBOY BILLIONAIRE...

SPIDER-MAN 7: WHY DO YOU DO ALL OF IT? AND I DON'T MEAN "WHY DO YOU DO IT?" I MEAN WHY DO...SO MUCH? IRON MAN, HEAD OF S.H.I.E.L.D., LEAD THE AVENGERS....

IRON MAN 3: CARO-- MS. MARVEL LEADS THE AVENGERS.

SPIDER-MAN 8: THEN, AVENGERS GO-TO GUY. AND HEAD-UP THE INITIATIVE.


PAGE FIFTEEN:
*Artist note: Split up panels as needed

SPIDER-MAN: PART OF ME THINKS, WELL, KNOWS, YOU'RE A CONTROL FREAK. BUT OBVIOUSLY IT'S...BIGGER THAN A PERSONAL ISSUE. SO...WHY?

The face-mask portion of Tony's Iron Man mask lifts up, revealing his face...

IRON MAN 1: PETER, YOU DON'T SEEM LIKE THE KIND OF PERSON WHO HAS EVER ACTED SELFISHLY...

Over or around Spidey, is a faded flashback shot of the moment he let the Burglar who shot uncle Ben go – the impetus to Pete's becoming a hero.

SPIDER-MAN 2: I--

IRON MAN 2:  I WAS HOWEVER. HERE'S A STORY FOR YOU, PETER...

IRON MAN 3: YOU WERE BARELY A TEENAGER BACK WHEN DR. STRANGE WAS NOT A MASTER OF MYSTIC ARTS, BUT RATHER A BRILLIANT PHYSICIAN WITH AN ODD NAME AND EGO THE SIZE OF GRAND CENTRAL.

IRON MAN 4: AS A HIGH-PRICED SURGEON, HE HELPED HIGH-PRICED PEOPLE. AND, ONCE, THIS INCLUDED SOMEONE FROM MY COMPANY, STARK INDUSTRIES.

IRON MAN 5: THE MAN ON MY TEAM WAS HEADING-UP A NEW ROCKET SCIENCES DIVISION, SO, SHOULD IT GET OUT HE NEEDED MAJOR SURGERY, MY INVESTORS WOULD HAVE JUMPED SHIP.

IRON MAN 6: WE CHOSE TO CONTROL IT, HAVE A PRESS CONFERENCE. WE PRESSURED STRANGE TO COME AND GIVE A STATEMENT.

IRON MAN 7: HE SAID, AND I QUOTE, "IF STARK'S CHECK CLEARS I'LL LET YOU KNOW THE MAN'S STATUS." AND HE EXITED.

IRON MAN 8: HE WAS TELLING ME "DON'T PUSH ME AROUND."

SPIDER-MAN 4: WOW. THAT'S KINDA—

IRON MAN 9: DISGRACEFUL?

SPIDER-MAN 5: I WAS GOING TO SAY OBNOXIOUS.

IRON MAN 10: THAT TOO...


PAGE SIXTEEN:

Panel 1:
IRON MAN 1: BUT I COULDN'T BE ANGRY WITH THIS BRILLIANT SURGEON, WHO WAS NOTHING MORE THAN A NAME AND AN EGO TO ME. BECAUSE, TO MOST PEOPLE, THAT'S ALL THAT I WAS -- A NAME AND AN EGO.

IRON MAN 2: AND, TRUTHFULLY, I ADMIRED HIS GUTSY MOVE.

IRON MAN 3: THEN, ONE DAY, I'M IN A TIN CAN CREATED TO SURVIVE, BUT...I CAN FLY, AND I CAN SAVE PEOPLE. AND I DO. AND IT'S...AMAZING...RIGHT?...

SPIDER-MAN: YEAH.

Panel 2:
IRON MAN 4: AND SO, I MEET OTHER GUYS -- AND GALS -- WHO ALSO SAVE PEOPLE. AND SUDDENLY EVERYBODY'S SAVING PEOPLE!

Panel 3:
IRON MAN 5: ...AND IN YOUR OTHER LIFE,  FAMILY, FRIENDS, LOVED ONES -- THEY EACH HAVE THEIR OWN  DOWN-TO- EARTH PROBLEMS -- A FRIEND IS DEPRESSED, A GIRLFRIEND UPSET, SOMEONE GETS HURT IN A FENDER BENDER -- OR A LOVED ONE GETS AN INCURABLE DISEASE, A HOME IS HIT IN A ROBBERY OR DESTROYED BY A FIRE.

IRON MAN 6: SO MANY PROBLEMS WE ARE UNABLE TO FIX. AS MUCH AS YOU WANT TO HELP THEM, YOU CAN'T. AND YOU KNOW THAT--



PAGE SEVENTEEN:
Panel 1:
IRON MAN 1: --SO WHAT DO YOU DO? YOU TRY TO HELP OTHERS EVEN MORE. AND THEN YOU SEE THE NEWS AND THE THINGS YOU'VE MISSED – ROBBERIES, MURDERS, THE LYING POLITICIANS. AND YOU REALIZE YOU WANT TO HELP EVEN MORE. YOU ALMOST HAVE TO.

Panel 2:
IRON MAN 2: AND YOU DO. UNTIL YOU'RE LOST TO YOUR LOVED ONES, LOST YOURSELF...BUT YOU'RE DRIVEN TO HELP NOW, AND NOTHING CAN STOP IT. BECAUSE, INSIDE YOU, THERE'S A PART THAT KNOWS THERE'S ALWAYS MORE YOU CAN DO.

Panel 3:
Peter's pulling his mask back on.

IRON MAN 3: RIGHT?

SPIDER-MAN: ...SO WHERE DO YOU STOP, TONY?

Panel 4:
Shot of Stark, grim.

Panel 5:
Same shot of Stark.

Panel 6:
IRON MAN 4: ...

Panel 7:
IRON MAN 5: I DON'T KNOW YET, PETE.

IRON MAN 6: WHY, WHEN DO YOU STOP?

SPIDER-MAN 2: TONIGHT. I'M STOPPING TONIGHT.


PAGE EIGHTEEN:
Several panels, split-up as needed.

IRON MAN 1: YOU'RE GIVING UP BEING SPIDER-MAN?

IRON MAN 2: ...AGAIN?

SPIDER-MAN: NO. I'M MAKING AN ADULT, MATURE DECISION -- THE FIRST ONE SINCE MARRYING MJ, I THINK.

SPIDER-MAN 2: SPIDER-MAN'S WHAT I DO – I DO IT FOR A LOVED ONE I LOST, FOR THE PEOPLE WHO NEED SPIDEY, AND FOR THE CRIMINALS WHO NEEDS AN OCCASIONAL KICK IN THE GUT AND WEB IN THE EYES...

SPIDER-MAN 3: ...BUT PETER PARKER'S WHO I AM...BECAUSE OF THE LOVED ONES WHO ARE STILL WITH ME, WHO'VE GUIDED ME THROUGH EVERY STEP, AND HELPED ME MAKE DECISIONS – WRONG OR RIGHT.

SPIDER-MAN 4: YOU'RE ONE OF THOSE LOVED ONES, TONY. NOW, WHEN I SEE IRON MAN, I KNOW WHO'S REALLY BEHIND THAT MASK, AND THAT GUY WON'T STOP UNTIL HE FEELS THERE'S JUSTICE. SO I GET WHAT I'M UP AGAINST, WHO YOU REALLY ARE...


PAGE NINETEEN:
Panel 1:
Peter begins to exit.

SPIDER-MAN 1: ME? I'VE GOT A LOT MORE IMPORTANT THINGS TO DO.

Panel 2:

IRON MAN 1: PETE.

Panel 3:
He looks back.

IRON MAN 2: THERE'S SOMETHING YOU SHOULD KNOW...BUT I NEED YOU TO COME BACK OVER HERE.

Panel 4:
SPIDER-MAN 2: IS THIS SOME KIND OF TRICK?

Artist: if you can show Stark here, he's smirking, but not in an evil way...Tony's still being nice here.

IRON MAN 3: NOT THAT YOU KNOW OF.

Panel 5:
They're just a few feet from each other again, on either side of the desk (the one w/papers and the folder mentioned earlier).

SPIDER-MAN 3: FINE.

IRON MAN 4: I led you to the S.H.I.E.L.D. helicarrier, yes, knowing you could come and go as you please. You are that good. But I want to be certain you don't take anything you're not supposed to.

Panel 6:
Spidey, annoyed.

SPIDER-MAN: WHAT, YOU WANT TO FRISK ME?

IRON MAN 5: NO. . .


PAGE TWENTY:
Typical nine-panel lay-out, 3x3.

Panel 1:
Spidey still should be annoyed, fists on hips (or some other body language to illustrate this).

IRON MAN 1:  . . .I'M GOING TO TURN AROUND, AND IF THERE'S SOMETHING MISSING, I'M CERTAIN YOU'LL PUT IT BACK.

SPIDER-MAN 1: AND IF THERE'S NOTHING MISSING?

IRON MAN 2: PERHAPS YOU'LL TAKE IT.

Panel 2:
Tony's turned around. . .

Panel 3:
Spidey eyes him.

Panel 4:
Spidey looks down at the desk, folder reads FOR EYES ONLY.

Panel 5:
Spidey looks up at Tony, whose back is to Spider-Man, head looking to the side, eyes closed.

Panel 6:
Spidey takes the folder.

Panel 7:
Tony's in the same pose as described above, but Spidey's gone.

Panel 8:
Tony has turned and faces the exit.

Panel 9:
Same shot as Panel 8?

IRON MAN 3: THAT'S MY BOY.


PAGE TWENTY-ONE:
Panel 1:
Establishing shot of a large stone and glass structure by the Hudson: GGI, Inc.

CAPTION 1:  ELSEWHERE. . .

RHINO (O.P): NOW, DOC! I'M READY NOW!!

Panel 2:
Extreme close on The Rhino, who looks tense and angry, drooling and strained...

RHINO 2 (large): NOW!!

Panel 3:
We see The Rhino is hooked-up to some sort of equipment and restrained...There should be a couple of i.v. tubes connected to him, maybe even a large needle injecting something through his Rhino armor...

A SCIENTIST of some sort and a couple of lab assistants are nearby. The Scientist is standing at the console controlling whatever's going on here...

SCIENTIST: HOLD TIGHT, ALEKSEI!

Panel 4:
Rhino is biting his lower lip, a drop of blood drizzling down his chin...His eyes are shut tight, tearing.

RHINO 3: NNNGGRRRRR!

Panel 5:
Rhino screams and breaks his restraints...

RHINO 4: WHHAAARGG!

Panel 6:
Rhino's crashed through wall...The scientist is calmly looking at readings as the assistants duck for cover...

Panel 7:
Small panel...

SCIENTIST 2:  Looks like we've got the results we wanted...


PAGE TWENTY-TWO:
Panel 1:
Medium shot of Watcher, the Latino one intro'd 2 issues ago (not the character Uatu), who's looking after Aunt May in an undisclosed location.


CAPTION:  MEAHWHILE. . .

WATCHER: YES, MR. PARKER...YOU CAN COME BY ANY TIME. THE DOCTORS FEEL SHE SHOULD HEAR THE VOICES OF HER LOVED ONES AS OFTEN AS POSSIBLE...

Panel 2:
We can see Watcher looking through a glass window at May, who's in a hospital bed, a nurse taking her blood.

WATCHER 2: HER CONDITION, THEY SAY, HAS IMPROVED ONLY SLIGHTLY...THEY MAY HAVE TO GO IN AGAIN...

WATCHER 3: YES, I CAN ONLY IMAGINE WHAT YOU'RE GOING THROUGH, SIR. BUT, I ASSURE YOU, YOUR AUNT WILL BE JUST FINE. MATTER OF FACT, I GUARANTEE...

Panel 3:
LARGE panel ¾ of the page.

The Rhino, on his crazed rampage, is rushing straight towards the building Watcher and the doctors – and May -- are in...we can see the damaged GGI building in the background.

Yes, The Rhino's charging fast and wild – and he's comin' right for Aunt May and the Watcher!

WATCHER (O.P. or in a window, not seeing the onrushing Rhino: ...NO HARM WILL COME TO HER UNDER MY WATCH!


NEXT: PART 1 of a multi-part story featuring Rhinos, Vultures, Scorpions, at least one Venom, an Osborn or two and, yes, WEB SHOOTERS!

COME ON BACK!!

Hiya! If you'd like to get right to the script for My Part 4 of One More Day, just scroll down a bit -- the first few lines are in bold below!

              As a one-time comics writer (just a few stories published, including a Spider-Man piece),a script doctor for a bunch of indie films, and a writer who's got an Off-Broadway play in development -- as well as someone who's worked as an editor for more than 15 years -- I thought, Heck I could take a crack at Spider-Man!
          See, Marvel's Spider-Man has recently accepted a deal from the devil. Not terribly heroic. He did it to save his dying Aunt...who it seems may or may not have been able to be saved in other ways (more details w/in the story). This altered Spidey's world radically, b/c not only was his aunt saved, but his marriage, and lots of other stuff were -- somewhat randomly -- erased.
          I am all for up-ending the status quo, and I like Peter's life filled with friends who have troubles of their own that always become Pete's problems too. However, I am of the belief these things could've been achieved within the confines of the world of Peter Parker as it was, reflecting the intense state of the MU as it has been (and is), and keeping him with his wife, MJ, who, again, is no longer his wife in the re-vamped books.
        Peter Parker's like now exists in a vacuum and many plots were left dangling...
     I try to fill in and fix the plot-holes and character problems of the last few issues in this story (issue 545).  So, take a look, and have fun as I bring you...

MEPHISTO 1: OUR BARGAIN IS SIMPLE...  YOU GIVE UP YOUR LOVE, YOUR FAITH IN EACH OTHER, YOUR MARRIAGE.  LET A PIECE OF YOUR SOULS SCREAM FOR THE LOSS, LET THEM SCREAM IN ETERNITY...

MEPHISTO 2: AND THAT IS WHAT I GET IN TURN.  A TORMENT WHICH WILL FEED ME FOR A LONG TIME.  FEED ME GREAT SOLACE...EVEN CONTENTMENT.

CREDITS:
Keith Planit - Writer
Artist - ?
Letters - ?
Dedicated To: Stan "the Man" Lee, Daring Steve Ditko, Jovial JMS, Dandy Mike DeoDato Jr., Rockin' Ron Garney, Joshin' JRJR, J.M. "De-lovely" DeMatteis, Dandy Danny Fingeroth, Totally Todd DeZago, Mark "BooYah" Bagley, David "Meshuggeneh" Michelinie.

PAGE TWO:
Panel 1:
Close on Mephisto...he's laughing to himself.

MEPHISTO 1 (SMALL): SO MUCH GOOD TORMENT...FOR YEARS TO COME.
SFX (on edge of balloon): HRM.

Panel 2:
Mephisto is, in some regard, the panel (his outline is the shape of the panel, the smoke around him w/his face as the BG,  whatever you want) but we're looking at Peter...

MEPHISTO 2: BUT YOU WILL HAVE YOUR LIFE.  NO MORE HIDING, FEARING...STRAINING.  NO MORE LOOKING OVER YOUR SHOULDER AND WONDERING WHO'S GOING TO GET YOU...

MEPHISTO 3: ...OR YOUR WIFE.

Panel 3:
Again, Mephisto is the dominant force of this panel...or IS the panel in some manner.

We're looking at MJ now.

MEPHISTO 4: YOU WILL NOT HAVE TO PRETEND YOU'VE THE STOMACH FOR THINGS YOU HAVE NOT, YOU WILL NOT HAVE TO SHOVE DOWN THE FEAR GNAWING AT EVERY BREATH.  THERE IS NO MORE RUNNING, THERE IS NO MORE DEATH. 

Panel 4:
Mephisto has now brought in a view of the hospital room where Aunt May lay dying...

MEPHISTO 5:  AND THE DEAR LADY GETS TO KEEP THE LIFE YOUR SELFISH CHOICES HAVE TAKEN AWAY.

PAGE  THREE:
Panel 1:
Peter's pissed, wants to grab Mephisto around the neck. MJ's holding him back.

PETER: YOU DON'T NEED TO REMIND ME WHAT I'VE DONE!  I KNOW WHAT MY CHOICES HAVE-- HAVE CAUSED!  I GET IT!

Panel 2
Still angry, but calming...MJ uncertain what to do

PETER 2: I WANT TO BE UNSELFISH.  I WANT TO BE THE CAUSE FOR A GREAT LIFE, NOT AN AWFUL DEATH!  EVERY CHOICE I'VE MADE...EVERYTHING I DO...IT JUST ALL TURNS TO....

Panel 3:
Peter's turned away. MJ's tearing.

MJ 1: PETER. DOES THIS MEAN YOUR ANSWER...OUR ANSWER...

Panel 4
Another shot of Mephisto, perhaps partially hidden by his cape, looking back at them...

MJ (cont'd) 2: ...IS YES?

Panel 5:
PETER 3: MEPHISTO, YOU'RE GOING TO GET WHAT YOU WANT.  AND MJ'S GOING TO GET HER LIFE BACK, AND AUNT MAY'S GOING TO LIVE...AND EVERYTHING'S GOING TO BE AS IT SHOULD BE.

PETER 4: YOU KNEW MY ANSWER FROM THE START.  OR YOU WOULDN'T HAVE COME HERE.  THE ANSWER IS...

PAGE FOUR:
Panel 1: a sad Peter and MJ, clutching one another, looking up.

PETER 1: [BLANK]

Panel 2:
MJ's turned to Peter, Pete's got his hand at his mouth. A tiny amount of mist can be seen at the panel's edges.

Panel 3:
That mist seems to have spread and can be seen more clearly...
MJ's clearly talking to Peter, but again...

MJ 1: [BLANK]

Panel 4
A powerful CLOSE on Mephisto...fire and brimstone around him and so forth...He's looking off to one side...

MEPHISTO: AWFULLY STRANGE....

PAGE FIVE:
HALF-PAGE SPLASH 1:
And indeed it is: it's Dr. Strange.  Wielding magic, glowing, doing crazy gestures with his hands...you know, the usual.  A white mist accompanies him!  Mephisto is shielding himself.

DR. STRANGE: [magical symbols/glyphs]

Panel 2:
Strange is approaching the couple. Mephisto can be in the BG or nearby in some manner if you like (but not nec.).

STRANGE 2: Peter, this is not the choice you want to make.  A bargain with this creature is no bargain at all.

PETER 1: [BLANK]

Panel 3:
Closer on Doc, Mephisto right at his back...angry, but unable to touch him.

STRANGE 3: I've taken away your power of speech, both of you.  I will return it to you, but as you begged me to help you,* I now must beg you to only address me.

CAPTION 1 (at bottom of panel): * One More Day Part 2

Panel 4: (small inset)
Peter gives a tentative thumbs-up.

PAGE SIX:
Panel 1:
Peter, MJ, and Doc...

PETER 1: I CAN'T DO IT, DOC...I CREATED THIS, I MADE THIS MESS, AND I'VE KILLED A WOMAN WHO HAS DONE NOTHING BUT SACRIFICE FOR ME SINCE I WAS SIX YEARS OLD.

Panel 2:
PETER 2: I TOOK AWAY HER HUSBAND, I TOOK MYSELF AWAY BY SHOULDERING THIS...RESPONSIBILITY OF SPIDER-MAN...NOW I'VE TAKEN HER LIFE.

Panel 3
A beaten Peter.

PETER 3: WHAT WOULD YOU HAVE ME DO?

Panel 4:
STRANGE 1: MARYJANE, WHAT WOULD YOU HAVE HIM DO?

MJ: WHATEVER HE NEEDS TO DO.  BUT HE'S EXHAUSTED HIS OPTIONS...HASN'T HE?

Panel 5:
STRANGE 2: ...

STRANGE 3: PETER, MEPHISTO SHOWED YOU SOME OF THE MANY PERMUTATIONS OF LIFE YOUR CHOICES COULD HAVE BROUGHT YOU TO*...

CAPTION (at bottom of panel): * One More Day Part 3

PETER 4: H-HOW DO YOU KN-

Panel 6:
STRANGE 3: WHY, MR. PARKER, I TOLD YOU I COULD DETECT YOU SIX BLOCKS AWAY*,  YOU THINK I COULD NOT DETECT A PRESENCE AS POWERFUL AS MEPHISTO NEARLY UPON MY DOORSTEP?

CAPTION 1 (at bottom of panel): * AGAIN, ONE MORE DAY PART 2

STRANGE: WHAT ABOUT THE PERMUTATIONS YOU'VE YET TO EXPLORE?

PAGE SEVEN:
Panel 1:
Peter, clutching the Spider-Man mask clearly...MJ nearby.  Doc backing off...

STRANGE 1: I AM MERELY SAYING, GIVE THE WORLD A CHANCE... I DON'T BELIEVE YOU'D DISAGREE THAT MEPHISTO MOST CERTAINLY DOES NOT DESERVE ONE. 

STRANGE 2: AND I AM CERTAIN, NO MATTER HOW STRONGLY YOU FEEL HER PAIN IS YOUR FAULT, YOUR AUNT TOO WOULD NOT WANT YOU TO FIX THINGS...THIS WAY.

Panel 2:
Strange has turned his attention to Mephisto...

STRANGE: YES, CREATURE, I FEEL YOU COMING FOR ME IN MY REALM -- YOU OR YOUR MINIONS.  LET THEM COME...YOU WILL BE WEAKENED BY YOUR FAILURE HERE AND SPREAD THIN IN A REALM IN WHICH I AM MOST POWERFUL...

Panel 2:
Doc's disappeared into some other realm through some sort of hole he's created...

MEPHISTO: THINK WHAT YOU WISH, SORCERER...
MEPHISTO (small) 2: I AM NOT THROUGH WITH YOU BY FAR!

Panel 3:
Mephisto seems to have sent something into the realm to which Doc Strange has disappeared...

Panel 4
Mephisto's attention is back on Peter and MJ.

MEPHISTO: THE ANSWER, O' DESPERATE PARKERS?  THE ANSWER!

PETER: IT'S THE HARDEST DECISION I'VE EVER MADE. 

MJ: I-- I THINK WE BOTH AGREE, PETER.  WE DO WHAT HAS TO BE DONE.

PETER 2: I HEARD WHAT STRANGE HAD TO SAY....AND I MAY REGRET THIS FOR...FOR ETERNITY I GUESS...BUT MY ANSWER, MEPHISTO--

PAGE EIGHT:
SPLASH PANEL

PETER 1: --IS THIS!

Peter and MJ in the center of the room, surrounded by Mephisto's red glow, his cape, his evil mist.  The two of them hold tight to one another, smiling for the first time in quite a while. Peter's got one arm up towards Mephisto, the Spidey mask resting on his hand, which is up towards Mephisto... the eyes and mask are clearly resting on a point which is hidden beneath the cloth Spidey mask. Yes, although hidden by the draped cloth of the mask, Peter is giving Big M the bird!

(If necessary, that is, if the mask isn't enough, we can even have some of the mist disrupt the image a bit more to make this even less offensive.)

PAGE NINE:
Panel 1:
Bolts of lightning and trunks of lava shoot from the floor around Pete and MJ, who scramble.  Pete's weaving a shield of a sort with his webbing, blocking debris.

Panel 2:
Mephisto's clearly pissed (as in angry, not drunk and wetting himself).

Panel 3:
Peter's already got MJ protected with his webbing

Panel 4:
A pile of lava is pressing against Pete, who's pushing back with all his might, but it's winning and trapping him against a wall.  MJ's safe nearby.

MEPHISTO: The insolence was unnecessary, welp.  But while the small victory goes to you, the battle itself may still fall in my favor....

PETER: I'd tell to go you-know-where, but I'm almost certain you'd think I was being funny.

PAGE TEN:
Panel 1:
The lava, the destruction created on the last page, even the webbing protecting MJ is all dissipating in this panel.

MEPHISTO 1: I am not without a sense of humor, Peter Parker--

Panel 2:
Close on Mephisto.

MEPHISTO 2: I can be quite humorous.

Panel 3:
Same angle, Mephisto's face is now that of the little girl Peter saw in the last chapter (his mane of hair and the mist remain)

MEPHISTO 3: Is this little girl the daughter you will have now that you've chosen your fate, or the one you would have inevitably had in spite of the bargain we'd have struck?

Panel 4:
Close on Peter, punching wall!...very visibly upset. MJ nearby.

MJ: He's just trying to rattle you...us.  Don't let him! 

MJ 2 (smaller): Don't let him, Peter!

Panel 5:
Mephisto's face again changes, this time the adult woman-in-red from the last chapter (his mane of hair and the mist remain once again).

MEPHISTO 4: Ah, Mrs. Parker, and what of the lady in crimson?  Is she your undoing in the life you've chosen or your savior in the life you let get away.

MEPHISTO 5: You've made your choice, both of you, but I will see to it that you not make any choice again without the pain of regret, the fear of going down the wrong path...Why, even now, there is one more image that may forever haunt you...

PAGE ELEVEN:
½-page SPLASH:
Mephisto has his arm outstretched, presenting an image of May in her hospital bed -- a man holding a gun on a nurse inside the room. Just outside the open door, a guard lay on the floor.  Three others are in the room heading toward her bed – these are clearly NOT good guys.

Panel 2:
Worried Peter...

PETER: No!

PETER 2: GOD NO!!

Panel 3:
Peter lunges toward Mephisto who has already partially faded away.
MJ: Peter!

Panel 4:
Peter's crashed through the window, heading up into the city...Mephisto is gone.

PETER (calling back): Those have to be Fisk's men, MJ...I can't let it happen!!

MJ: Peter! What about—
Panel 5:
Angle on MJ, bird's eye view?

MJ 2 (small): Me?

PAGE TWELVE:
This page is three (or four if nec.) panels of Spidey swinging aggressively through the city...

 Panel 1
SPIDEY 1 (THOUGHT): Gotta move!  Gotta move!  Has to be Fisk's men.

Panel 2
SPIDEY 2 (THOUGHT): After all this, there's no way— I won't let it!...

Panel 3
SPIDEY 3 (THOUGHT): Thought Fisk understood.  Thought I made my point VERY clear*

CAPTION 1 (AT BOTTOM): * Amazing Spider-Man 542

Panel 4 (or 5 if necessary):
Peter's got a firm grip on a web behind him. Far in front of him we can see he's webbed up the window -- and the concrete around it -- of May's hospital room!  That webbing is still shooting from his wrist here.

SPIDEY 4 (THOUGHT): If anyone's going to be in charge of Aunt May's fate, it's going to be me!  It's not going to be some devil-creature, some criminal, his goons— nobody gets near my aunt! NOBODY—

PAGE THIRTEEN:
SPLASH
Spidey's pulled the window off, taking bricks and concrete with it; he's swinging through the hole in the wall headed right towards some very nervous Kingpin heavies.

SPIDER-MAN 1: --BUT ME!!

PAGE FOURTEEN:
Panel 1
Spider-Man webs the guy w/the gun near the nurse.

Panel 2:
He swings the fella w/the gun into two others.

SPIDEY 1: Oopsie-daYzee!

GOON-A 1: HEY!

GOON-B 2: WOHH!

Panel 3:
Another goon is trying to tell Spidey to hang on a second.

GOON-C 1: No, wait, WAIT!

Panel 4:
Spidey's got one hand facing one way, webbing Goon-C, he's looking over at Aunt May, while his other hand webs the other goons on the floor.

SPIDEY 2: Fellas, you just made the biggest mistake of your lives!

MAN (O.P.): Actually, Mr. Parker, I believe—

PAGE FIFTEEN:
Panel 1:
MAN 1: --YOU HAVE.

The man standing there is another big tough-guy, bigger than any of the Goons. He's in a dark 3-piece suit on, wears bi-focals (Ben Franklin style).  He's Latino, very dapper. Who is he? I'll let him tell you...

Panel 2:
Shot of a Spidey not about to take any crap from anyone.  The towering Man is calm.

SPIDEY 3: Listen, junior, it's been a rough couple of weeks!  And the Kingpin's already been warned—

MAN 2: Yes.  And now he would like--

Panel 3:
Larger shot now.  Several doctors are walking in.

MAN 3: --to help.

MAN 4: These doctors have come from the world over at Mr. Fisk's request.

Panel 4:
SPIDEY 4: Wha--?!

Panel 5:
Spidey 5: Who are you?  Why would Fisk do this?

MAN 5: Mr. Fisk said you would know why.

MAN 6: As to who I am, I'm the man who will ensure that no one gets to your aunt or to you, I will be guarding her, your wife if necessary, and I will be on call to you any time.  You may call me...

Panel 6:
Close on Man...

MAN 7 (SFX): ...The Watcher!

Panel 7:
The Watcher has tossed Spidey a pager.

SPIDEY 6: ...

SPIDEY 7: Uh...I hate to break it to you...but that name's been taken...and he's a lot bigger than you.

(MAN) WATCHER 8: Really?  I've never heard of—

PAGE SIXTEEN:
Panel 1:
Angle on the Doctors around May, examining her chart, checking her eyes, etc.  Watcher and Spidey in foreground.

WATCHER 1: Nevertheless, the fact is we're here to help.  HIT A BUTTON ON THAT PAGER, I'LL FIND YOU.

Panel 2:
Spider-Man gets up in his face...

SPIDEY 1: FISK'S BEEN DEMEANED, BEATEN, AND EMBARRASSED – HURT TO HIS CORE.  BY ME.  and I just turned down a deal WITH a devil...WHY WOULD I GO ALONG WITH THIS?

WATCHER 2: I've no idea what devil you mean, AND, YES, WE'VE ALL HEARD WHAT HAPPENED.  WORD ON THE STREET, FISK'S GOT NO CHOICE BUT TO SHOW YOU SOME RESPECT.  I assure you, Mr. Fisk was very clear about thAT...THAT, AND THE FACT YOUR AUNT HAD BETTER LIVE. 

Panel 3:
Eerie shot of The Watcher.

WATCHER 3: ...But he promises HE WILL NOT FORGET WHAT BROUGHT HIM TO THIS. 

WATCHER 4: Apparently you've..."earned it"

Panel 4:
Spidey looking over Aunt May, mulling this over...

SPIDEY 2 (THOUGHT): I GUESS IT'S POSSIBLE... I'VE BEEN TAKING WHAT I WANT WHEN I WANT IT...EVEN IF IT MEANS THREATENING LIVES.  I'VE BECOME LITTLE MORE THAN A DESPERATE THIEF...AND I GUESS KINGPIN WOULD HONOR SOMEONE LIKE THAT...

SPIDEY 3 (THOUGHT): ...SOMEONE LIKE HIM!

Panel 5:
Spidey and The Watcher...

SPIDEY 5: I DON'T WANT FISK'S MONEY...OR HIS POWER ON MY SIDE!

WATCHER: POWER? ALL HE DID WAS MAKE CALLS.  AS FOR THE money, YOU'VE RECENTLY COME INTO SOME EXCESS FUNDS*?  THESE MEN ARE ON YOUR PAYROLL.

caption 1 (at bottom of panel): *asm 544

PAGE SEVENTEEN:
Panel 1:
Spidey approaches Aunt May. 

Panel 2:
Spidey sits on the edge of the bed.  The Docs have backed-off a bit.

Panel 3:
Close on Spidey, we can see Peter's eyes through the white "mirrored lenses."

SPIDER-MAN: Aunt May?  Things are really desperate now...doctors here said you can't be saved...

Panel 4:
spider-man 2: every one from reed richards to otto octavius said to trust thOSE DOCTORS...wouldn't even come look at you, see if they were wrong by some miniscule chance. 

spider-man 3: they all just assumed the worst.

panel 5:
SPIDER-MAN 4: MAYBE THEY KNOW BETTER.  I NEARLY SOLD MY SOUL TO SAVE YOU....HEH.  YOU WOULD HAVE BEEN SO ANGRY.  I'M NOT CERTAIN IF THIS IS BETTER.  DO THESE MEN SOMEHOW OWE KINGPIN A FAVOR?  DID HE THREATEN THEM? 

WATCHER (IN BG): I PROMISE YOU, MR. PARKER. THIS IS ALL ABOVE BOARD.  KINGPIN ORDERED US TO KEEP IT HONEST.

Panel 6:
Spidey's pulled his mask up to look her for a moment.

Panel 7:
Looking at May...

SPIDER-MAN/PETE 5: OKAY.  OKAY, WATCHER...

PAGE EIGHTEEN:
Panel 1:
Focusing on Spider-Man, his mask pulled back down. He's standing, pointing toward The Watcher.

Spidey 1: I'm going to trust you...you and the Kingpin...with my aunt's life!

Panel 2:
Spider-Man's in The Watcher's face.

spidey 2: But I'm telling you right now, one false move, one guy gets rough with another nurse, one person does anything that puts my aunt or any innocent in harm's way, you'll be the first person to pay--

Panel 3:
Large panel.  May is being wheeled out.  The Watcher has his eye on an exiting Spider-Man. The goons are trying to untangle themselves from the webbing.

SPIDEY 3: -- AND FISK WILL BE THE LAST!

Panel 4 (possible inset to panel 3):
Closer on The Watcher...

WATCHER 1 (THOUGHT): YES, MR. PARKER, I'M CERTAIN HE WILL.  AND YOU'LL BE MY COMRADE-IN-ARMS WHEN IT HAPPENS!

PAGE NINETEEN:
Panel 1:
Watcher has turned to the others and is walking out, following the doctors.

WATCHER 1: WHEN YOU GENTLEMAN HAVE FREED YOURSELVES, GET WORD BACK TO MR. FISK.  I WILL BE ENSURING OUR PATIENT AND HER PHYSICIANS GET TO OUR FACILITY SAFELY.

GOONS A, B, & C: Y-YESSIR!

Panel 2:
Hallway of hospital. Physicians and May with Watcher following...

WATCHER 2: OUT OF OUR WAY, PLEASE.  WE MUST SAVE THIS WOMAN'S LIFE...

Panel 3:
The Dr. from issue 544 gets in front of the Watcher.

DOCTOR 1: Sir, you can't just take a patient out of this hospital.

WATCHER 3: Yes, you're correct, I believe you've been put on some kind of retainer?  We'll need to get that money back.  That way we can be certain she gets better.  Fast.

DOCTOR 2: That's out of—

Panel 4:
The Goons exit the room, still with webbing on them. The Dr. has seen them however.
DOCTOR 3: Uh...yes...i'll make certain THEY get back every remaining penny.

panel 5:
Watcher is walking off, the Goons following.  The Doc stands nervously.  A patient who should've been in the background somewhere PREVIOUSLY on this page is saying to someone nearby...

PATIENT: I wonder who her provider is.

PAGE TWenTY and TWENTY-ONE:
Spidey's swinging through the city on these two pages...we can have a collage of images around him in any way you like...he's summing-up what's happened and giving clues to what's coming...
NOTE TO LETTERER: split the word balloons from one page to the next as needed.

SPIDER-MAN (THOUGHT): GOTTA GET BACK TO MJ AT THE MOTEL.  I RUSHED OUT OF THERE, LEAVING HER BEHIND WHEN, THROUGH ALL OF THIS, SHE STAYED BY MY – AND MAY'S – SIDE.

SPIDER-MAN (THOUGHT) 2: I'M NOT SURE HOW GOOD OF A HUSBAND I'VE BEEN.  I LET BEING SPIDER-MAN CONTROL NOT JUST MY LIFE, BUT OUR MARRIAGE. 

SPIDER-MAN (THOUGHT) 3: OF COURSE, BETWEEN fighting WITH THE AVENGERS, RUNNING FROM IRON MAN AND SHIELD, SKRULLS, MEPHISTO, AND NOW TRUSTING DOCTORS HIRED BY WILSON FISK TO SAVE AUNT MAY...

SPIDER-MAN (THOUGHT) 4: ...IT'S NO WONDER I'M A LITTLE DISTRACTED FROM FRIENDS AND FAMILY.  AND SPEAKING OF...I HAVE A LOT OF PEOPLE WHO'RE GOING TO WANT WORDS WITH ME.

SPIDER-MAN (THOUGHT) 5: FLASH THOMPSON PROBABLY BURST A VEIN, OLD FRIENDS LIKE DEB WHITMAN AND HOBIE BROWN MUST BE FREAKING!  MJ'S AUNT ANNA IS DUE A PHONE CALL...NOT TO MENTION ROBBIE, BETTY BRANT, AND—

SPIDER-MAN (THOUGHT) 6: THE POLICE.  I NEARLY FORGOT...HOW MANY CRIMES DID I COMMIT TO SAVE MAY?  TOO MANY.  IS THERE ANY DELIVERANCE FROM SUCH bad CHOICES?...WHO CAN I GO TO NOW?

PAGE TWENTY-TWO:
SPLASH PAGE
It's dawn.  Spidey's swinging towards the window of the hotel room; MJ curled up on the bed (curled-up or watchign TV, she should look sad); a large portion of the page should be a ghostly image of Aunt May in her hospital bed, physicians from earlier looking over her or even operating...

SPIDER-MAN (THOUGHT) 1: IT'S JUST ONE MORE DAY...AND THINGS ARE EXACTLY THE SAME, PETER OL' BUDDY.  THE SAME...YET DIFFERENT...

SPIDER-MAN 2: !

SPIDER-MAN (THOUGHT) 3: ...BUT I KNOW EXACTLY WHO TO GO TO!

That last thought balloon should be toward the bottom of the page and near a Daily Bugle Page 1 that's floating in the breeze.  JJJ's face is on the front, he's looking like Uncle Sam, finger pointed at the reader.

An image of Spider-Man is behind him (it's w/in a red circle w/a crossbar).  The headline reads: "WE WON'T BE FOOLED AGAIN!"

CAPTION: STAY TUNED, TRUE BELIEVERS!

PAGE ELEVEN
SPLASH (with insets) or 2/3 SPLASH w/smaller panels:
Peter has sling-shot himself out of the tower and nearly across half the city.

MJ CAPTION 1: HE DOES IT FOR THE RELEASE...

INSETS 1-3: Peter's swinging into condemned buildings, under bridges within the city (such as those by Grand Central or the one on 5th ave in midtown), and basically disappearing. (Should he be ditching the SHIELD clothing in the first inset?)

INSET 4: Either under the above or with a call-out pointing at the entrance of Avengers Tower:
Ms. Marvel, Wonder-Man, and Ares looking out of the lobby with anger...he's gone.

INSET 5:
Wolverine and Clint still on that rooftop...

WOLVERINE: WELL THAT WAS PRETTY MUCH AS EXPECTED.

CLINT: NOT TRUE.

CLINT 2: HE GOT AWAY.

PAGE TWELVE
This page: shots of Jonah and MJ talking – as dynamic as you want to make it.

Panel 1:
MJ in JJJ's office, Jonah, annoyed/bored.

MJ 1: AND HE DOES IT FOR HIS FRIENDS AND LOVED ONES. AND YOU KNOW FOR A FACT, IN SPITE OF WHAT YOUV'E SAID, AND WHAT HE'S DONE--

Panel 2:

MJ 2: --THAT INCLUDES YOU, JONAH.

Panel 3:

JJJ 1: ...

Panel 4:

JJJ 2: LOGICALLY, I KNOW WHAT YOU'RE SAYING IS TRUE, MJ...I REALLY DO...

Panel 5:

JJJ 3: BUT THE BETRAYAL DOESN'T JUST GO TO THE HEART OF MY RELATIONSHIP WITH PETER...

Panel 6:

JJJ 4: OR MY HATRED OF SPIDER-MAN...

JJJ 5: WHO, TRUTH BE TOLD, I NEVER REALLY HATED ALL THAT MUCH...

Panel 7:

JJJ 6: THE PROBLEM IS HE DESTROYED THIS PAPER, MJ...

JJJ 7: HE TOOK THE LAST HOWEVER MANY YEARS AND, IN ONE FELL SWOOP, MADE EVERYTHING I'VE DONE, EVERYTHING SO MANY PEOPLE WORKED SO HARD AT, AND – LIKE THAT—

PAGE THIRTEEN
Panel 1:

JJJ 1: --MADE IT DISAPPEAR! WHAT KIND OF PERSON DOES THAT*?

MJ 1: BUT PETER AND I ARE STILL HERE. WE'RE STILL YOUR FRIENDS, WE'LL STILL MAKE PLANS WITH YOU AND MARLA AND TURN A BLIND EYE WHEN YOU CHEAT AT BRIDGE...

* Gee, Spidey fans, what kind of person WOULD do that?!?! *

Panel 2:

MJ 2: ...AND WE'RE STILL PEOPLE WHO NEED YOUR HELP. AND EVERYTHING THAT HAPPENS TO US, TO SPIDER-MAN, FROM HERE ON -- THE BUGLE GETS THE EXCLUSIVE. WE'RE INCLUDING PUBLISHING RIGHTS, SHARED MOVIE RIGHTS, AND A CHANCE TO STICK IT TO IRON MAN...

Panel 3:
Angle on JJJ, mulling.

MJ CAPTION 1: OKAY...LET HIM SEE IT...HE KNOWS THERE'S A STORY – AND MONEY – HERE...

Panel 4:

JJJ 2: I AM MOST DEFINITELY NOT A FAN OF IRON MAN'S AFTER THAT "CIVIL WAR"...AND WHAT HAPPENED TO CAPTAIN AMERICA* BECAUSE OF HIM...AND I'M NOT THRILLED WITH HOW HE AND SHIELD HANDLED THAT WORLD WAR HULK DEBACLE.

JJJ 3: ...BUT THAT DOESN'T CHANGE THE FACT THAT I CAN'T HARBOR AND ABET FUGITIVES....

CAPTION (bottom of panel): *The Civil War was a big, all-out fight between heroes in the Marvel Universe seen in recent books...which resulted in the death of Captain America.

Panel 5:
Talking to himself now...he should be walking around/pacing his office from here on....

MJ CAPTION 2: ...BUT HE ALSO LOVES US.

JJJ 4: ALTHOUGH, IF YOU'RE BOTH SUPPLYING INFORMATION TO THE PAPER, YOU'RE NOT FUGITIVES, NOT TO THE BUGLE AT LEAST -- YOU'RE "PROTECTED SOURCES."

Panel 6:

MJ CAPTION 3: C'MON, JONAH, DON'T LET ME DOWN...

JJJ 5: BAH! WHO'M I KIDDING? EVERYONE FROM THE NEW AVENGERS TO WHATEVER CREEP BECOMES GREEN GOBLIN THIS WEEK WILL BE KNOCKING DOWN THESE DOORS TO GET TO YOU TWO!

PAGE FOURTEEN

Panel 1:
JJJ's behind his desk by now, behind the large window.

JJJ 1: BUT, HECK, THAT'S NOT MUCH OF A CHANGE...I CAN'T COUNT HOW MANY TIMES I'VE HAD THIS @%!@! WINDOW REPLACED.

Panel 2:
JJJ's moved past the desk now...but should wind his way back by panel 5...

JJJ 2: AND THE HUGE BOOST IN SALES SHOULD COVER THE LEGAL FEES, BECAUSE -- OOOH BOY! – WE'RE DEFINITELY GOING TO BE INVITING TROUBLE...AND STRAIN THE SYSTEM, SEEING HOW MUCH WEIGHT IT CAN HOLD...

MJ CAPTION 1: THAT'S WHAT I WAS WAITING TO HEAR!

Panel 3:

JJJ 3: OK, MJ...HERE'S THE DEAL I'M PREPARED TO OFFER...

JJJ 4: I DON'T JUST WANT YOUR STORY ABOUT MAY, SPIDER-MAN, ABOUT THE TWO OF YOU AS A COUPLE...

JJJ 5: I DON'T JUST WANT PETE'S PICTURES, HIS "SUPER-HERO" CONNECTIONS...

Panel 4:

JJJ 6: I WANT TO KNOW EVERY MOVE BY HIS LITTLE UNDERGROUND AVENGERS. I WANT TO KNOW EVERYTHING ABOUT THAT TEAM, EVERY VILLAIN, ALIEN INVASION, AND RUNAWAY TRAIN THEY STOP!

JJJ 7: I WANT TO KNOW WHEN SPIDER-MAN THINKS HE'S HAD A GOOD DAY OR A BAD DAY...I WANT NOT JUST THE EXLUSIVES YOU'RE OFFERING BUT AN EXCLUSIVE ON EVERY PART OF SPIDER-MAN'S LIFE!

JJJ 8: BUT MOST IMPORTANTLY...YOU KNOW WHAT I WANT FIRST?

Panel 5:
JJ's standing at his window again...

JJJ 9: ...AN APOLOGY!

Panel 6:
Spidey's dropped in front of the window.

SPIDER-MAN 1: NO PROBLEM, TRIPLE J!



PAGE FIFTEEN:
Panel 1:

JJJ 1: PARKER! GET IN HERE!!


Panel 2:
Spidey's come through the window...MJ's come over and is kissing him on his cheek (either on the mask or she's lifted the mask – either way)

MJ 1: MADE IT BACK IN ONE PIECE, TIGER.

SPIDEY 1: I DO MY BEST.

Panel 3:
JJJ 1: OKAY, BREAK IT UP. THAT'S ENOUGH.

JJJ 2:  PARKER...PETER, TAKE THE MASK OFF!

Panel 4:
All 3 of them. Spidey pulling off his mask.

JJJ 3: MARYJANE, WHY DON'T YOU GO SEE WHAT ROBBIE'S FOUND OUT.

Panel 5:
MJ and Pete...

MJ 1: I SOFTENED HIM UP FOR YOU.

PETER 1: CLEARLY.

Panel 6:

MJ exiting.

MJ 2: KEEP IT CIVIL, GENTLEMAN...

MJ CAPTION 1: PLEASE, PETER, DON'T WEB HIM TO THE CEILING...


PAGE SIXTEEN:
Panel 1:
MJ's exited the office...

MJ CAPTION 1: NOW I JUST HAVE TO HOPE ROBBIE'S GOT SOME GOOD NEWS...

Panel 2:
Larger panel.

MJ's at Robbie's office...he's on the phone...

ROBBIE 1: OKAY, TOM. YES...I BELIEVE I CAN RELAY THE MESSAGE...THANKS. YOU TOO.

Panel 3:
Robbie's hung up the phone...he's looking at MJ.

ROBBIE 2: GOOD NEWS AND BAD NEWS. WHERE SHOULD I START?

MJ 2: WHICHEVER WON'T MAKE ME CRY.

ROBBIE 3: OKAY...

Panel 4:
ROBBIE 4: HERE'S THE GOOD NEWS. MOST OF THE CRIMES YOU'VE COMMITTED, INCLUDING GRAND THEFT, NOBODY SEEMS TO CARE ABOUT. THAT IS, THE HOSPITALS INVOLVED TURNED A BLIND EYE ONCE THE POLICE REPORT CAME BACK WITH THE FINGERPRINTS...

Panel 5:
ROBBIE 5: SPIDER-MAN'S GOOD WILL OF THE PAST GOES A LONG WAY WITH PEOPLE WHO WORK IN HOSPITALS.

ROBBIE 6: NOW THE BAD NEWS...

Panel 6:

ROBBIE 7: THE POLICE DETECTIVE, AND THE DEPARTMENT IN GENERAL, ISN'T TOO HAPPY WITH A REGISTERED HERO ASSAULTING AN OFFICER, TYING HIM UP, AND FLEEING THE SCENE OF A CRIME...

Panel 7:

MJ 3: THIS...SOUNDS LIKE THE PART WHERE YOUR BAD NEWS GETS WORSE.

ROBBIE 8: THEY WANT THERE TO BE A RECKONING...

ROBBIE 9: AND IT'S GOING TO COME ONE WAY OR THE OTHER. NOT ONLY IS THE NYPD GOING TO COME LOOKING FOR BOTH OF YOU, AND BRING YOU BOTH – SEPARATELY – TO TRIAL FOR YOUR CRIMES, BUT THEY'RE GOING AFTER STARK AND THE SENATE...

Panel 8:

MJ 4: I'M NOT SURE I SEE—
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ROBBIE 10: THEY'RE PLANNING ON HOLDING THOSE WHO PASSED THE SUPER-HERO REGISTRATION ACT ACCOUNTABLE FOR WHAT PETER DID...AS, AFTER ALL, HE WAS INITIALLY UNDER THEIR CHARGE.

ROBBIE 11: BY APPLYING PRESSURE TO THEM AND STARK, THEN STARK, THE AVENGERS, AND THE INITIATIVE WILL ALL WORK HARDER TO MAKE CERTAIN PETER PARKER IS BROUGHT TO JUSTICE AND HELD ACCOUNTABLE.

Panel 9:
Angle on a worried MJ.

MJ CAPTION 2: MEPHISTO ARE YOU THERE? I THINK I'M READY TO MAKE A DEAL?...HELLO?....!@$!


PAGE SEVENTEEN
Panel 1:
Peter's getting his city clothes back on over his Spider-Man outfit. JJ is leaning on his hands on his desk, head down, frustrated...

JJJ 1: I DON'T EVEN KNOW WHERE TO BEGIN.

PETER 1:  I DO.  YOU WANT TO KNOW WHY.

Panel 2:

PETER 2: OR, MORE PRECISELY, YOU WANT TO KNOW IF I KEPT IT FROM YOU BECAUSE I DIDN'T LIKE YOU, DIDN'T TRUST YOU, OR BECAUSE I WAS PROTECTING YOU.


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Panel 3:
Close on JJ. An eyebrow raised.

JJJ 2: SEEMS AS GOOD A PLACE AS ANY TO START.

Panel 4:
Peter explaining to JJ...JJ concerned, honest...

PETER 3: YOU GOTTA REMEMBER, JJ, I WAS A KID WHEN I FIRST WALKED IN HERE...I LOST MY UNCLE, I HAD TO TAKE CARE OF AUNT MAY—

JJJ 3: HOW IS MAY NOW? MARYJANE SAID THINGS ARE LOOKING...UP?

Panel 5:
On Pete...

PETER 4: WHAT? OH. YEAH...I MEAN, I GUESS. NEW DOCTORS. I STOPPED BY ON THE WAY HERE... THEY SAID THEY'RE "SOMEWHAT HOPEFUL" – WHICH IS, UH, ACTUALLY A BIG IMPROVEMENT.

PETER 5: ...THANKS FOR, UM, ASKING.

Panel 6:
JJJ in disbelief...

JJJ 4: YOU REALLY DON'T GET IT DO YOU, PARKER?

PETER 6: WHAT?

JJJ 5: YOU HAVE NO IDEA WHAT I'M ABOUT, DO YOU? NO UNDERSTANDING OF WHO I AM OR WHY I MAKE THE CHOICES I MAKE AND DO THE THINGS I DO. YOU'RE SO BUSY....

PAGE EIGHTEEN
Panel 1:
JJ gesticulating wildly, Peter looking away.

JJJ 1: ....BUSY WITH YOUR "WOE IS ME," AND YOUR "OH, HOW I MUST CARRY THE WORLD ON MY SHOULDERS...SOMEONE HAS TO, MIGHT AS WELL BE SPIDER-MAN!"

PETER 1 (small): YOU DON'T KNOW ME.

Panel 2:
JJJ all high and mighty...

JJJ 2: I'M NOT STUPID, PARKER. I'VE SEEN YOU WITH YOUR HANGDOG LOOK, AND THE WORRY ON YOUR FACE WHEN I DIDN'T GIVE YOU THE AMOUNT YOU EXPECTED FOR YOUR PICTURES.

JJJ 3: NO, I DIDN'T KNOW WHAT YOU WERE UP TO BACK THEN...BUT I'VE HAD A FEW WEEKS TO SIT BACK AND THINK ABOUT IT.

Panel 3:
JJJ walking around Peter, looking like a know-it-all...

JJJ 4: I KNOW HOW IT STARTED. I KNOW YOU JUST CAME IN HERE TO MAKE SOME MONEY. AND, LET'S NOT KID AROUND HERE, I EXPLOITED YOU –

Panel 4:
Close on JJJ, smiling,

JJJ 5: -- BEAUTIFULLY I MIGHT ADD.

Panel 5:
JJ's serious now.

JJJ 6: BUT AFTER THE TIMES YOU CAME TO ME FOR SOME EXTRA CASH, AFTER THE WEDDING AND HOW THE BUGLE SUPPORTED YOUR BOOK TOUR...AFTER I EVEN GAVE YOU THE OCCASIONAL BIG STORY OVERSEAS OR IN METROPOLIS*...

*CAPTION 1: IF I'VE GOT MY FACTS STRAIGHT, THOSE LAST TWO REFERENCES WOULD BE SPIDER-MAN VS. WOLVERINE AND SUPERMAN VS. SPIDER-MAN – BOTH FROM MANY YEARS BACK!

Panel 6:
JJ's interrupted by Pete here – and Peter's pissed-off...

JJJ: AFTER ALL OF THAT—

PETER 2: YEAH, JJ-- AFTER I CONSIDERED YOU THE STEP-FATHER I NEVER WANTED, SAVED YOU FROM MONSTERS, SAVED YOUR SON...YOUR WIFE...AFTER ALL THE THINGS SPIDER-MAN DID FOR YOU AND PETER PARKER WOULD DO FOR YOU...

Panel 7:
Peter's getting in Jonah's face now...

PETER 3: ...YOU CONTINUED TO USE THE BUGLE AS YOUR SOAPBOX FOR ALL THINGS ANTI-SPIDER-MAN!...KNOWING, AT THE LEAST, THAT PETE AND SPIDEY WERE FRIENDS.

PETER 4: IS THAT WHAT FRIENDS DO? EVEN FRIENDS OF FRIENDS?


PAGE NINETEEN:

Panel 1:
Jonah honest. Peter confused.

PETER 1: AND WHAT WAS IT ALL FOR?  YOUR JEALOUSY?  A DEEP-SEATED HATRED FOR THOSE WHO STAND-UP FOR THEMSELVES?  SOME KIND OF LOSS?  SOME INCIDENT FROM YOUR PAS—

JJJ 1: WHAT IF IT IS ONE OF THOSE?

PETER 2: --WHAT?

Panel 2:

Jonah, still honest...Peter a little embarrassed.

JJJ 2: WHAT I MEAN IS...PETER...YOU'RE A YOUNG GUY. YOU DON'T HAVE THE WORLDLY EXPERIENCE I HAVE. BUT, DID YOU HEAR WHAT YOU JUST SAID?

PETER 3: I—

Panel 3:
JJ's sitting either on the desk by Peter, or in another nearby chair...

JJJ 3: YOU'VE ENOUGH SENSE TO KNOW...TO KNOW THAT WHATEVER MAKES ME RANT AND RAVE IS NOT ABOUT YOU – OR SPIDER-MAN.

JJJ 4: SO IF YOU'VE ENOUGH SENSE TO KNOW THAT—

Panel 4:
JJ looking at Peter, looking into Peter...he's finally come to an understanding with himself AND Pete.

JJJ 5: -- SHOULDN'T YOU HAVE ENOUGH SENSE NOT TO ASK?

JJJ 6: AND, IT OCCURS TO ME NOW, I GUESS WE ALL NEED TO HAVE OUR SECRETS.

Panel 5:
Peter's taking that in.

Panel 6:
Peter growing softer again here, looking to JJJ.

PETER 4: ARE YOU SUGGESTING...WE HAVE A MUTUAL UNDERSTANDING?

PETER 5: I MEAN, I WON'T PRESS YOU ON YOUR "WHY" AND YOU DON'T PRESS ME ON MINE?

Panel 7:
JJ leans in towards him, almost smiling...

JJJ 7: AND WE JUST MOVE ON FROM HERE. WE LOOK FORWARD!

PETER 6: O-OKAY.

Panel 8:
They hug – manly hug.

JJJ 8: AND WE'LL SEE WHAT THE BUGLE CAN DO FOR YOU, MJ – AND SPIDER-MAN!


PAGE TWENTY
Panel 1:
Establishing of Avengers tower...it's DUSK now.

MS. MARVEL 1 (O.P.): ACCORDING TO THE CAMERAS, THE ALERT SIGNALS...EVERYTHING – HE WAS IN HERE.

Panel 2:
We see Ms. Marvel is talking to Iron Man in Iron Man/Tony's quarters.

IRON MAN 1: AND YOU SAID HE HAD NOTHING IN HIS ARMS...IT DOESN'T LOOK LIKE HE'S DISTURBED ANYTHING...

MS. MARVEL 2: MAYBE HE WAS JUST LOOKING FOR YOU--

Panel 3:

MS. MARVEL 3: -- OR FOR SOME ATTENTION.

IRON MAN 2: HE'S ON THE RUN, HE'S GOT TEAMMATES, A WIFE AND A DYING AUNT TO CONSIDER. THE LAST THING HE WANTS IS ATTENTION. BUT I WONDER....

Panel 4:
From inside Iron Man's mask (that is, Iron Man's POV), we can tell he's scanning the room. In the mask it might read "INFRARED" and other notes on-screen...

IRON MAN 3: SCANNING NOW...

Panel 5:
Still Iron Man's POV...he's turned his head a bit...

MS. MARVEL 4 (O.P.): ANYTHING YET?

Panel 6:
IM's POV again. He's almost looking at the area over his bed where it seemed that Spidey was shooting his webbing....We can see just the edge of something on the wall – it should be COLORED in a FLUORESCENT or something to stand out in the scan...

IRON MAN: I DO BELIEVE....


PAGE TWENTY-ONE:
1/2-Page Splash:

We see clearly what Iron Man found on the wall (this does NOT have to be from his POV, just keep the same coloring scheme on the wall)...

SFX (in webbed writing on Stark's wall): WE NEED TO TALK – FATHER FIGURE TO SON-YOU-NEVER-WANTED.

IRON MAN: --I'VE FOUND SOMETHING!

Panel 2:
Angle on Ms. Marvel and Iron Man, she's looking at him...he's looking at the wall still.

MS. MARVEL 1: WHAT IS IT?

IRON MAN 2: JUST A MESSAGE FOR ME...LETTING ME KNOW HOW GOOD HE IS, AND WHAT HE CAN DO...

Panel 3:
Ms. Marvel's looking at IM now, his arm is raised toward the wall...

MS. MARVEL 2: HE LEFT YOU AN INVISIBLE MESSAGE?

IRON MAN 3: YES. THE MAN IS A SCIENTIFIC GENIUS.

MS. MARVEL 3: HE'S A BOY. AND ALL OF THAT JUST TO...SHOW-BOAT?

Panel 4:
IM's now looking at Ms. Marvel, he's shooting some gas at the wall – obviously erasing the message.

IRON MAN 4: SEEMS THAT WAY...

MS. MARVEL 4: I GUESS THIS MEANS YOU DON'T WANT FORENSICS IN HERE...

IRON MAN 5: COMPLETELY UNNECESSARY. I'M GOING BACK TO THE SHIELD HELICARRIER. PARKER HAS HIS WAY OF CONTACTING PEOPLE...



PAGE TWENTY-TWO
Panel 1:
Peter, MJ, Jonah, Robbie...in JJ's office...Again, note: outside, it's dusk/early evening.

IRON MAN CAPTION 1: ...I'VE GOT MINE!

ROBBIE 1: THE WAY I SEE IT, THE BUGLE CANNOT FAVOR YOU TWO. WE COVER YOUR STORIES – WHETHER THEY BE TALES OF DERRING-DO OR THOSE OF YOUR VERY SURVIVAL – LIKE WE WOULD ANYTHING ELSE--

JJJ 1: ONE-HUNDRED PERCENT IMPARTIAL!

MJ CAPTION 1: I HOPE WE CAN SURVIVE THIS...

Panel 2:
Everyone's look at JJ, not believe what they just heard him say...

JJJ 2: WHAT? I'M TURNING OVER A NEW LEAF!

MJ: AND HOW DO WE STAY IN TOUCH WITH YOU WHILE IN HIDING?

MJ CAPTION 2: ...BECAUSE, WHAT LIES AHEAD ASIDE...I ALWAYS WORRY WHEN THINGS SEEM TO BE...

Panel 3:
Peter grabbing head in pain. HUGE spider-sense waves coming from his head...

MJ CAPTION 3: ...GETTING BACK TO NORM—

PETER 1: AGGHGH!

MJ: PETER! WHAT—WHAT IS IT?

PETER 2: MY SPIDER-SENSE...LIKE SOMEONE'S FOUND ONE OF MY TRACERS AND TURNED IT UP!!

Panel 4:
Peter's approached the window, is pulling off his civvies to become Spider-Man...

*Artist Note: Big Spider-Sense waves should still be shooting from around his head.

ROBBIE 2: ANYTHING WE SHOULD DO?

PETER 3: J-JUST WAIT HERE...I'VE GOT TO FOLLOW IT...STOP WHOEVER'S FIGURED OUT HOW TO C-CONTACT ME THIS WAY!!

IRON MAN CAPTION 2: I'M CERTAIN....

MJ CAPTION 4: I'M CERTAIN...

Panel 5:
Larger panel here...half-page?

Iron Man, with the face mask up, is sitting at a console, feet up. He's holding some device in his hand which is clearly emitting a powerful (Spidey) signal. Behind him we see the SHIELD army in action, readying weaponry and the like...

IRON MAN: ...SPIDER-MAN AND I WILL GET A CHANCE TO TALK VERY SOON.

MJ CAPTION 5: ...EVERYTHING'LL WORK ITSELF OUT.

CAPTION:  NEXT: SPIDER-MAN VS. S.H.I.E.L.D. – OR "HOW I LEARNED TO STOP WORRYING AND LOVE OL' SHELLHEAD."

PAGE THREE
Spider-Man's approaching the scene... The building May is in has been badly damaged. A TV News Copter flies overhead.

NOTE: Remember, GGI industries, from where Rhino came (last ish) is on the Hudson. This not-quite-abandoned building Rhino's destroying should be somewhere nearby.

Spider-man (THOUGHT): YEAH...MAYBE MY EYE!

SPIDER-MAN (THOUGHT): RHINO! HE MUST KNOW PETER PARKER'S AUNT MAY IS IN THERE!! BUT HOW?!

SPIDER-MAN: NOT TWO MINUTES AGO I'M ESCAPING S.H.I.E.L.D. AGENTS, AND NOW I'VE GOTTA FACE THE RHINO – I HAVEN'T EVEN HAD A CHANCE TO SEE WHAT'S IN THIS MYSTERIOUS FOLDER STARK SLIPPED ME.*

CAPTION (BOTTOM OF PANEL): *LAST ISH! –Kp

Panel 3:
Spidey lands on the Rhino's back. Rhino's crazed. Truly crazed!

SPIDER-MAN: DIDN'T I JUST SAVE YOUR LIFE, WHAT, LIKE TWO DAYS AGO?**

RHINO: WHARRGHH!

CAPTION 2 (BOTTOM OF PANEL) **SEE RECENT PUNISHER COMICS –Kp

Panel 4:
Rhino throws Spidey – hard and far!

Panel 5:
Through the lens of the TV news copter's camera.

REPORTER: WOHHH! JOAN, STAN, DID YOU BOTH SEE THAT IN THE NEWSROOM?


PAGE FOUR
Panel 1:
MJ's in Robbie's Office – he's looking pensive, quiet. Unsure if he should be watching the TV. MJ is rapt, full attention on Spider-Man's fight on the TV.

MJ 1 (THOUGHT): OH, PETER...DON'T...DON'T LET THE RHINO BEAT YOU. THAT DUMB CREEP...

Panel 2:
Close on MJ.

MJ 2: KICK HIS !@$, SPIDEY!!

BOTTOM HALF OF PAGE:

Panel 3:
TAN CAPTION: AND, KEEP IN MIND, AS HARD AS YOU WORK...

Spider-Man's pulling himself up...standing on a beaten-up old dock.

SPIDER-MAN 1: I DON'T THINK RHINO EVEN KNOWS WHERE HE IS LET ALONE WHO'S IN THAT BUILDING...

SPIDER-MAN 2: GOTTA DITCH THESE THINGS ON MY BACK. NO TIME TO CHECK IN ON WATCHER AND AUNT MAY...

Panel 3 INSERT: Spidey's webbed the stuff from his back somewhere safe.

Panel 4:
Spidey's flipped himself atop something (building, truck, street lamp)

SPIDER-MAN 3: AND SOMEONE'S GOTTA STOP THAT MANIAC!!


Panel 5:
He's launched himself from the object...

SPIDER-MAN 4: AND HERE I THOUGHT, WITH MY NEW OUTLOOK, EVERYTHING WAS ABOUT TO GET EASIER!...


PAGE FIVE:
Panel 1:
JJ holding his fists like boxing gloves, watching TV in his office...

TV 1 (ELECTRIC): THIS IS JOHN DELGADO ON THE SCENE IN CHOPPER 6 -- LOOKS LIKE SPIDER-MAN'S FINALLY GETTING THE UPPER-HAND HERE...
TV 2 (ELECTRIC): ...AND MIGHT EVEN HAVE THE RHINO DISPATCHED IN MERE MOMENTS FROM THE LOOKS OF THINGS!

JJJ 1: C'MON, PETE, YOU GOT 'IM...YOU GOT 'IM!

JJJ 2 (small): AND YOU BETTER HAVE GOTTEN SOME GOOD PICTURES TOO!

BOTTOM HALF (or 2/3) OF PAGE:
Panel 3:
Spidey's in the midst of a big spider-leap, about to land right upon The Rhino.

TAN CAPTION: ONLY A SELECT FEW GET BACK FROM LIFE AS MUCH THEY PUT IN.


SPIDER-MAN (THOUGHT) : IF I CAN GET HIM OFF-BALANCE, MAYBE I CAN FINISH 'IM OFF AND CHECK ON MAY!

Panel 4:
He lands with the palm of his hand on the Rhino's head – Rhino's swatting at him.

SPIDER-MAN 2: IS THAT A HORN ON YOUR HEAD, OR ARE YOU JUST HAPPY TO SEE ME, RHINO?

RHINO: NYARGHH!


PAGE SIX:
Full page dedicated to the following action...

Panel 1:
Some bad guys. One holding a gun, two more-dapper-looking fellows holding crossbows aimed at a costumed person we can't quite see in the foreground.

GUN GUY 1: THANKS FOR JOINING US.

PERSON IN FOREGROUND: THIS WAS A TRICK...

GUN GUY 2: YEAH, IT WAS—

Panel 2:
Larger Panel. Angle on The Prowler!

GUN GUY 3: -- PROWLER!

GUN GUY 4: EVERYONE IN THIS CITY'S COLLECTING INFO ON SPIDER-MAN NOW TO TRY AND TURN THE ADVANTAGE. AND YOU THINK WE'RE JUST GONNA HAND WHAT WE'VE GOT OVER TO YOU?

Panel 3:
Dapper guys aiming weapons at Prowler...

DAPPER GUYS (BOTH SPEAKING): NOT HAPPENING, FRIEND!


PAGE SEVEN

Panel 1:
Close on the crossbows firing.

SFX: FWING!

Panel 2:
Prowler, looking fearful, holding up his hands in front of his face...

Panel 3:
The bad guys laughing or smiling...

Panel 4:
The arrows coming right at him...

PROWLER: --DON'T!

BOTTOM HALF OF PAGE
Panel 4-6:

TAN CAPTION: SIMPLY PUT, NO ONE WILL TAKE CARE OF YOU...BUT YOU.

Spidey is leaping and jumping all around Rhino...webbing his eyes, webbing his legs...



PAGE EIGHT
Panel 1:
The arrows have hit his hands and they've bounced off...

Panel 2:
Prowler peeking through his hands.

PROWLER: TOLD YOU BOYS NOT TO!

Panel 3:
Long horizontal panel. Prowler's jumping them

DAPPER GUY 1 – 1: WH- WHAT THE HECK?!

PROWLER 2: NOW – ABOUT THAT INFORMATION!

BOTTOM HALF OF PAGE
Panel 4:
Small panel.
Rhino's webbed-up, eyes covered in webs, hands over his head, webbed, legs together – also webbed. Spidey's reaching for him.

RHINO 1: NYA-NYAAH-NYAARHH!

SPIDER-MAN 1: OK, YOU CUDDLY FELLA, YOU...

Panel 5:
Larger panel. Spidey's lifting Rhino over his head...Rhino's struggling

SPIDER-MAN 2: TIME TO TAKE A—
SPIDER-MAN 3 (THOUGHT): UH-OH!


PAGE NINE
Panel 1:
Long/horizontal panel.
Prowler's got one guy pinned to the wall with his foot out in a side-kick position.

One guy's out cold. The other guy's getting one of the crossbow arrows wrapped around his wrists, like cuffs.

PROWLER: LEARNED LONG AGO, FELLAS...

PROWLER 2: GUY WANTS T' CALL HIMSELF 'PROWLER'? HE'S GOT T' HAVE POWERFUL GAUNTLETS TO CLING TO ALL THEM BIG STONE BUILDINGS IN OUR FAIR CITY.

Panel 2:
(This and next 2 panels can be smaller, 3 across or whatever.)
Close on Prowler now right in face of guy he was holding w/his foot.

PROWLER 3: SLEEP!

Panel 3:
Prowler's knocked the guy out. (Either w/his gauntlet or knocking his head into the wall – I'm not picky, and I don't think the Prowler is either).

Panel 4:
The guy's slumped to the floor – his phone has fallen out of his pocket...

PICTURED ON PHONE: a typical cell phone home page, but at top should be:
NYN NEWS ALERT
Next to it an icon: the Spidey mask.

PROWLER 4 (O.P.) : NOW, WHAT IS--?!

BOTTOM HALF OF PAGE:
Panel 5:
Rhino bursts out of the webbing, with Spidey still holding him above his head.

SPIDER-MAN: GREAT...JUST--

Panel 6:
Rhino falls -- flattens Spidey.

SPIDER-MAN 2 (small): --GREAT.


PAGE TEN
Panel 1:
Est. Airport

CAPTION: Fort Lauderdale, FLORIDA

Panel 2:
An elderly woman is looking up at something.

AIRLINE EMPLOYEE (O.S.) 1: MISS?

Panel 3:

Similar shot but now we can see the airline employee.

AIRLINE EMPLOYEE 2: MISS, UH, WATSON?

Panel 4:
In this panel or previous, we should see the boarding sign reading FLL to NYC/LGA

Employee urging Anna...

AIRLINE EMPLOYEE 3: MISS WATSON, WE CAN BRING YOU ON THE PLANE NOW, AHEAD OF THE OTHER PASSENGERS.

Panel 5:
Aunt Anna PO'd, airline employee defeated...

ANNA WATSON: OH GIVE ME A MOMENT, WOULD YOU? YOU SEE I'M WATCHING THE TELEVISION!


AIRLINE EMPLOYEE 4 (small): YES MA'AM.


BOTTOM HALF (OR THIRD) OF PAGE:
Panel 6:

TAN CAPTION: SO YOU'D BETTER NEVER GIVE UP THE FIGHT. AND NEVER GIVE AN INCH...BECAUSE...

Spider-Man pummels the Rhino, Rhino's stumbling but is still in a rage!


PAGE ELEVEN
Panel 1:
Angle on a board room, several men sit at a table, some are watching a large television at one end – yes, the Spidey/Rhino fight is on it.

Some of the men are looking towards a man in the foreground we cannot see. One of these men is the scientist seen w/the Rhino. Another is a guy we're gonna call PR GUY.

The GGI logo should be visible somewhere as well.

There is a figure in the foreground in silhouette.

SILHOUETTE: ...IF WE GIVE JUST AN INCH...WE'LL LOSE, GENTLEMAN. WHICH IS WHY I OFFER NO APOLOGY FOR BRINGING YOU IN THIS TIME OF NIGHT...I WANT SOLUTIONS BEFORE THE CITY, S.H.I.E.L.D., AND SPIDER-MAN ALL WANT TO TAKE A mile FOR THE INCH WE'VE GIVEN.

silhouette 2: THOUGHTS. NOW!

SCIENTIST (with paperwork strewn in front of him): SIR, OUR TESTS INDICATE HIS...RAMPAGE SHOULD END NATURALLY WITHIN HOURS. AND IT LOOKS AS IF THE PROCEDURE HAS HAD...POSITIVE RESULTS.

PR GUY: IN THE MEANTIME, I'LL HOLD A PRESS CONFERENCE, APOLOGIZE, EXPLAIN WE'LL WORK WITH INSURANCE COMPANIES, THE CITY, ET. AL. TO PAY FOR THE DAMAGE.

SILHOUETTE 3: AND WHAT ABOUT...SPIDER-MAN!

Panel 2:
Close-up of one of the guys that was watching the TV, now he's turned to the Silhouette. He should be seated close to the silhouette (i.e., near his end of the table).

LAWYER: LEGALLY, IT'S BEST IF WE PIN MOST OF THE DAMAGE ON HIS INTERFERENCE. IN OUR PRESS CONFERENCE WE'LL MENTION THAT RHINO'S ESCAPE DREW SPIDER-MAN OUT -- FOR S.H.I.E.L.D.

Panel 3:
The Lawyer's changing form in this panel – is he a Skrull...or just The Chameleon? (I'm not telling!)

lawyer 2: IT'S JUST A START. WITH SPIDER-MAN ON THEIR !%! LIST. WE MAY BE ABLE TO WORK IT TO OUR ADVANTAGE --

Panel 4:
He turns into Tony Stark.

LAWYER 3: -- AND THEY MAY EVEN HAND HIM RIGHT OVER TO US.


BOTTOM OF PAGE:
Panel 5:
Long shot. Spider-Man's still pummeling Rhino. We can see the news copter in this shot. They're hovering above the fight but below a giant construction crane.

RHINO: RYAAH-AARGH!

REPORTER: AFTER A FEW WORRIED MOMENTS, IT LOOKS LIKE SPIDER-MAN'S IN CONTROL OF THIS mêlée AGAIN...



PAGE TWELVE
Top Half: Several close shots on Spidey fighting Rhino; let's keep Rhino only partially visible in these shots – maybe just his head or arms in the shots – that way we can keep the top half/bottom half format going on this page, which is our segue OUT of it...

ARTIST/COLORIST NOTE: SHOULD IT BE GETTING LIGHT OUT?

Panel 1:
SPIDER-MAN: GOT TO END THIS...IT'S GOING ON TOO LONG!

Panel 2:
SPIDER-MAN 2: GOTTA GET TO MAY! NO WAY TO KNOW IF SHE-- IF ANY OF THEM ARE-- NO. CAN'T THINK THAT WAY...

Panel 3:
SPIDER-MAN 3: JUST HAVE TO...

Panel 4:

SPIDER-MAN 4: TAKE...
SPIDER-MAN 5: HIM....

BOTTOM HALF OF PAGE:

Panel 5:
Spidey's clasped both hands together and swung, knocking Rhino across the street. Rhino's fallen (going to fall?) below the giant construction crane seen earlier and that needs to somehow be seen here.

SPIDER-MAN 6 (sfx): DOWN!!


PAGE THIRTEEN
*ARTIST: Break up panels as needed – break the bottom half/top half pattern here.

Panel 1:
Angle in the copter...Behind the copter, the construction crane is breaking.

SFX (near crane): CRK-K-K

REPORTER: THIS IS JOSE DELGADO IN CHOPPER 6 AGAIN. WE'VE RE-FUELED AND ARE BACK, AS CLOSE AS WE CAN GET. AT THIS POINT IT LOOKS LIKE SPIDER-MAN MAY HAVE DEFEATED RHINO...

Panel 2:
The crane is breaking further...

SFX (near crane): CREEEEEK!

REPORTER 2: NOW WE'RE JUST WAITING TO SEE WHAT HAPPENS IN THE AFTERMATH!

Panel 3:
Spidey's looking up toward the copter, he's noticed the crane.

SPIDER-MAN (THOUGHT): THE CRANE! COPTER PILOT DOESN'T SEEM TO NOTICE. I MUST'VE KNOCKED RHINO INTO THE MACHINE'S BASE...

Panel 4:
Spidey's shot his webbing toward the crane...

SPIDER-MAN (THOUGHT) 2: GOTTA WEB IT UP AND CHECK ON AUNT M--

Panel 5:
Rhino's tackled Spidey, hard.

SPIDER-MAN (THOUGHT) 3: !@S%T



PAGE FOURTEEN

Panel 1-3:
Rhino -- still in a wild rage -- is pummeling Spider-Man!

Panel 2 Word Balloon:
Spider-man (THOUGHT): ONE IDEA...

Panel 3 Word Balloon:
Spidey's shooting his webs past Rhino...

SPIDER-MAN (THOUGHT) 2: ...to stop all of this!

Panel 4:
We see the webs have struck the news copter...

REPORTER: SPIDER-MAN, SEEMS TO BE SHOOTING HIS FAMOUS WEBBING WILDLY, NOT EVEN-- UH...

Panel 5:
Close on Reporter.

REPORTER: C-CAN YOU SEE THIS? IT SEEMS SPIDER-MAN IS REELING US IN! I-- (C-can we pull up?) Pull up! DON'T KNOW WHAT's going on, BUT IT'S MORE than THIS REPORTER'S bargained for!


PAGE FIFTEEN:
Panel 1:
Rhino's still on top of Spidey...Spidey's using both his hands, straining hard, pulling in the copter (wrapping the webbing around his wrists as he pulls the copter closer)...

Rhino's pulling back for one good punch in this panel btw.

RHINO 1: RRRRHHH!

SPIDER-MAN 1: NNGGG!

Panel 2:
Rhino has punched but Spidey's caught it, letting one web line loose!

SFX (at web line): SNAP!

RHINO 2: RMPHH!

SPIDER-MAN 2: * NNG! * NO LUCK * NG * RHINEY!

Panel 3:

We really see Spidey straining hard, pulling the copter in with one arm.

Panel 4:
Wider shot now, the crane has snapped, falling just behind the copter...

SFX: CREEE-EEEEECHHH!

REPORTER: WHAT TH--?! A CRANE JUST MISSED US! IF SPIDER-MAN WAS SAVING US, HE'S DONE IT...BUT WHY HE ISN'T LETTING GO, I JUST DON'T KNOW!

Panel 5:
Spider-Man's still pulling the copter in. He's got Rhino's arm by the wrist, using it to block a punch from Rhino's free hand.

And, still, he's pulling the copter in...

SPIDER-MAN: RRGG! NOT HAPPENING, RHINO! I'VE GOT...PLACES...TO BE!


Page sixteen

Panel 1:
One small, close shot, of Spider-Man pulling on that web line one more time, with great difficulty.

SPIDER-MAN 1: GRAHHH!!

Panel 2:
LARGER Panel here.

Rhino's still over Spider-Man. Spidey's still holding Rhino's arm as Rhino's again cocked back his free hand. But Rhino's frozen, looking up in the shot. Why? Well, JUST a few feet above Rhino the News Helicopter is hovering!

The webbing is taught, unraveling in the middle – it can't take the strain. We can see the reporter and a cameraman leaning out of the copter – both stunned! The pilot is doing his best to keep 'er steady (assuming we can see the pilot)

SFX (near copter blades): WHP WHP WHP WHP WHP WHP WHP

SPIDER-MAN: UMMM...BYE!

Panel 3:
Small. Close on Spidey's hand releasing the webbing.

Panel 4:
Small. Close on his other hand shooting a web behind Rhino's head...


PAGE SEVENTEEN
Panel 1:
Large panel, left side of page.
The copter is shooting upwards, Spidey hanging from the new web line, waving to Rhino as he goes up w/the copter!

Panel 2:
* ARTIST: This and following panels can go down right side of page.

Spidey's hopped to a ski of the copter and is crouched down...

SPIDER-MAN (THOUGHT) 1: FEELS LIKE THE PILOT'S GOT 'ER UNDER CONTROL...NOW, FOR MY NEXT TRICK!

Panel 3:
Spidey shoots his webbing back down at Rhino.

Panel 4:
ANGLE ON Rhino, looking up as webbing grabs him.

Panel 5:
Rhino's been yanked upwards...
* ARTIST: play these last two panels for comedy


PAGE EIGHTEEN
Panel 1:
Inside the copter:

REPORTER: WE ARE BEING TOSSED AROUND LIKE TWO TONS OF RECALLED BEEF! And ALL WE KNOW IS that SPIDER-MAN IS—

Panel 2:
Rhino appears now just outside the open door of the copter – screaming at them.

RHINO: GRAHHH!!

Reporter and Cameraman are panic-stricken.

REPORTER & CAMERAMAN: GYAAHHH!

Panel 3:
Outside the copter – Spidey's propping up the Rhino towards the copter's blades! (He could be sticking to the side of the copter or still on a ski)...

SPIDER-MAN 1: OOOPSIE-DAZIE!

Panel 4:
Close shot or inset:

The blades are chopping Rhino's horns at the top of his costume...basically, he's being skinned!


PAGE NINETEEN
Panel 1:
Spidey's hopped off the copter, onto a building.

Panel 2:
Close on Spidey and Rhino – we can see the top of Rhino's head b/c the costume's been torn away.

SPIDER-MAN (TO RHINO): NIGHT-NIGHT!

Panel 3:
Close on Rhino and Spider-Man's hand.

Spidey shoves Rhino, head-first, into a brick wall, knocking him out!

Panel 4:
Inside Copter, the city coming at them fast!

REPORTER 1: ...SPIDER-MAN DESTROYED THE BLADES THEN DESERTED US, AND WE'RE GOING DOWN FAST!

Panel 5:
Spidey's peeks down into the windshield from the roof outside. The city street is not rushing at them quite so quickly any longer...

SPIDER-MAN: OH, I WOULDN'T SAY THAT!

Panel 6:
Larger panel here: the copter has large web-wings on it. Spidey's also created some reigns with his webbing and is steering the copter with them!



PAGE TWENTY
ARTIST: Sun's coming up or is up?

Panel 1:
Medium panel.
Angle on Spidey "driving" the copter.

SPIDER-MAN 1: TAKE 'ER IN RIGHT DOWN HERE, AND THEN I CAN FINALLY SEE IF ALL'S OK WITH MAY AND WATCHER!

Panel 2:
Medium Panel.
Spidey's let go of the reigns (is he in the air, jumping AHEAD of the copter?) and shoots his webbing again...

SPIDER-MAN (THOUGHT): GOTTA ADMIT, I'M HAPPY TO HAVE NATURAL WEBBING! COULD NEVER HAVE DONE ALL THIS WITH JUST A FEW CARTRIDGES OF WEB FLUID IN A WEB-SHOOTER!

Panel 3:
Larger panel.
The copter's landed safely, a few feet above the ground, in a web Spider-Man made. He's jumping up into the building damaged by Rhino at the start – the one where May and Watcher were and might still be!

REPORTER (O.P.): WE'VE LANDED SAFELY, THANK HEAVEN, BUT I FINALLY UNDERSTAND WHERE J. JONAH JAMESON WAS COMING FROM ALL THESE YEARS – THAT SPIDER IS A MENA--

Panel 4:
Smaller panel. Close on reporter indicating something O.P., and talking to his cameraman...

REPORTER: HOLY--! ARE YOU GETTING THIS?

Panel 5:
Medium or small panel.
Spidey's at a window sill now, facing inside building, calling out...

SPIDER-MAN: WATCHER? WATCHER!!

Panel 6:
Medium or small panel...

SPIDER-MAN (THOUGHT) 2: BUILDING'S FALLING APART...BETTER TO TAKE A QUICK LOOK AROUND AND BE SURE THEY'VE LEFT...

PAGE TWENTY-ONE
Eight panels across top half of page. Each one an extreme close on each character, in the order below....

Panel 1:
SPIDER-MAN: IF THEY'RE IN HERE, I'VE ONLY GOT MINUTES!

Panel 2:
FLASH (eyes wide): OH NO...SPIDEY, WHAT'RE...

Panel 3:
MJ (eyes wide): ...YOU DOING? DON'T YOU KNOW...

Panel 4:
JJ (concerned): ...WHAT'S RIGHT BEHIND YOU?

Panel 5:
PROWLER: LOOKS LIKE TROUBLE, SPIDEY...

Panel 6:
AUNT ANNA: ...BUT I'LL BE THERE SOON...

Panel 7:
SCIENTIST: ...AND THEN YOUR WHOLE WORLD...

Panel 8:
SILHOUETTE: ...WILL BE TURNED UP-SIDE DOWN!
SILHOUETTE 2 (small): HEHHEHEH!


BOTTOM HALF OF PAGE:
Panel 9:
The entire building is crumbling around Spider-Man!! He's helplessly falling amidst the debris!

SFX: FRRKKRROOOM!!


PAGE TWENTY-TWO
SPLASH PANEL.

Spider-Man is laying amidst the debris of the building, trying to push himself up.

Behind him, amidst the clearing smoke we see...

THE THUNDERBOLTS!

Moonstone, Swordsman (now Baron Strucker?), Penance, Radioactive Man, Songbird, and Venom (Boy, hope I've got that roster right!)!

Venom is swishing a scorpion-like tail back and forth.

MOONSTONE: I'D THINK A SUPERHERO GENIUS WOULD KNOW...IT'S NOT SUCH A BRIGHT IDEA TO BE ON T.V. WHEN YOU'RE WANTED!

VENOM: AND, OHH, DO WE WANT YOU!

SPIDER-MAN (small): AUNT...M-MAYYYyY....

CAPTION: BECAUSE THE RHINO, A MYSTERIOUS SHAPE-CHANGER (THE CHAMELEON?...OR SOMETHING FAR MORE NEFARIOUS?), AND AN EVIL CORPORATION WITH AN EVIL SCIENTIST AND MYSTERIOUS EVIL LEADER ISN'T ENOUGH, I HAD TO BRING YOU:
THUNDERBOLTS VS. SPIDER-MAN!
in IT'S A JUNGLE IN HERE - PART 2!

SEE YOU SOON, TIGER!

Amazing Spider-Man 550:
SPECIAL DOUBLE-SIZED ANNIVERSARY ISSUE!! THIS IS THE ISSUE YOU'VE BEEN WAITING FOR!
NOTE: I started rewriting w/issue 545 -- SCROLL DOWN (or search this page with ctrl + F) to see it...and see the set-up for the NEW ENEMIES, old friends, the fight w/The Thunderbolts, The Rhino, a confrontation w/J. Jonah Jameson, plus a battle with SHIELD and a face-to-face with Iron Man!

Amazing Spider-Man 550:
SPECIAL DOUBLE-SIZED ANNIVERSARY ISSUE!! STUNNERS & SHOCKERS THROUGHOUT!  THE MIDDLE WILL BLOW YOU AWAY! THE ENDING WILL MAKE YOU PEE YOUR PANTS!!!

Please note: I post ALL drafts as I finish them. This is a 3rd draft which does need some tweaking...

It's a Jungle in Here Part 3 (aka, "No More Day!" [heh-heh]):
PAGE ONE:
SPLASH:
Extreme close of a manic, horrific face with round, bulging eyes, pointy nose...and wide, deranged grin.

It looks like Green Goblin...but the color's a little off...

SFX: HEH...HEH-HA! HEH HA-HAHAHAHAHAHAHAAA-AHAH!

TAN CAPTION: IN LIFE, ONE NEVER REMOVES HIS MASK – AT LEAST, NOT UNTIL LIFE HAS ALL BUT PASSED ONE BY.

That's our narrator from Part 1 -- revealed to be our ever-silhouetted mysterious bad guy -- returning here (again, captions do not have to be colored TAN, it's just a way to differentiate from regular captions without stating a name...a better color can be determined later):

TITLES/CREDITS:
IT'S A JUNGLE IN HERE! PART 3
Writer: Keith Planit
Artist: ?
Letters: ?
Dedicated to: Lee, Ditko, Roger Stern, David Michelinie, Ron Frenz, Peter David, Bob Layton, JRJR, Klaus Janson, Josef Rubenstein, Jim "Priest" Owsley, Todd McFarlane, and Bill Mantlo. (And a special thanks to all the folks who put Marvel Comics history up on Wikipedia!)

PAGE TWO:
Half-Splash:

Nighttime...

We get a better look at this creepy fella. He is NOT The Green Goblin. He's dressed like what can only be described as a dapper zombie in crumbling clothes, and he's flying on a mechanical apparatus which is most decidedly NOT a Goblin Glider. But it's powerful and creepy nonetheless.

Behind him, two other people follow (on their flying machines of some sort), but at a distance – they're in silhouette.

All three are causing havoc above the NYC streets!

CAPTION 1: IN THE NEW YORK CITY SKIES...

TAN CAPTION: WE TELL OURSELVES, WE MUST PUT ON A FACE, PUT UP A FRONT...

TAN CAPTION 2: IT'S ALL JUST A TRICK OF THE MIND...

CAPTION (next to the Goblin-like character) 2: TRICK.

Panel 2:
We've panned down here. The three from the panel above, are passing over the "camera." On the street, decomposing fingers are seen coming through a loosened manhole cover. NOTE: the metal of the cover, near the fingers, should appear rusted and crumbling.

TAN CAPTION 3: AND WE CAN ONLY DO THE BEST WE CAN DO. EXISTENCE IS CRUEL.

Panel 3:
CAPTION 3: ON THE NEW YORK CITY STREETS.

TAN CAPTION 4: YOU MUST ALWAYS BE SEARCHING FOR THE GOOD IN LIFE. BECAUSE LIFE GIVES YOU NOTHING.

Here, we reveal what's coming through the manhole: another masked madman...this mask looks like a frowning decomposing pumpkin – with grubs crawling out of the oozing holes all around it.

CAPTION 4: TREAT.

In this panel, he's tossed the manhole into a store-front. Someone is ducking out of the way of crumbling glass.

Panel 4:
Running along the rooftop is another guy. Simple, burly. A hazy blue moon, with craters (part of his face or the mask?...), covers half his face. He is in a complete face/body mask that is otherwise white.

CAPTION 5: ATOP NEW YORK CITY ROOFTOPS.

TAN CAPTION 5: BUT FINDING THE GOOD ISN'T ALWAYS SO EASY. LIFE'S DARK TURNS TEND TO SHROUD THOSE DAYS WHICH SHINE BRIGHT...

CAPTION 6: BLUE ECLIPSE.

Panel 5:
The five new villains are converging, coming together....people in the street are running...

TAN CAPTION 6: BUT, THEY SAY, WHEN IT RAINS IT POURS...

PAGE THREE:
SPLASH:
We now see the entire group.

TAN CAPTION 1: AND WHEN ONE THING GOES YOUR WAY...IT OFTEN SEEMS LIKE EVERYTHING ELSE WILL FOLLOW...

The other vile foes who were silhouetted before are: a female with a metallic mask which looks like it is in a tearful, perpetual scream....

CAPTION 1: HALLOW'S EVE.

...And another of this team, whose face is hidden by what looks like the dying leaves of a corn stalk. For the rest of the costume, he's somewhere between The Green Goblin and DC's The Scarecrow...He carries a decaying, but still useful, scythe.

CAPTION 2: HARVEST.



TAN CAPTION 2: AND, OH, WILL IT EVER!

PAGE FOUR:
Panel 1:
Large panel (Vertical 1/3-page panel?):
Spider-Man screaming, captured, clearly in torment!

CAPTION: A LAB – WEST SIDE, NYC.

SPIDER-MAN 1: AAAIGGEEAHH!!

Panel 2:
Unless you reveal it in panel 1, we should see here that Spidey is:
1. In the lab of Dr. Ernest T. Wretched (from previous issues).
2. In the same machine Rhino and Gargan were strapped to in previous issues.
3. Finding himself not just strapped-in at his wrists, legs, and waist, but his Spider-spikes should be sticking out of his wrists, and those are nailed down as well...

Panel 3:
We see Venom overseeing the goings-on. He's wearing a headset. (Yup! He's trying [pretending] to be part of the establishment now -- so he's gotta answer to folks...)

Panel 4:
Dr. Wretched is very pleased, he's moving a lever or turning a dial of some sort....
(ARTIST: split this into 2 panels, if panel 1 shows all the things listed for panel 2).

PAGE FIVE:
Panel 1-2:
Small panels – large needles from over-sized syringes, slide into Spidey's neck.

Panel 3:
Angle on a computer monitor showing Spidey's raising heart-rate.

Panel 4/5:
Angle on a computer monitor displaying a clear decline in "Superhuman Levels" (bleh -- need a better name [working on it])

Panel 6:
VENOM: WRETCHED, EXPLAIN THIS 'SUPERHUMAN' MONITOR.

WRETCHED 1: OH, IT'S SO SIMPLE, TRULY. SEE, THAT IS MEASURING HIS STRENGTH ABOVE AND BEYOND THOSE OF A NORMAL MAN OF HIS SIZE AND WEIGHT. IT'S A TEMPORARY DETERIORATION MOSTLY...

Panel 7:
Venom has his finger pressed to the earphone of his headset.

WRETCHED 2: ...MERELY A SYMPTOM OF THE ALTERATIONS BEING MADE TO HIS ACTUAL DNA.

VENOM (small; into headset): YESSS, OSBORN, HE'S EXPLAINING IT ALL TO US NOW.

PANEL 8:
Close on Dr. Wretched...

WRETCHED 3: THE STRESS ON THE BODY IS GREAT. YOU, GARGAN, DID NOT FEEL IT, BECAUSE OF THE SYMBIOTE'S INFLUENCE. BUT YOU, LIKE RHINO –

VENOM (small): WE ARE VENOM.

PANEL 9:
Closer on Dr. Wretched...

WRETCHED 4: -- HAVE FOUND YOUR ANIMALISTIC SIDES COMPLETELY REMOVED. HEH-EH.

PAGE SIX:
Panels: ARTIST: lay out as you see fit.

CAPTION: RENTED WAREHOUSE – 1 CITY BLOCK FROM THE LAB:

In a dark room, PR Guy, the shape-shifter we've seen previously, and our mysterious villain are gathered....

TAN CAPTION: TAKING CONTROL OF ONE'S LIFE IS OFTEN THE HARDEST THING TO DO.

SILHOUETTE 1: THE HALLOWEEN GANG?

LAWYER (SHAPE-SHIFTER) 1: SCOURING THE CITY FOR HER.

SILHOUETTE 2: THE NEW ONE – WHAT'RE WE CALLING IT?

PR GUY 1: WE'RE LOOKING AT 'GENUS.' AND WRETCHED FEELS VERY CONFIDENT THE SUBJECT WILL TAKE TO THE DNA-JUSTMENT.

TAN CAPTION 2: IT IS A STRUGGLE WE ALL FACE – DO WE CONTROL LIFE VS. LIFE CONTROLING US.

SILHOUETTE 3: HM. I NEED AN ETA.

PR GUY 2: IT'S ALREADY IN THE PROCESS...BUT HE'S CONCENTRATING ON THE SPIDER-MAN AT THE MOMENT, SIR.

TAN CAPTION 3: THE ANSWER IS NEVER CLEAR. SO ONE'S ACTIONS MUST MAKE IT CLEAR.

SILHOUETTE 4: BE THOROUGH WITH SPIDER-MAN. I'M NOT TERRIBLY CONCERNED WITH THE SUCCESS OR FAILURE OF GENUS...MERELY AN INTERESTING EXPERIMENT.

TAN CAPTION 4: SOMETIMES, THE ONLY WAY TO FIND THAT ANSWER, IS TO STARE DEATH SQUARE IN THE FACE.

LAWYER & PR GUY: NOTED, SIR.

TAN CAPTION 5: AND THOUGH DEATH MAY WIN, SOMETIMES, YOU CAN CRAWL OUT OF THE MUCK AND STRETCH STRIATED FINGERS TOWARDS THE HAND OF FATE.

SILHOUETTE 5: AND BE CERTAIN IT LOOKS LIKE THE THUNDERBOLTS WERE DIRECTLY INVOLVED IN THIS GENUS EXPERIMENT.

LAWYER: OF COURSE.

PR GUY: ON IT, SIR.

SILHOUETTE 6: AND, ON OCCASION, FATE MAY GIVE YOU A GOOD OL' SHOVE IN THE RIGHT DIRECTION.

Right here let's give him a wide Green Goblin-like grin in the darkness (he's otherwise still unrecognizable):

SILHOUETTE 7: AHH. ANOTHER DAY, ANOTHER DEMISE.
SILHOUETTE 8 (connected): OFF WITH YOU ALL.

PAGE SEVEN-EIGHT:
Artist: lay out as nec.
EST. SHOT: hallway of a small motel. One door is open; a powder-blue piece of luggage outside the door.

CAPTION: IRT MOTEL – MID-TOWN WEST NYC:

AUNT ANNA (O.P.) 1 : I'M OKAY, MJ, YOU SHOULD PROBABLY GO.

MJ (O.P.) 1 :AUNT ANNA, IT'S FINE.


AUNT ANNA 2: I JUST DON'T WANT...TO CAUSE ANY TROUBLE.

MJ 2 : ANNA, REALLY. IT'S FINE...


MJ 3 : ...BESIDES, I NEED SOME FAMILY BY MY SIDE. I- I FEEL LIKE EVERYTHING IS JUST...BARELY HANGING ON.

ANNA 3: EXPLAIN WHAT YOU MEAN, M.J.


MJ 4 : *SIGH* WHERE PETER AND I ARE NOW...IT'S LIKE WE'VE GOT EVERYTHING WE WANT FROM EACH OTHER...AND THAT WE, AS A COUPLE, CAN SURVIVE ANYTHING. AND, FROM WHAT I UNDERSTAND, EVEN AUNT MAY'S CONDITION IS SLOWLY IMPROVING...
MJ 5 (connected): ...BUT, WITH THAT....


MJ 6 : ...WE'VE SUDDENLY BEEN GIVEN SO MANY MORE WORRIES. FROM S.H.I.E.L.D., THIS TRIAL FOR PETER'S CRIMES...WE STILL NEED A PLACE TO LIVE, WE'RE FUGITIVES. AND LET'S NOT FORGET THE DEVIL'S WARNING....

AUNT ANNA 4: THE WHAT'S WHAT?

MJ 7 : NOTHING. I'M JUST GLAD YOU'RE HERE IS ALL I'M TRYING TO SAY.

AUNT ANNA 5: THEN LET ME ASK ONE, LITTLE QUESTION...

AUNT ANNA 6: IF YOU TWO ARE FUGITIVES, WASN'T IT DANGEROUS FOR YOU TO MEET ME AND CHECK ME INTO THE MOTEL?

Artist: Exterior of hotel. (Maybe we see MJ and/or Anna through window?) Outside, strategically placed, we see Luke Cage, Wolverine and Echo....

MJ 8 : OH. WELL-L-L...I'VE HAD A FEW ANGELS WATCHING OVER MY SHOULDER.

PAGE NINE-TEN:
ARTIST: lay out as you see fit.

EST. NYC precinct building.

CAPTION: 1^st PRECINCT – FINANCIAL DISTRICT – DOWNTOWN NYC.

DETECTIVE 1 (O.P.) : WHAT'S THE WORD?

DETECTIVE 2 (O.P.): CAPTAIN SAYS S.H.I.E.L.D. ASKS WE 'RESPECT THE MASK.' %!@$! SO I GUESS IT STAYS ON.

We're in a specialized holding room. A logo on the wall: SuperHuman Objector Task-force – S.H.O.T. (This seemed better than SuperHuman Investigation Task-force).

Angle on The Prowler in an interrogation room; he's restrained in those oversized cuffs villains in The Vault are often seen in; these cuffs are chained to the floor. Two police detectives are around him Det. 1 is very laid-back, a black man; Det. 2 is anxious, a little overbearing (male, female – it doesn't matter. But burly.).

DETECTIVE 1 -Balloon2: ALRIGHT...SO GIVE ON WHAT WAS HAPPENING DOWN THERE.

PROWLER 1: SAW IT ON THE NEWS IS ALL. SPIDER-MAN WAS IN TROUBLE...I CAME DOWN, HELPED.

DETECTIVE 2 -Balloon2: PROBLEM IS, SPIDER-MAN'S A KNOWN FUGITIVE!

DETECTIVE 1 -Balloon3: BUT YOU SEEMED TO BE FLYING UNDER THE RADAR UNTIL YOU JUMPED IN ON THIS MESS.

DETECTIVE 2 - 3: YOU HAD TO KNOW THAT WAS GONNA HAPPEN. THAT YOU'D BE MARKED AFTER THIS.

DETECTIVE 1 - 4: HAD TO KNOW.

PROWLER 2 : HAD A FEELING.

DETECTIVE 2 - 4: LISTEN, S.H.I.E.L.D.'S COMING HERE FOR YOU WHETHER YOU TELL US THE WHOLE STORY OR NOT. IT'D JUST BE EASIER IF YOU GAVE IT TO US...

DETECTIVE 1 - 5: BE A LOT EASIER.

Somewhere in here, we need to see a small tool has popped out from Prowler's boot.

DETECTIVE 2 - 5: WERE YOU TRYING TO AIDE AND ABET THE FUGITIVE?

DETECTIVE 1 - 6: MAYBE HE THOUGHT THE THUNDERBOLTS WERE BAD GUYS.

DETECTIVE 2 - 6: DID YOU RECOGNIZE THE THUNDERBOLTS ON THE SCENE? WERE YOU TRYING TO TAKE DOWN GOVERNMENT AGENTS?

Prowler's working the plate on the floor, the one the chain leads to...the plate's loosening thanks to the tool in his boot...

DETECTIVE 2 - 7: !@$%! YOU TALK TO 'IM – HE SOUNDS LIKE A BROTHER ANYWAYS.

DETECTIVE 1 - 7: I WAS AN ONLY CHILD.

DETECTIVE 2 - 8: YOU KNOW WHAT I MEAN!

DETECTIVE 1 - 8: SADLY, I DO.

DETECTIVE 1 - 9: LISTEN, CRAWLER—

PROWLER 3: PROWLER.

DETECTIVE 1 - 10: RIGHT. LISTEN. S.H.I.E.L.D.'LL BE HERE RIGHT QUICK. WE HAVE A CHOICE, TO TELL 'EM YOU'RE COOPERATING OR TELL 'EM YOU'VE BEEN TROUBLE.

DETECTIVE 1 - 10: I'D LIKE TO TELL 'EM YOU'VE BEEN COOPERATING.

DETECTIVE 1: ...

DETECTIVE 2 - 9: AW, F'R CHISSAKES. ALLA THE HEROES BEEN ACTIN' LIKE CRIMINALS LATELY...AND THIS ONE'S NOT GONNA BE ANY DIFFERENT.

Detective 2 storms out.

DETECTIVE 1 (small): FRIEND? I CAN ONLY STALL FOR SO MUCH LONGER HERE WHILE YOU WORK THAT PLATE ON THE FLOOR. SO IF YOU'RE GONNA BOLT, MAKE IT FAST, HM?

Close on Prowler. It's pretty clear he's smiling under that mask.


PAGE ELEVEN-THIRTEEN:
ARTIST: lay out as you see fit

Another Detective. A regular interrogation room. Watcher – the one meant to be looking out for Aunt May per previous issues – sits there, arms cuffed behind his back.

The detective is laying into him, hard...

DETECTIVE 3: I WANT TO KNOW NOW WHO THE !%@ YOU ARE! I WANT TO KNOW WHY THE !@$!H% YOU WERE HELPING SPIDER-MAN, AND WHAT YOU EXPECTED TO GET FROM IT!

DETECTIVE 3: BECAUSE, AT THIS POINT, FELLA, THE ONLY THING YOU'RE GETTING IS TIME IN A HOLDING CELL, A MEETING WITH A JUDGE, AND AS MUCH MORE TIME IN A CELL I CAN GET THEM TO GIVE YOU FOR AIDING AND ABETTING, NEVER MIND ASSAULTING AN OFFICER!

WATCHER: WHUT?! I DI'N'T TOUCH YOU, MAN!

The officer grabs the arm off of a nearby wooden chair and smacks himself right on the side of his head...he's now red and a little bloody. He puts the arm of the chair back.

Detective 2 enters in next panel...

DETECTIVE 3: YOU GOT ANYTHING TO SAY YET, AMIGO?

Next panel:

Detectives 2 and 3 are facing each other...

DETECTIVE 2: AW, WHAT THE !@!$@, DONALD, YOU SMACK YOURSELF WITH THE ARM OF THE CHAIR AGAIN?

DETECTIVE 3: ...
DETECTIVE 3 - 2 (connected/small): HE HIT ME. GUY'S, LIKE, SUPER-STRONG.

DETECTIVE 2 - 2: OUT.

He exits.

DETECTIVE 2 - 3: LISTEN, YOUR FINGERPRINTS, YOUR FACE, NOTHING ABOUT YOU IS IN A COMPUTER OR REGISTERS WITH ANYONE WE KNOW. IF YOU'RE A NEW HERO IN TOWN, REGISTER. MAKE THIS EASY.

DETECTIVE 2 – 4: IF YOU'RE RUNNING SOME OTHER SCAM, WE'RE GONNA GET YOU SHUT DOWN FAST...BECAUSE THE SUPER-FREAKS'LL COME IN, AND WE'LL TURN A BLIND EYE.

Angle on Watcher, silent.

WATCHER: AND IF I REGISTER?

DETECTIVE 2 – 5: YOU MIGHT GET A CALL FROM S.H.I.E.L.D., SOME PROPER TRAINING, AND BE ASSIGNED TO THE INTIATIVE.

WATCHER 2: AND IF I GOT A MISSION OF MERCY HERE IN THE CITY?

DETECTIVE 2 – 6: !H%T! IS THAT SOME SORTA CODE FOR A REVENGE KILL?

WATCHER 3: NO. IT'S WHAT IT IS. I'M LOOKIN' AFTER AN OLD LADY. RELATED TO A 'SUPER.'

DETECTIVE 2 - 7: YOU MESSIN' WITH ME?

WATCHER 4: NOT YET...

WATCHER 5: BY THE WAY, YOUR BUDDY THINKS I'M MEXICAN. AND HE'S NUTS.

DETECTIVE 2 – 8: I KNOW.
DETECTIVE 2 – 9 (connected): ...YOU REGISTERING?

Close on Watcher. Evil grin.

WATCHER 6: HEY, GOT NO REASON NOT TO...AMIGO!

PAGE FOURTEEN:
ARTIST: lay out as you see fit.

We're back in the lab of Dr. Wretched.

Needles from Spidey's neck are being retracted...

The Superhuman Levels are falling slowly on that monitor.

Spidey's struggling, breathing heavy and hard.

The web-spikes coming from his wrists are cracking, crumbling...but the nails holding them to the platform are still holding!

Spider-Man's trying to free his arms...

He makes a fist and shoots webbing from one wrist...

His webbing gums up the mechanical works of the retracting needles...

He continues to shoot webbing from his wrists, but the amount is less...until there's none.

PAGE FIFTEEN:
ARTIST: lay out as you see fit.

Spider-Man is wide-eyed and panicked at the lack of webbing coming from his wrist. In this shot we can see the web-spikes have almost completely deteriorated.

ANGLEON: Dr. Wretched trying to pull the webbing off of the retracting parts which held one needle. The apparatus whirring and stalling...

SFX (by mechanical joint in machinery): wrhhhhh!

WRETCHED: CURSED ARACHNID-MAN!  IT'S NOT YET DONE!
WRETCHED (small): CAN'T SHUT HER DOWN NOW! IT'S NOT YET DONE!  HAVE TO FIX IT...HAVE TO FIX IT!! NOT YET DONE!

Spidey turns his head toward the other wrist.

A shot of webbing shoots out.

This shot gums up the mechanical pieces retracting the other needle.

WRETCHED: NOO!

The web-spikes now dissipate completely...With the spikes no longer there, Spider-Man finally has a little room to maneuver his hands: bending hishand at the wrist, he grabs hold of the restraints over each wrist –

Spidey crumbles them and screams...

SPIDER-MAN: NYAAGRRHHH!!

PAGE SIXTEEN:
Panel 1:
Venom's tossed his headset aside and jumps at Spider-Man...

Panel 2:
Spidey's reached back, yanked the needles off the apparatus which still hover above him.

Panel 3:
Larger panel.
Venom in the air at Spidey, Spidey swinging his fists down as hard as he can, stabbing the needles into Venom's back (or lats)...

Panel 4:
Larger panel.  Spidey hops over Venom, runs to the boarded-up exit Rhino created some issues earlier, kicks it open...

Panel 5:
He's removed his mask, turned toward the Doctor. He's a sweaty, red-faced, clearly exahausted – and unshaven mess...but he still has room for a twinkle-eyed smirk...

PETER: WE'RE GONNA HAVE TO GET TOGETHER AGAIN – REAL SOON!  AND I PROMISE, DOCTOR...

Panel 6:
ANGLE INTO The lab from outside: Spidey's leaping out of sight. Inside, we see a pained Venom doubled-over...and a clearly distraught Dr. Wretched...

PETER 2: WE DEFINITELY WILL!

PAGE SEVENTEEN:

Panel 1-2:
Spidey atop the roofs, running, jumping, etc.

Panel 3:
He comes to a rest, sitting back on a rooftop against the wall. He's still unmasked....

PETER (small): WOO-OOH!

PETER 2 (thought): WHATEVER THAT WAS...IT PACKED A WOLLOP. 

Panel 4:
Peter's looking down at his gloved hands...

PETER 3 (thought): AND I'M NOT SO SURE I LIKED WHAT I SAW....

Panel 5:
He's aimed his hands in web-shooting form...

Panel 6:
Hands still out, wrists aimed...

PETER 4: THWIP?...
PETER 5 (connected): NOTHING... NO WEBBING. 
BUT-- WAITAMINUTE...

PAGE EIGHTEEN:
Panel 1:
He's looking over the edge of the building into a dark alley.

PETER (THOUGHT): THE NIGHT VISION'S GONE TOO.

Panel 2:
He's spun to the metal door which leads to the stairs within the building he's on and has pulled the door off.

PETER 2 (thought): STILL FEEL LIKE I'VE GOT MY STRENGTH...WELL, MOSTLY.

Panel 3:
Peter's trying to put the door back.

PETER 3: HM. TIMES LIKE THESE I COULD USE HEAT VISION...

Panel 4:
PETER4 (thought): OKAY, BACK TO THE TASK AT HAND. I WATCHED MY CRAZYWEB-SPIKES DISSIPATE, MY WEBBING'S GONE, MY STRENGTH SLIGHTLYDEPLETED....

PETER5 (thought): I THINK I KNOW WHAT'S HAPPENED HERE – BUT I CAN'T BE SURE WITHOUT SOME TESTS...AND THERE'S ONLY ONE PLACE I CAN DO THAT WITHOUT DISTRACTION...

Panel 5:
Spidey's taken several big leaps north...